Wikipedia:Peer review/Eosinophilia/archive1

Eosinophilia

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I have decided to list this article for peer review after a major rewrite. I would like to expand further, but due to time constraints I could use some help. All comments are appreciated, but I mostly would like to expand the article in preparation for a future GA review.

Thanks, Ronk01 talk 19:04, 6 October 2010 (UTC)

• Hi, I do not think this article is developed to the point that it would qualify for a peer review yet ("Wikipedia's peer review process ... is intended for high-quality articles that have already undergone extensive work, often as a way of preparing a featured article candidate. ... For feedback on articles that are less developed, use the article's talk page or requests for feedback."). One major failing to me is that the article fails to explain what Eosinophilia is or present its importance to us readers. The key to an effective article is to write something that tells the reader what it is, how important it is, the history behind it, and whatever is deemed important about a medical subject. For an article here on Wikipedia, it is also helpful to write it in terms that would be understood by most people instead of being comprehensible to medical students. I think WP:MEDICINE's Featured Articles and their Manual of Style (WP:MEDMOS) are helpful examples and guides on how to proceed. Come back to peer review when the article is more fleshed out. Jappalang (talk) 01:44, 13 October 2010 (UTC)