Wikipedia:Peer review/Endometrial cancer/archive1
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I've been working on this one for awhile and am looking for a mid-development/pre-GAN review. Any thoughts would be welcome. Thanks, Keilana|Parlez ici 01:11, 27 July 2014 (UTC)
- Well done for tackling this topic, Keilana. Some general advice and pointers. JFW | T@lk 20:40, 31 July 2014 (UTC)
- I would expand all technical terms (e.g. pyometra) on first use. (The pyometra article is mostly about veterinary medicine, by the way!)
Done
- I would move lifetime risk from "Risk factors" to "Epidemiology".
Done
- The "Pathophysiology" section is exclusively about molecular biology but doesn't say a lot about how this leads to proliferation, invasion, metastasis. For the lay leader this may be confusing. I am not sure how much there is to say about the tumour microenvironment, but it might need covering.
Done, I think.
- The term "evaluate" is rarely used in British English and perhaps an Atlantically neutral term might work better.
Done
- Would the "classification" section be more effective if it was presented in the form of a table?
- @Jfdwolff: I'm not sure what you mean by that, but I did write a brief intro paragraph explaining the difference in tumors. What kind of table were you thinking? Keilana|Parlez ici 19:30, 10 August 2014 (UTC)
- The same applies to the FIGO staging.
Done
- In the "surgery" section, the reason for performing mastectomy in type II cancers is not explained. Presumably this is prophylactic?
- Yes it is.
Done
- Yes it is.
- In "add on therapy", which tumor marker is associated with endometrial cancer? Is this a reference to Ca125?
- Yes it is but that information got shuffled elsewhere and makes much more sense now.
- I would integrate "Complications of treatment" with discussions about the respective treatments.
Done
- "Treatment of recurrences" is technically palliation rather than cure, and perhaps this should be emphasised.
Done
- Some of the references are not secondary sources (e.g. much of the "Quality of life" subsection).
- I think I got them all.
- I would expand all technical terms (e.g. pyometra) on first use. (The pyometra article is mostly about veterinary medicine, by the way!)
Thank you so very much for this review! It was incredibly helpful. Keilana|Parlez ici 19:30, 10 August 2014 (UTC)