Wikipedia:Peer review/Ellen van Dijk/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I tried to improve the article a lot. Besides changes in text I made a few choises. I inserted all the results of National, European and World championships in two tables. I removed the results in these championships out of the list of major achievements, and I made criterea for the list of major achievements.
Thanks, Sander.v.Ginkel (talk) 18:16, 1 May 2012 (UTC)
Lemonade51 comments -- Thank you for work on this article; at present this is a short one. I suggest before you nominate this for WP:GAC, it must be expanded so I recommend you take the time to look for more information.
- Instead of brackets for her nickname in the WP:LEAD, use quotation marks → Eleonora "Ellen" van Dijk
- No need to put a citation in the lead, you can remove it.
- The lead must provide a summary of the whole article. In this case, although the reader knows about her achievements, there is nothing about her early years.
- For inspiration, take a look at other cycling profile articles, which are related to your topic. I would recommend Alberto Contador , Erik Gjems-Onstad or Ian Browne (cyclist).
- Is there nothing you can find about van Dijk's reason for taking up cycling? Nor about her family? Is she married, or single?
- Put 'Study' in a separate section, it does not need to be merged with her career.
- Several references need an accessdate (the date you obtained the ref and put it onto the article).
- There are two dablinks. -- Lemonade51 (talk) 16:24, 18 May 2012 (UTC)