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Don't Say You Love Me (M2M song)

I've listed this article for peer review because I intend to nominate it for FAC. The article is also currently waiting in line for a copyedit.

Thanks, Freikorp (talk) 10:23, 7 October 2015 (UTC)

Comments from Calvin999

• A caption isn't needed for the single artwork

• Removed. Freikorp (talk)

• No specific day for the release date (Info box)

• Added. Freikorp (talk)

• Link CD, remove single (Info box)

• Done. Freikorp (talk)

• Why are there citations for the writer and producer parameters?

• I probably put them in there before I added the information to the prose. Removed. Freikorp (talk)

• You can just use surnames for the producers if the same as the writers

• Removed. Freikorp (talk)

• Put the music video external link in the External links section

• Done. Freikorp (talk)

• There is no critical commentary for the Alternative cover art so that needs to be removed

• Removed. Freikorp (talk)

• "Don't Say You Love Me" is the debut single by Norwegian pop duo M2M, composed of singers Marion Raven and Marit Larsen, who were 14 and 15-years-old respectively when the song was recorded. → For an opening sentence, this is really long winded. I don't think the final clause is even needed.

• Removed the final clause. Freikorp (talk)

• The song first aired on → Do songs air? I thought only TV programs did.

• I don't see why the term would be inappropriate, but i've changes it to "appeared"; do you think that's better? Freikorp (talk)

• on their 'best of' album → on their greatest hits album

• I thought 'best of' would be more appropriate considering M2M only had 5 hits; the majority of tracks on the album are unreleased material, remixes and acoustic versions. Do you still think it should be considered a "greatest hits" album. Freikorp (talk)

• The song was well-received critically, → Why? By who?

• Let me know if it is adequate now. Freikorp (talk)

• and charted in over a dozen countries, → Boring/not particular impressive or notable

• Removed. Freikorp (talk)

• including at number → Remove 'at'

• Done. I've reworded to "reached" instead of "charted" as I think that reads better without the "at". Freikorp (talk)

• on the Billboard Hot 100. → What country?

• Specified US. Freikorp (talk)

• 15-years-old → Do we need these hyphens?

• At my first FAC I was told to add hyphen's in the ages like that. Freikorp (talk)

• tracks from Shades of Purple, → Why isn't the album linked?

• Done. Freikorp (talk)

• , including "Don't Say You Love Me" were recorded. → If this part is to be kept, then you need a comma after the song title

• Done. Freikorp (talk)

• was mixed by → Link mixed

• Done. Freikorp (talk)

• the song is said to be → This sounds like you don't know

• I was trying to convey that it's the opinion of the person reviewing the song, but I suppose that's unnecessary as the song's meaning isn't exactly ambiguous. Freikorp (talk)

• They then toured Singapore, Hong Kong and Tokyo → Why do you list two countries and a city? Why not Japan?

• Good point. Done. Freikorp (talk)

• Live performances and covers typically goes after music video

• Moved. Freikorp (talk)

• Reception: I don't see the need for three subsections when they are so small.

• Fair enough. done. Freikorp (talk)

• Each section could easily be one paragraph instead of having one or two lines each

• Done. Let me know what you think now. Freikorp (talk)

• Looks better.  — Calvin999 13:52, 14 October 2015 (UTC)

• The tables need to be marked up for access (the Certification table does this)

• I'm afraid I don't know exactly what that means. Someone else modified the certification table. Can you explain?

• It means when the first column is shaded it. Look at "S&M" for example.  — Calvin999 13:52, 14 October 2015 (UTC)

I hope these prove useful to you. Please ping me if you have any questions.  — Calvin999 18:29, 12 October 2015 (UTC)

@Calvin999: I'm so glad someone with experience in songs articles reviewed this. This is my first GA song article so its been a bit of a learning experience. Please have a look at my replies (there are only a couple questions) and see if the changes are to your liking. Thanks. Freikorp (talk) 10:21, 13 October 2015 (UTC)

@Calvin999: Hey sorry to be on your case but just hoping you can have a look over my replies; keen to close this PR and nominate something else :) Freikorp (talk) 09:24, 14 October 2015 (UTC)

I will go through later today.  — Calvin999 09:29, 14 October 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for your help. I'm closing this now. Freikorp (talk) 11:33, 15 October 2015 (UTC)