Wikipedia:Peer review/Devi Mahatmya/archive1

I've listed this article for peer review because… it has been nominated for FA without a peer review. Thanks, --Redtigerxyz 12:46, 20 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR _t 12:38, 21 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

About the lead section:

Too many brackets in the first paragraph of the lead. Consider moving the translations/explanations to another location.
Remove the quotes from the lead that are not in the article. The lead is supposed to be a summary of the article.
Please read Wikipedia:Lead section for more information.

Thanks. The entire lead section has been redone.--Sankarrukku 06:56, 23 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

A few more suggestions about the lead:

There are two more closing brackets than opening brackets. - Corrected. --Sankarrukku 10:46, 23 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I would like to see a colon and comma between brackets, "(Sanskrit: devīmāhātmyam, देवीमाहात्म्यम्)".- Done. --Sankarrukku 10:46, 23 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Improve the prose of the sentence that starts with "Also" by removing the hyphen and adding "The Devi Mahatmya is" to the beginning.- Done --Sankarrukku 10:46, 23 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Consider moving up the century the text was written to the first paragraph. Done--Redtigerxyz 11:38, 23 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Remove the quote from the lead, the inclusion of only one quote seems to be unbalanced. Done --Sankarrukku 14:10, 23 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Add a few sentences about the most important sections in the article. The lead section is supposed to be a summary of the article, maybe compare it with the lead of some featured articles. Done--Sankarrukku 16:29, 23 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]