Wikipedia:Peer review/Dave Walker/archive1

Dave Walker

Since the article was submitted to my desk for the Cleanup Taskforce, I have worked quite a bit on it. I would like to submit it to FAC, but I'm not quite sure it's ready yet. Comments? --Thelb ⁴ 15:58, 18 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Good job - the article reads really well. If you're going for FAC, though, I have a couple quick comments:

Is it possible to get an image? Maybe from a promo packet or from a fan who will release his/her copyright?
I question whether the Dave Walker fan page is a reliable source. It might be a pain, but I would say that before the page is ready for FAC, someone needs to dig up books, magazines, or newspaper bios to serve as sources.

TheronJ 20:44, 18 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

The article is a good start, but it is not ready for FAC. You must arrange a few things first, such as:

Poorly sourced article. Only one reference and one source! For FAC you are now obliged to citate almost every sentence! It has become so fussy! So, you have to work on that!
In terms of style, sub-sections like "Beckett", consisting of one sentence, are not nice. Try to expand or merge it. Section "Early life" is also very poor.
TheronJ already mentioned that for FAC you need at least an image (I would say more) and well-written captions.
In terms of style again, many users donot like too small paragraphs, especially paragraphs consisting of one sentence. You have too many of them!
The prose is good, but have in mind that FAC has become very demanding in this topic. As another user wrote, you should "make articles tell a story, with clear, logical reasons for why each section comes where it does".
Alphabetize the categories at the end of the article.
Expand the lead section (See WP:LEAD). That is one of the most basic things for FAC. The lead should summarize the content of the whole article.

I suggest you first go for GA Candidacy before trying FAC. And I also suggest that, after the implementation of the suggestions of this Peer Review anad before the GA or FAC, you go for a peer review by the Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography. There are some users who are doing very good and detailed work there.--Yannismarou 13:06, 19 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]