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DJ Hero 2

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Looking to get some comments and review of this article in anticipation of its release and for maintaining the Guitar Hero topic.

Thanks, MASEM (t) 15:23, 19 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by David Fuchs

"DJ Hero 2 was officially announced in June 2010 for release in the last quarter of 2010, featuring more than 70 mashups from over 85 artists." is redundant with "DJ Hero 2's setlist will include over 70 mashups from songs of over 85 artists." later on in the article. Also, it's somewhat difficult for uninitiated readers to figure out what mashups are.
"These actions are presented to the players through on-screen notation that scrolls in time with the music, and players score points by performing the actions correctly, with a scoring multiplier gains through a string of successful actions" - I'm confused as to what the verb "gains" is acting on; if its a noun, the sentence makes even less sense.
"DJ Hero 2 will add a more detailed single player career mode, called "Empire", that provides more structure than the previous game. " This paragraph bugs me; I assume it's elaborating on the increased "structure" and "detail", but there's no clear relationship between the topic sentence and what comes after.
File:Djhero2-screen.jpg could prolly use an expanded rationale explaining why an image is needed for illustration of the game interface.

--Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs^(talk) 18:04, 19 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: There is also 7 dab links in article. GamerPro64 (talk) 23:53, 19 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
De-dabbed, edits noted above corrected, and the image has been given a more detailed rationale. Any other suggestions would be helpful. --MASEM (t) 16:07, 20 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I only see two things that seem bothersome with the article. The first paragraph is a bit large at first glance and may detract the reader, and the one provided gameplay image seems strange sitting under the infobox. --Teancum (talk) 19:20, 24 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed these; first image on left now, and split that para in two. --MASEM (t) 19:45, 24 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]