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This is a GA that I would like to take to FAC. Its ACR is currently dormant, and I would like to get some feedback before I take it to FAC. --Rschen7754 (T C) 00:41, 23 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth comments: This article reads very well. I have a few suggestions for improvement.

  • In the infobox, the level of precision for the total length of the highway invites doubt. The source document lists segments to the third place to the right of the decimal, but it's hard to imagine that realignment or something has never thrown this off a little here or there. If the total is accurate to within five feet (about 0.001 mile), no problem.
  • Some of the routes such as State Route 78 (SR 78) are given with their full names and abbreviations on first reference, while others such as Route 86 are not. It would be good to be consistent throughout. You might look at other highway articles at WP:FA#Transport to see how other editors have handled this.
  • U.S. 99 is linked three times in the short "Early history" section. Once would be enough.
  • Time-related terms like "today" and "recent" are ambiguous. The money conversions such as "(about $27 million today" would be more clear if "today" were changed to "as of 2008". The subhead "Recent events" might become "1999–" or "Since 1999" or something similar.
  • The last sentence of the "Construction" section is an orphan that could be merged with the paragraph above it. It's not clear why Jacob Dekema, whoever he might be, is mentioned. Perhaps the paragraph could be recast as follows: "In 1969, plans to extend the freeway portion of SR 78 east from the Broadway interchange through Escondido were abandoned for lack of funding." This sentence could then fit chronologically into the paragraph above it.
  • It would liven up the prose a bit to replace some of the "there is" and "there are" constructions with something more forceful. For example, "As late as 1919, there was no road connecting Brawley with Glamis along the route of SR 78; one had to travel north through Calipatria to reach Blythe" could become "As late as 1919, no road connected Brawley... ".
  • "One" in the sentence above is a Manual of Style no-no. Perhaps this would do: "As late as 1919, no road connected Brawley with Glamis along the route of SR 78. Before that it was necessary to travel...".
  • Some of the citations are incomplete. For example, Citation 36 is missing its publication date even though the date, April 2005, appears on the first page of the source document. It would be good to add isbns for the maps if you have them or can find them. Just add |isbn = to the template, filling in the isbn after the equals sign.
  • Perhaps the explanatory note for the "Major intersections" table could say what the prefix letters R, T, and N stand for.

I hope these brief suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, preferably one from the PR backlog. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 00:37, 1 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Much thanks for the review. --Rschen7754 (T C) 23:30, 10 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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