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I've listed this article for peer review because…

The article contains a thorough overview of the subject's life and work, it is fully referenced, fairly well illustrated and, as far as I can tell, it isn't missing any important details. I'm aiming at getting this article to GA status.

Thanks, CüRlyTüRkeyTalkContribs 07:40, 8 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • Not sure you need to link "American".
 Done CüRlyTüRkeyTalkContribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Lots of text squashed between images looks very unprofessional.
Moved them around.  Done CüRlyTüRkeyTalkContribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "popular in the 1920s and 1930s, featured a number of popular characters" overuse of "popular".
Reworded.  Done CüRlyTüRkeyTalkContribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • " in a "big-foot" style." I don't know what that means at all. Should you link Bigfoot?
I've reworded it in a way that I hope is more clear.  Done CüRlyTüRkeyTalkContribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "on the South Side of Chicago" any reason for the capitalisation of South Side?
Decapitalized.  Done
  • " had copied from Dana" was Dana referred to as Dana? Seems odd, but if so, then no problem.
He was referred to as "Dana" in the source, but I'm not sure how widespread that is. I've changed it.  Done CüRlyTüRkeyTalkContribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In May 1915, he and a partner named Carter" perhaps tighten up, "he and partner Carter"...
 Done CüRlyTüRkeyTalkContribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Image captions that are complete sentences need a period.
 Done CüRlyTüRkeyTalkContribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "he had become a runt." excuse my ignorance but I'm not sure what that means, is runt of use?
Reworded.  Done CüRlyTüRkeyTalkContribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Not sure about five columns for refs, one or two (max) is fine.
Actually, I'm using the |colwidth parameter rather than a hard number of columns. Setting the number of columns can cause problems for certain users, and is unflexible. By setting the column width, it will automatically display a different number of columns depending on your screen width and resolution. CüRlyTüRkeyTalkContribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Check ISBNs are either italics or not (I suggest not) but not a mix.
 Done CüRlyTüRkeyTalkContribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

The Rambling Man (talk) 17:55, 18 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking the time to look over this. CüRlyTüRkeyTalkContribs 21:57, 18 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]