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I've listed this article for peer review because, having spent over two years refining its prose and references and being a significant contributor, I believe that receiving suggestions to enhance the article to FA-class status would be immensely valuable. Gates played a pioneering role in the microcomputer revolution of the 1970s and 1980s. Additionally, he oversees the world's largest private charitable foundation. I look forward to collaborating with the community to enhance the article and elevate its overall quality.
Thanks, MSincccc (talk) 15:33, 18 April 2024 (UTC)
Tim O'Doherty
[edit]Up to Post-Microsoft:
His father was named William H. Gates II, but he is now generally known as William H. Gates, Senior to avoid confusion with his son.
- Citation neededa national bank president
- can we have the name of the bank?a home that was damaged by a rare tornado when Gates was seven years old
- how reliable is this source?According to Gates, when he was young, his parents wanted him to pursue a career in law
- I don't think the second comma is needed or the "when he was young". Do we need "according to Gates": is there a reason as to why he might not be reliable here?- Link bugs?
- Recommend merging paragraphs 4 and 5 in Early life and education.
which Gates has described as
- "which Gates described as"?National Merit Scholar
- should this be capitalised?didn't
- MOS:CONTRACTIONS: "did not".Gates never returned to Harvard to complete his studies
needs a ref- You've linked Microsoft in the second paragraph of BASIC, but could be linked in the first instead.
he wrote an Open Letter to Hobbyists
-> "he wrote An Open Letter to Hobbyists".- The last two paragraphs of BASIC are very short: can they be combined elsewhere?
after Gates's mother, Mary Maxwell Gates
- you've already given us her name and linked it before.IBM's discussions with Digital Research went poorly, however, and they did not reach a licensing agreement
- is the ", however," needed?It was the prestige brought to Microsoft by IBM's adoption of their operating system that would be the origin of Microsoft's transformation from a small business to the leading software company in the world
- seems oddly wordedon November 20, 1985, in an attempt
- I'd drop the commait's a neat hack
- is the link to Hacker culture right?
- @Tim O'Doherty Should this be removed -
Gates's maternal grandfather was J. W. Maxwell, a national bank president.
Also, what should I do about point number 3 mentioned above?- It's your choice whether to keep it or remove it. I'm asking if the source cited to that info is reliable and high-quality enough for an FA. Tim O'Doherty (talk) 17:52, 20 April 2024 (UTC)
- @Tim O'Doherty Would you continue reading till the end of the article and provide further suggestions? It would be great if you could do so. In the meantime, I had make some required changes. Regards. MSincccc (talk) 18:27, 20 April 2024 (UTC)