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I've listed this article for peer review because I think that this article should be nominated for a fetured article candidate very soon. Its a great game, and the league its self does need some promotion. Any feedback would be great!

Thanks, Aflumpire (talk) 09:34, 15 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
  • Six paras in the lead is too much - see WP:LEAD for guidance.
  • Not sure you need to link sport here.
  • sixteen->16.
  • "six Australian states - with matches played in all states" - use the en-dash here instead of the hyphen, and also, I assume you'll explain that if games are played in all six states that must mean some kind of exhibition-style matches are played when both teams are out of their state?
  • TV ->television.
  • Don't overlink Australian Rules Football in the lead.
  • "of New South Wales,Queensland " - space after the comma - and check you don't overlink the Aussie states all over the lead.
  • Images seem to overwhelm some of the article - see WP:MOS#Images for guidance on sizing images.
  • Clubs section has no references and too many paras again -look at merging some of the smaller ones.
  • "Home Ground and (Capacity)" - Home ground and (capacity).
  • Explain Membership.
  • And 2008 Membership should just be membership.
  • Just as Premiership Years should be years.
  • Premiership years col doesn't sort - it sends me up to the top of the article.
  • If a team has had more than one home ground, you should at least footnote it.
  • Year ranges should use an en-dash, not hyphen per WP:DASH.
  • "Reason for Leaving" - leaving. "Years In Competition" competition. "Last Home Ground" - Last home ground. etc etc.
  • New Teams section - New teams. And why bold the two teams? And use the en dash again.
  • "AFL boss " - boss isn't particularly encyclopedic.
  • Stadiums section needs work...
    • Why square brackets?
    • Perhaps consider a table or even forking to a sub-article.
    • There's little referencing.
  • Total Player Payment in bold? Why?
  • "The following is the origin of 2007 AFL listed player based on player's nominated junior clubs" - is this trivia?
  • Toyota logo could use a caption.
  • Season structure section is referenceless.
  • Competition timeline fails to render.

The Rambling Man (talk) 15:21, 19 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]