Wikipedia:Peer review/Anterior cruciate ligament injury/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because…
I am a college student from California State Pomona and I would like our additions to ACL injuries to be reviewed before we officially add it to the page. I wrote our additions on the talk page that I would like reviewed. Thank you Thanks,kjnavalta (talk)Kjnavalta (talk) 17:26, 4 May 2010 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Thanks for working on an important topic like this. Unfortunatley, this article has many issues, and I do not really see any sort of article rerady to be pasted in on the talk page, just a list of ideas. Here are some suggestions for improvement.
- Normally articles with cleanup tags are not even reviewed here - the idea is that it is such a major problem that the cleanup tag issue should be addressed first, then and only then can a PR focus on the other issues. This has a "This article needs additional citations for verification." tag on the article and your talk page ideas have zero references. This needs to be fixed and here are some specific suggestions on refs:
- Per WP:CITE references come AFTER punctuation, and are usually at the end of a sentence or phrase
- My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
- Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
- References need to be from reliable sources - see WP:RS For example, what makes www.catzsports.com and www.sports-injury-info.com reliable sources?
- The current lead is only two sentences and needs to be expanded so that it is an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article.
- Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself
- My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way - please see WP:LEAD, which also says not to bold linked terms in the lead
- Article uses a fair amount of italic text in a way that does not seem to follow WP:ITALIC
- Explain abbreviations on first use - so "An injury to the anterior cruciate ligament (ACL)..."
- A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow - there are several WP:FAs in Wikipedia:Featured_articles#Health_and_medicine which seem like they would be useful models.
Hope this helps. I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 18:51, 11 May 2010 (UTC)