Wikipedia:Peer review/American Bank Note Company Printing Plant/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because…
I'd like to get this to the point where it could be a GA or FA, but even if not that, then just improving the overall quality. One particular question I have is about the History and Post Bank Note era sections. When I first wrote the article, these were much larger. I trimmed them substantially (and in the case of history, spun off some of the sections into their own articles). I'm wondering if they really add anything to the article at all, or if I'd do better to trim them even more aggressively? Please don't limit your comments to just that, however.
Thanks, -- RoySmith (talk) 20:05, 11 October 2018 (UTC)
- I agree that the history section seems bloated. In particular, the block quote about the building's purchase should be pared down and better incorporated into the text. The post Bank Note era section doesn't seem too bad to me—but the preconstruction planning and staged construction sections could definitely do with a trim. On the whole, though, the article is clear, well-written, and engaging. I made a few very minor edits to clear up small ambiguities and enhance readability; I would suggest also that the lead paragraph to be modified to better reflect the whole of the article. Cheers,Genericusername57 (talk) 21:30, 13 October 2018 (UTC)