Wikipedia:Peer review/Advanced Micro Devices/archive1
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I have recently re-organized and cleaned up the article significantly. I would appreciate a review to find out how the article can be further improved. Eventually I would like it to get to GA status.
Thanks, Dbsseven (talk) 19:53, 11 July 2017 (UTC)
Comment Hi there! I'm unfamiliar with the subject matter myself, so you'll have to excuse me for that, but from this outside perspective, I can offer one broad suggestion. It seems to me that the detail on AMD's specific devices is a bit much for the main article of the company, considering how many of their product lines have their own articles already. It could be possible to condense much of the detail under the CPU/APU and GPU sections. Additionally, I spotted at least three redlinks. Perhaps you're planning to create those articles yourself, which is why I didn't remove them, but I thought I should bring that to your attention. Finally, I noticed a few grammatical mistakes, which I quickly corrected, but you should certainly look out for those. Cheers! BruzerFox 06:33, 14 August 2017 (UTC)
Comment I'll start by reviewing the TOC. Remove unnecessary capitalization in heading per MOS:CAPS. Product coverage appears to be duplicated in Current Product Lines section and elsewhere. There are unnecessary bulleted lists in several sections; WP:PROSE is generally preferred. There a lots of "List of AMD..." articles already in existence to fill out this detail. Create more if you feel you need to. Most readers of a high-level article like this are distracted by this. ~Kvng (talk) 17:32, 29 August 2017 (UTC)