Wikipedia:Peer review/2008 Mumbai attacks/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because the article has been a good article since a long time and I believe that almost everything has been list with a neutral point of view.Additional details have been split into relevant articles.This quite might be a FAC
Thanks, Princeaditya (talk) 09:52, 22 May 2009 (UTC)
Just a general comment on the content. You may wish to include a mention of the criticisms levelled that there was no unified press briefing, that repeated claims of the operations being over, and the criticisms of the Naval commando chief giving a press briefing. You might also wish to include the role of the media, the live coverage, and the fact that some criticisms were made that some news channels' coverage was deemed more editorial rather than objective. In the aftermath section, you would wish to include the impact it had on the Indo-Pak relationship, and the public response in Pakistan. Hope these are helpful. rueben_lys (talk · contribs) 09:47, 23 May 2009 (UTC)
TIPS
- Cut down some datail on previous attacks.
- The TOI frontpage needs a strong reason to be here. (Its not about this article and already there is a train img.)
- Kasab's journey from VT (I hate those who named it a silly CST) to hyospital, cinema stealing cars etc is totally missing. Attacks part is incomplete.
- "On 25 August 2003 two bombs exploded in South Mumbai, one near the Gateway of India and the other at Zaveri Bazaar in Kalbadevi. At least 44 people were killed and 150 injured. No group claimed responsibility for the attack, but it had been hinted that the Pakistan-based Lashkar-e-Taiba was behind the attacks" Update on who did this. recently a man, wife and friend have been or will be gone in a final verdict.
- "The taxi — MH 01 G 779, was used by Ajmal Kasab and Abu Ismail Khan to reach Chhatrapati Shivaji Terminus from Badhwar Park" "The terrorists who attacked Leopold’s Cafe and the Taj Mahal Palace Hotel had taken this cab" i conut 2 cabs. this means a third cab was taken by the other pests? Note rumors about total 4 cabs used and 2 more bombs put in. What about the bomb found at VT.
- "a federal anti-terrorist intelligence and investigation agency, like the FBI, will be set up soon to co-ordinate actions against terrorism" update - it is set up. Hometech (talk) 19:22, 24 May 2009 (UTC)
And yes, how all this shook cricket is also needed. Hometech (talk) 19:26, 24 May 2009 (UTC)
- Redtigerxyz's review
- The blank Motive section was puzzling. Removed.
- Background can be curtailed
- Removed TOI image about 11 July attacks, not 26/11 --Redtigerxyz Talk 14:03, 6 June 2009 (UTC)