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1986 Pacific hurricane season

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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to get this article to GA status. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:33, 10 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Lead is quite brief, per WP:LEAD.
- Not really IMO. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:50, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  - You "opinion" is interesting but not relevant to WP:LEAD. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:39, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"producing $2 million damage and 2 " -> "causing $2 million damage and two deaths"
- Good idea. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:50, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"They were four notable storms this year." grammar fail.
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:50, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"most notably Estelle.[3][1]" refs in the right order please.
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:50, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Agatha - "One-E becomes " became.
- Yeah, my grammar sucks wind. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:50, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Agatha - too many sentences beginning "Agatha..." more variety for elegant writing please.
- Ok, done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:50, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Celia - same comment. In general, use some other terms, e.g. "the hurricane" when it's obvious you're talking about Celia etc.
- Sure. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:50, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Darby - "40 mph (60 mph)." hmm?
- Another very stupid error by me, ugh. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:50, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Darby - "began to a weakening trend" I don't understand this.
- Removed "two". Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:50, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Estelle - " veered to west" -> to the west.
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:50, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Estelle - "two drowning" +s.
- Good call. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:50, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Frank - "1800 UTC July 23" on July 23.
- No. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:50, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Frank - AOR is a dab link.
- Fixed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:50, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Georgette - "23-45 mph (37-75 km/h)" en-dash required for both these ranges.
- I think end-ashes are already in here, correct me if I am wrong. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:50, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Georgette - "it's peak intensity as Typhoon Georgette. [3][1]" (a) "its peak", (b) remove the space before the refs, (c) order refs numerically.
- Done all three. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:50, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Isis v Javier - any reason why one is Imperial (metric) and the other metric (Imperial)?
- Fixed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:35, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Javier - "Javier had weaken directly" +ed
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:35, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Javier - "Javier weaken into a depression" +ed
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:35, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Javier - "a dangerous hazard" hazards are dangerous so you don't need to say dangerous.
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:35, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Javier - "collided with an" I think you mean coincided?
- Yea. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:35, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Newton - "minimal pressure" minimum?
Yea. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:35, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Newton - "20,000 customers" customers?!
Yea. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:35, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Paine - "flooding from Paine worsened flooding issues; the flooding" flooding x 3 is repetitive.
"the final advisory was issued.[1][26][3]" ref order.
"was issued.[26][3]" ditto.
"600 UTC" -> 0600 UTC
Fixed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane
UTC is overlinked in the other storms section.
Fixed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane
Why is just Paine and Roslyn linked in the other storms section?
- Because they are relevant in that section. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:35, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Don't mix date formats in the refs.
- I don't at brief glance, but I list years when no date is applicable. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane
  - Compare ref 24 with ref 25. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:41, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    - Good call, thanks. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:51, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Newspaper refs should have page numbers were applicable.
- Not needed IMO. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:35, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  - Needed. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:41, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  - Fine, added for online newspaper links. I'm screwed with the rest since their archives have gone offline and are no longer avialbe ot google AFAIK. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 20:07, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ensure spaced hyphens and page ranges use an en-dash instead.
- Everything looks correct, but I'm not good with stuff like that. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:35, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Tool is showing a couple of bad links.

The Rambling Man (talk) 11:48, 15 December 2011 (UTC) Wow, thanks for bothering to return.... The Rambling Man (talk) 18:38, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the replies and comments :P Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:51, 8 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]