Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/List of San Diego Chargers head coaches

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The list was promoted by User:Matthewedwards 02:23, 25 May 2008 [1].

List of San Diego Chargers head coaches

previous FLC (19:50, 9 May 2008) Self-Nomination I'm re-nominating this list as there was a lack of comments last time. This list is well referenced, and well written. « Milk's Favorite Cookie ^{( talk / contribs)} 22:48, 9 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Support (as nom) « Milk's Favorite Cøøkie ^{( talk / contribs)} 20:03, 19 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved - Noble Story (talk) 02:35, 22 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"This is a complete list of head coaches of the San Diego Chargers." Why do you need to say "complete"?
- Removed by nominator. Nishkid64 _{(Make articles, not wikidrama)} 23:20, 16 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"The San Diego Chargers are a professional American football team based in San Diego, California. The San Diego Chargers are members of the Western Division of the American Football Conference (AFC) in the National Football League (NFL)." Saying "San Diego Chargers" twice is rather monotonous. Maybe you could combine the sentences?
- Reworded by nominator. Nishkid64 _{(Make articles, not wikidrama)} 23:20, 16 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"There have been 14 coaches in the San Diego Chargers, including coaches of the Los Angeles Chargers which formed in 1961. Gillman was the only coach for the Los Angeles Chargers and is the only Hall of Fame coach in the Chargers franchise." First off, I don't think coaches are "in" a team. Also, you say that Gillman was the only coach of the LA team, so I don't think you need to say "coaches of the Los Angeles Chargers". And maybe you can move the part about the LA team to the first paragraph, and maybe include something about the move? Finally, refer to Gillman's full name the first time you have it in the article.
- Done. Nishkid64 _{(Make articles, not wikidrama)} 23:20, 16 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I see two references for four paragraphs? A little more refs, perhaps?
- Four refs now. Nishkid64 _{(Make articles, not wikidrama)} 23:20, 16 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Why do you need to color and asterik the coach that was admitted to the HoF?
- Removed color designation. Nishkid64 _{(Make articles, not wikidrama)} 23:20, 16 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

That's all for now. Noble Story (talk) 04:57, 10 May 2008 (UTC) More Comments[reply]

You don't need to wikilink Sid Gilman twice, and you don't need his full name after the first mention (this also goes for Schottenheimer and Turner).
I think the third paragraph would be better placed before the second one.
The last paragraph seems rather orphaned. Maybe combine it with another?

Noble Story (talk) 14:07, 20 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Support Other than a minor grammar tweak, I don't see anything wrong with it. Certainly seems good enough for FL to me. Juliancolton ^Tropical ^Cyclone

Support After doing a few minor corrections myself, this list looks good. Noble Story (talk) 02:35, 22 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Comment Reword the first sentence better, don't just repeat the title of the list. Plus, unbold the first sentence per WP:LEAD.--Crzy cheetah 05:53, 22 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Done. « Milk's Favorite Cøøkie ^{( talk / contribs)} 16:20, 24 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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