Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/List of Metal Gear Solid characters/archive2

List of Metal Gear Solid characters

Okay since the first FLC this has been greatly improved per the comments left on the old page. Also this has gone through a thorough peer review and all the suggestions there have been seen to. The main concern with the previous nom seemed to be the length of the lead, now at two paragraphs the lead complies with these suggestions (at two paragraphs long) everything is sourced and I think we have the Featured List precedent for a List of characters article here.

†he Bread 20:01, 14 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Support: The previous problems seem to have been addressed. It passes the guidelines set out at WP:WIAFL - it's useful (important fictional information for Metal Gear Solid), comprehensive (contains substantial information on all characters), it has many reliable sources, passes the Manual of Style and has images where appropriate. Good work. --TheEmulatorGuy 20:14, 14 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
~~Weak support~~ Support. Nicely done, but I have some minor suggestions:
- Wikify the changes by 65.32.231.181.
- Organize interwiki links by alphabet.
  - These were categories, not interwiki links. By interwiki links I mean links that link to the article in other languages. Michaelas10 (Talk) 20:49, 15 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
    - They are sorted, Deutsch, Français, Italiano, Suomi. Jay32183 21:01, 15 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
- Rave.jpg and Mantisss.jpg have a poor fair use rationale format, please use the widely accepted format for screenshots (e.g. Children of the Gods 1.jpg).
  - All fixed up, thaks go to TheEmulatorGuy, also there is Image:Wolfey.jpg, which I fixed aswell †he Bread 23:03, 15 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
- Metal Gear Solid was the first game in the Metal Gear series to feature fully voiced characters and 3D graphics.[3] Whereas Metal Gear and Metal Gear 2: Solid Snake both showed conversation either over a voiceless radio or via text displayed on-screen, Metal Gear Solid features fully voiced characters.
  - Fixed †he Bread 23:03, 15 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
- While captured Otacon develops an infatuation with FOXHOUND member Sniper Wolf,[20] who is later killed by Solid Snake. - Wrong use of while here.
  - How's this[1]
- Change all "v.b." to "voiced by", this is an uncommon shortening.
  - It's not an uncommon shortening, in fact it's used in Metal Gear Solid 3 (featured article) and Metal Gear Solid (good article), not to mention it's explained as "voiced by" earlier on. --TheEmulatorGuy 19:51, 15 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
    - Shortenings are never good for the readers. Michaelas10 (Talk) 20:12, 15 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
      - Reluctantly I have gone and changed it †he Bread 23:01, 15 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
- Please expand the information about Solid Snake.
  - There's little expansion that can be done without diving into the main article on Solid Snake. The system I used was that if the character was on the List of recurring Metal Gear characters or had his own article, I would stick to only the information in Metal Gear Solid. Otherwise I would add info on other games to the characters whoa re primarily here. Big Boss is the exception as you need to know what he did to undestand his role †he Bread 22:35, 15 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
- ...due to the fact they did not know if the project was supported by the Screen Actors Guild or not,[2] and as such the only ones who used their real names were David Hayter (Solid Snake) and Doug Stone (Psycho Mantis). - Split this to two sentences. Michaelas10 (Talk) 15:54, 15 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  - Split †he Bread 22:35, 15 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Comment May require a copyedit. "Due to the fact..." in the lead is very clumsy, use "because" or "since" instead. Jay32183 20:02, 15 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Support A thorough and honest attempt to use mostly primary source material as a reference. Not all the relevant ref-quotations have (Metal Gear Solid) appended, which they should. At the end of all the refs should be a bullet-point with the full citation for the MGS game you take the quotes from. Perhaps {{Cite video game}} can be used for that. A few of the {{Cite web}}'s should have some extra parameters such as publisher and date (of publication). It would be better to find another source for ref 2 since IMDB trivia pages are not considered a reliable source. Colin°^Talk 13:44, 16 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
- Hey thanks for that, I had no idea cite video game existed, it's gonna take a while for me to do all the quotes but i'll do the things cited to MGS2 now †he Bread 23:08, 16 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Support forgot to do this, support as nominator †he Bread 00:53, 17 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]