Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/List of BioWare video games/archive1
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The list was promoted by Giants2008 via FACBot (talk) 10:25, 8 January 2018 (UTC) [1].[reply]
List of BioWare video games (edit | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)
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- Nominator(s): The1337gamer (talk) 17:50, 21 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
BioWare is one of the most notable Western development studios in video games industry. They've been around for almost 22 years and are widely known for their work in the RPG genre. After putting together List of Valve Corporation video games, I decided recently to start working on another developer's list: BioWare. The list is comprehensive, reliably sourced and I think the opening prose explains the company's history and work relatively well. Therefore, I'd like to nominate it for Featured List status. Thanks. The1337gamer (talk) 17:50, 21 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Hooray, another video game list! --PresN 19:06, 21 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"The game was a modest success, however it was BioWare's second title Baldur's Gate (1998) that achieved overwhelming critical praise and defined the company's future direction."
- the "however" is implying an unexpected shift that isn't there; the first game did ok, the second did great. Try "The game was a modest success, but BioWare's second title, Baldur's Gate (1998), achieved overwhelming critical praise and defined the company's future direction.""Baldur's Gate—a role-playing video game (RPG) based..."
- you just said that you were talking about Baldur's Gate, no need to repeat this close or wedge in a double aside. Try "A role-playing video game (RPG) based on Dungeons & Dragons, Baldur's Gate sold more than...""... which alongside other games that made use of BioWare's technology..."
- unclear, try "... which along with the use of Bioware game engines in RPGs such as Planescape: Torment"" on another coveted intellectual property"
- "coveted" feels wierd, maybe just "popular"- "Whilst" is fine in British english, but sounds pretentious in American english; not sure about Candian english. Consider using "While" instead
"however the BioWare branding was later removed with these projects being cancelled and the studios being shut down in the following years"
-> "but the projects were cancelled and the studios shut down in the following years"- If you add "multiplereleasedates=yes" to the video game titles/item templates, it will change the awkward "Original release date(s):" to confident "Original release dates:" (Or, for Mass Effect Galaxy, etc., make it "multiplereleasedates=no" to get "Original release date:")
- Feels weird to say "Published by Electronic Arts" on cancelled games that were never published; might be better to say "Planned to be published by Electronic Arts"
"Project designed shifted"
-> "Project design shifted during development", and actually maybe combine the first two lines of C&C: "During development, project design shifted from a standard real-time strategy game (RTS) to a free-to-play, multiplayer-focused RTS rebranded as Command & Conquer"- 4Gamer.net (in references) has a capital G (you have it lowercase in a few)
- Did not do a full source review, but it all looked good at a glance.
- Thanks for the feedback. I think I've made all these changes but let me know if there's anything else to fix or improve upon. --The1337gamer (talk) 00:43, 22 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Support --PresN 15:31, 23 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks for the feedback. I think I've made all these changes but let me know if there's anything else to fix or improve upon. --The1337gamer (talk) 00:43, 22 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (talk) 13:19, 27 December 2017 (UTC)[reply] |
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Otherwise no major quibbles. The Rambling Man (talk) 11:06, 27 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
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- Support all good for me. The Rambling Man (talk) 13:19, 27 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Support – Looks good to me. Great job! BeatlesLedTV (talk) 16:39, 27 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Source review – All of the references appear to be sufficiently reliable, and all of them work according to the link-checker tool. The only formatting issue I see is that ref 114 has improper all caps in a couple of places in the title. Spot-checks of refs 56, 94, and 113 showed that all of the content sourced to those citations was adequately supported. Fix the instances of all caps in that one ref and this should be good to go. Giants2008 (Talk) 02:19, 7 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Thanks for pointing that out. --The1337gamer (talk) 10:07, 7 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Closing note: This candidate has been promoted, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FLC/ar, and leave the {{featured list candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Giants2008 (Talk) 22:04, 7 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
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