Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/SPARS/archive1

SPARS

Featured article candidates/SPARS/archive1

Nominator(s): Pendright (talk) 21:18, 6 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The United States Coast Gurad Women's Reserve–SPARs–is about the women who served in the U.S. military during World War II. SPARs was created by the U.S Congress, and it authorized the USCG to replace male officers and enlisted men with women at shore stations. Working with the top-secret LORAN project was its most unique assignment. LORAN was a land-based radio navigation system developed to monitor locations of ships at sea and aircraft in flight. Monitoring stations were able to calculate a ship's exact location by measuring the amount of time each signal took to reach a ship. Chatham, Massachusetts, was staffed by SPARs and was believed to be the only all-female staffed monitoring station of its kind in the world. The article was promoted to A-Class in October 2024. Pendright (talk) 21:18, 6 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose. Unfortunately I don't think this is ready, and I think it'll take significant effort to get it there. Some specific concerns:

Structure. There's a bunch of content about Stratton that doesn't really need to be here, there's a Notable People section that's a set of in-text citations, and there's a "Women of the SPARs" section that is... I'm not really sure what it's meant to contain?

Some of the paraphrasing seems to be too close to the original sources. Compare for example "Within weeks of her arrival, however, she received a telegram from the Bureau of Naval Personnel to report posthaste to Washington D.C. Once there, Stratton was ushered to the Coast Guard headquarters. She was informed about legislation pending in the U.S. Congress to form a USCG Women's Reserve, and further informed that she had been recommended to become its first director." with "I had only been there for a couple of weeks when I received a telegram from the Bureau of Naval Personnel telling me to report to Washington as soon as possible. Upon arrival at BuPers, I was whisked off to the Coast Guard’s headquarters ... I was told that there was legislation pending to create a women’s reserve in the Coast Guard, and I had been recommended to become the first head", or "Congress enacted legislation ending the Women's Volunteer Reserve and allowing women to be officially integrated into active duty or the reserve. Following the change, those enlisted female reservists then serving on active duty were given the choice of enlisting in the regular USCG or completing their reserve enlistments" vs "Congressional legislation ended the Women's Reserve and women were first officially integrated into the active-duty Coast Guard and the Coast Guard Reserve. Female reservists then serving on active duty were given the choice of enlisting in the regular Coast Guard or completing their reserve enlistments". (The latter is a PD source so direct copying is permissible but would need to be properly attributed).

Sourcing. The article relies quite heavily on non-independent sources, and there appears to be independent literature available but not cited

The article would benefit from a thorough copy-editing, particularly with an eye to non-specialist readers

There are also citation formatting inconsistencies and MOS issues to consider once some of the larger problems are addressed. Nikkimaria (talk) 06:23, 7 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]