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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by Hog Farm via FACBot (talk) 18 September 2022 [1].

I Drink Wine

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Nominator(s): NØ 11:12, 26 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about Adele's song "I Drink Wine", a sombre ballad she wrote with her "Hello" collaborator Greg Kurstin in the aftermath of her divorce. The song's original 15-minute version was reduced to a six-minute track for the release of 30. A favourite among fans and critics alike, it reached the top 10 in various countries despite not seeing a commercial single release. The song was also showcased in an acclaimed performance at the Brit Awards this year. Thanks a lot to everyone who will take the time to give their feedback here.--NØ 11:12, 26 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Media review—pass

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That should complete media review. Pseud 14 (talk) 13:04, 26 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Aoba47

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  • For the profile image, I'd include an archived version of the source link to be on the safe side.
  • Done.
  • The second paragraph of the "Background" section appears rather long (at least in my view) and I think it would benefit from being separated into two. I would start a new paragraph with this part, She announced the album's tracklist on 1 November 2021, as that is a natural change in topic.
  • I believe this is a good idea. Split.
  • I would link Rhodes. The Wikipedia article capitalizes Rhodes so should be it represented the same way here?
  • Linked.
  • This is super nitpick-y, but citation 36 has 30 in italics while most of the other citations do not have it in italics. I'd be consistent with one way or the other.
  • Removed for consistency.
  • Linked.
  • Jon Pareles should be linked in the article and in the citation.
  • Linked.

I hope these comments are helpful. I believe this should be everything. Once all of my comments have been addressed, I will be more than happy to support this FAC for promotion. Best of luck with this nomination! Aoba47 (talk) 02:24, 28 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Everything has been addressed. The review was very helpful, Aoba47! Hope you are having a great weekend.--NØ 04:31, 28 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you for addressing everything. I support this FAC for promotion based on the prose. I hope you have a great weekend as well! Aoba47 (talk) 16:21, 28 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Pseud 14

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  • English singer Adele – is a song recorded by English singer-songwriter Adele...
  • I am reluctant about this one since her bio addresses her as a "singer and songwriter" instead of a "singer-songwriter" and these types of changes have been contentious in the past.
  • Adele wrote it with its producer Greg Kurstin. The song became available as the album's seventh track – Adele co-wrote the song with its producer [..] It became available...
  • Done.
  • Think it would be worth linking organ to the instrument to avoid confusion
  • I have added a link.
  • A ballad with gospel influences, "I Drink Wine" is reminiscent of church music and incorporates a piano and an organ in its instrumentation. – I think you can start this off with “Musically, “I Drink Wine is a balled with gospel influences which is reminiscent.
  • Done.
  • A suggestion -- The lyrics are about letting go of one's ego and addresses Adele's divorce with Simon Konecki, and the ensuing difficult realizations about the state of her marriage and life.
  • I think I'll keep the present wording if that is okay, the word "ensuing" would imply something not directly stated in the article or sources.
  • some of whom viewed – since critics have been mostly unanimous, perhaps use "many of whom viewed"
  • While many of them were positive, I think "some" is the safer word given the gravity of the wording I have included in the lead.
  • To avoid repetition of "received" I would suggest -- The song’s instrumentation was praised, but some believed that the lyrics were weak.
  • Done.
  • Adele wrote the song "I Drink Wine" -- co-wrote the song
  • Done.
  • The composition and reception section has at least six mentions of "I Drink Wine" each. Perhaps reword some of them to avoid being repetitive.
  • I've used the typical rotation between "[song name]", "the song" and "it" I use on all my FAs.
  • Adele sang it in a lime green chiffon Valentino gown -- not sure if this is necessary to include what she wore, as the other live performances listed doesn’t include it.
  • Given the extent to which sources covered it I deemed it worthy of a one-line mention.
  • Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between personnel and roles.
  • Done!
If you have spare time or inclination, I would appreciate feedback on my current FLC. Not to worry if things are busy.

Comments from ChrisTheDude

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  • "arduous realizations" - Adele is British so the article should be written in British English and therefore that last word should be "realisations"
  • "She reminisces her childhood" => "She reminisces about her childhood"
  • "reaches arduous realizations" - as above
  • "sometimes the road less traveled" => "sometimes the road less travelled"
  • "its lyrics were swarmed with clichés" => "its lyrics swarmed with clichés"
  • "Graeme Marsh opined the song's lyrics" => "Graeme Marsh opined that the song's lyrics"
  • "Afront a gold curtain" - I don't think "afront" is a real word, or if it is then it's a very obscure one, so I would just say "In front of"
  • That's what I got :-) -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:26, 30 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Source review – pass

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Version reviewed. Spot-checks not included.

  • Ref. 1 has 10th February 2020 as publication date, not 25 June 2018.
  • 30 should not be linked in ref. 6 title as you are not referencing the Wikipedia page but the media notes of the album.
  • 25 should not be linked in ref. 7 as per above.
  • Most of the sources are archived but some are not (e.g. ref. 15). I suggest doing it for all to avoid future headache with dead links.
  • 30 should be italicised in ref. 11, 12, 14, 16, 17, 21, 22, 23, 24, 25, 26, 28, 29, 30, 34, 35, 36, 37, 38 and 54 as per MOS:CONFORMTITLE.
  • Watch out for WP:QWQ in ref. 18 quote.
  • I Drink Wine in ref. 19 should have apostrophes as per MOS:CONFORMTITLE and MOS:QWQ.
  • Given that The Daily Telegraph offers a month of free trial, I wonder if ref. 22 should have |url-access=limited instead of |url-access=subscription.
  • Ref. 23 should have a |url-access=limited parameter.
  • Ref. 26 should have a |url-access=limited parameter (also for consistency - see ref. 4).
  • Weirdly I'm able to access both the Independent refs without a subscription so I've removed it from both.
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