Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Dynasty Warriors 4/archive1

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The article was not promoted 03:23, 12 April 2007.

Dynasty Warriors 4

I've been making a number of edits to this article over the past few weeks and I feel that it is close or at FA class now. If not I'm more than willing to make the necessary changes needed. Crimsonfox 13:23, 4 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

OK..

Consider adding at least other rating such as PEGI to the infobox.
Reference 1 publisher should link to Gamespot, not the actual gamespot web page.
This is a problem throughout many references, including neoseeker references. So avoid external links as the publisher. It should be KOEI.com not KOEI.com and GameZone Online not Gamezone.
Unbold some of the external links, this is inappropriate according to WP:EL, I think.
Also many external links just go to different parts of koei.com, consider having only one link to this. Try looking at other featured game articles for ideas.
There's also an extra line above Music header, I don't know if this is intentional or not or an attempt to make the image placement better, but please remove it.

May do more thorough review when above is fixed.--The Negotiator 19:21, 4 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the quick feedback. 1, 4 and 6 are done but I'm a little confused about 2/3. From all the FA's I've looked at the work field in the ref's is always an external link relevant to the source of the reference. If you could clear that up it would be great. Crimsonfox 20:00, 4 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I am talking about the publisher, it should never be an external link as the source provided is an external link, internal links are sometimes acceptable.--The Negotiator 00:19, 5 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

If you could give an example that would be good. All the books/manuals do not have any links in them. Crimsonfox 00:24, 5 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Web sources is what I am talking about. The publisher name shouldn't be an external link even if they are called somegamesite.com. See above comments.--The Negotiator 16:37, 5 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

None of the web sources have publisher's on them. Only author(if applicable), source link, work line and retrieval date. Crimsonfox 16:42, 5 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Object: I've only skimmed through the article, but I see some problems.
- There is no Development section.
- Writing needs a copy edit. I see use of the second person (you), which is a basic video game article mistake. Book titles and video game titles should be italicized. There are other issues beyond these — you need to find some editors who have not worked on the article to help copy edit.

Pagra shtak 21:43, 4 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose. Lots of problems after a brief glance:

Names of games should be in italics.
"PlayStation", not "Playstation".
Prose is very weak right now. Needs a major copyedit. For example, the article often refers to "you". Instead, it should say "the player".
More internal linking. Large sections of black text where internal links could reasonably be made.
"Story" should not be in caps in the headers ("Wei story", etc).
Anything known about development?
Publication dates needed in some of the refs. --- RockMFR 23:06, 4 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I've added a development section, admitently a small one but it's there to expand now. Sorted out a number of the problems mentioned as well. The major thing is the copyedit but I have sorted out the second person stuff. Again, thank you for the feedback, proving to be very useful. Crimsonfox 00:24, 5 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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