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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by GrahamColm 09:14, 14 October 2012 [1].

Cyclone Rewa

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Nominator(s): Jason Rees (talk) 15:26, 8 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured article because... After working on it for several months now, i finally believe that it is ready to become a featured article.Jason Rees (talk) 15:26, 8 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Source review - spotchecks not done

Hurricane John 1994 – the longest-tracked tropical cyclone on record" why are years mentioned here? Just wondering. YE Pacific Hurricane 17:15, 15 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Few other things.

  • "to the southeast of Port Vila causing damage to the intertidal zone of Port Vila's harbour" - try and avoid the redundancy.
  • Avoid overlinking, and watch where you link terms. Sometimes you link to a location after the fourth time it was mentioned.

--♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 04:38, 22 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, I'm ready to support now. I think it's a great example of a long-lasting tropical cyclone article in the southern hemisphere, and I think it deserves to be featured. Great work Jason Rees! --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:00, 23 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comments Non-breaking spaces are missing in connection with ALL the dates in this article and seem to be missing in phrases such as category 4. They are needed to prevent carriage returns in the middle of related items, such as 50 mph (which was done properly) and 6 February (which had a carriage return in the middle and prompted me to look up the article's coding), which improves the article's readability (unlike my run-on sentence). Referencing issues have been noted as well. Remember, they need to be consistent through the article for FAC using the same format throughout. Ref 20 needs its title capitalized. Reference publishing dates appear to be missing in refs 3, 6, 15, and 17. There seems to be a number of styles used in the referencing itself...are you aiming at placing the author first, then the publishing year, then the title and other info? Some of the later references appear to use a different format. These silly little details matter within FAC, which is a cruel mistress. I'm trying to resolve the wikilink issues myself. Thegreatdr (talk) 21:00, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comments. Overall, I'm underwhelmed by the prose. Most of the article suffers from proseline, and while I understand that this is difficult to overcome when describing the track of a tropical storm, I don't think this article represents Wikipedia's finest work (per criteria 1a: "its prose is engaging, even brilliant, and of a professional standard"). I've listed some examples of things that could be tweaked, but think that the article would greatly benefit from a line-by-line prose check from someone not close to the text. Sasata (talk) 22:44, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Lead
  • Meteorological history
  • why are the abbreviations given in small-size upper case font?
  • The abbreviations are in small size as i personally think it looks better and is easier on the eye, while the abbreviations are in upper case because AFAIK that's how they are commonly done by various institutions including NOAA, JTWC and the WMO.Jason Rees (talk) 01:12, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Category" is capitalized in the lead, but not elsewhere in the body of the article
  • "920 hPa (27.17 inHg)" I think abbreviated units like these should should be linked at first mention in the text
  • "before it started to take a more eastwards track" eastwards -> easterly (?)
  • "the residual low level circulation" -> low-level
  • link trade flow (is it equivalent to trade wind?)
  • "During 10 January, Rewa's remnants moved out of the South Pacific basin and back into the Australian region while starting to re-intensify into a tropical cyclone as a mid to upper level trough over Eastern Australia increased in size." sentence feels run-on to me; could we add a comma after"cyclone"?
  • ensure that citations are in numerical order throughout (unless there's a compelling reason for them to not be so)
  • link Tagula Island
  • "as an upper level trough approached" -> upper-level
  • "before at 1200 UTC the next day the JTWC reported that the system" sounds awkward
  • "Rewa's remnants were last noted late on 23 January, by TCWC Wellington bringing heavy rain to New Zealand" TCWC Wellington brought rain?
  • Preparations and impact
  • "while it affecting parts" fix
  • link archipelago, atoll
  • The article is rife with the passive voice, which makes the prose(line) dull and monotonous. Here is but one example:
  • "It was estimated by the Solomon Islands Meteorological Service that the cyclone had brought"
  • link gale force
  • "Cyclone Rewa affected Papua New Guinea on two separate occasions while it was active, with the cyclone first affecting" affected … affecting
  • "12-14 January endashes, not hyphens, for number ranges
  • "Ahead of Rewa affecting the archipelago" clunky noun +ing construction
  • "The hardest hit areas were communities that lay near major river systems, with the cyclone blocking roads, destroying a church, bridges, homes and gardens with vital crops such as coffee and copra destroyed." same as above
  • "The only indirect impact reported was a higher surf and long surface waves from which several people had to be rescued from before the cyclone started to move towards New Caledonia during 4 January." clunky
  • "On 18 January local disaster committees met to consider evacuating people while people who were on vacation in national parks, were alerted about Rewa by a helicopter." why the comma?
Support – All the problems I had with this article a few weeks ago were brought up by Hurricanehink and addressed by you. Great job, JasonRees! TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:14, 10 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]


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