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Corey Haim

Self nomination An article that many have worked on, including myself. It went through a peer review here. Notably, short paragraphs were removed or merged, filmography became select and off-topic information and quotations were removed. I believe it is quite comprehensive and informative. Thanks. Smerk 00:59, 8 January 2006 (UTC)

• Oppose:
  • Movie titles should all be italicized.
  • The italicized section, here and in other such cases throughout the article, should be in quotes. Andrew Levine 01:32, 8 January 2006 (UTC)

Okay, all titles are now italicized, but do you think that the ones in the film box at the bottom should be as well? I removed 'textbook' as well as fixing all the quotations. Smerk 01:51, 8 January 2006 (UTC)

• Oppose. 1) "His friendship and on-screen collaboration with actor Corey Feldman was widely publicized", weasel words. 2) No inline citation at section "Early life", like for the claim that his shyness was the reason his mother enrolled him in lots of activities. 3) "Haim started to make a name for himself in the industry, earning critical acclaim and his first". What critical acclaim? This sentence is redudant. It sufices to say that he won the Young Artist Award. 4) "The pair of Feldman and Haim had become teen successes." It is not up to the article to make such a judgement. If this is someone else's opinion, cite your source. And when did he say he was optimistic about returning to the film industry? JoaoRicardo^talk 04:20, 8 January 2006 (UTC)

1. Changed to His friendship and on-screen collaboration with actor Corey Feldman was widely publicized during the late 1980s, both starring in a number of widely released films and financially successful films, the pair were dubbed "the two Coreys".
2. Was in references section but citation was added
3. Changed to Haim started to make a name for himself in the industry, notably by earning his first Young Artist Award...
4. Changed to The two Coreys had become a popular on screen collaboration, following two successful films the pair would meet again in 1989, when Haim appeared in the film Dream a Little Dream.

• Comment: Years and decades are overlinked (see date formatting for when to link these). Also Corey Feldman is way overlinked: He's linked six times just in the first two paragraphs of Teenage idol and Career decline. In general, several words appear to be linked every time they appear, instead of just on first occurrence. --Fritz Saalfeld (Talk) 22:50, 10 January 2006 (UTC)

I removed almost all the year dates, leaving a few, but made them all more specific, for example 1989 instead of just 1989. Feldmans link appears only twice now and other numerous links such as film titles and locations were removed Forever young 05:40, 11 January 2006 (UTC)

Years in films should not be piped, see Wikipedia:Piped link. And there are still several unrelevant years linked. --Fritz Saalfeld (Talk) 13:48, 11 January 2006 (UTC)

Piped years removed, all other year links removed as well. At the top, I left 1980s and 1990s linked, is that appropriate do you think? Thanks Forever young 15:04, 11 January 2006 (UTC)

I think it's okay to have them as they are somewhat relevant, but they should link to the actual articles about the decades and not just to the first year of the decade (e.g. to 1980s, not to 1980). --Fritz Saalfeld (Talk) 15:46, 11 January 2006 (UTC)

Oops, just fixed them. Thanks for that. Forever young 06:04, 12 January 2006 (UTC)