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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 1 June 2019 [1].


Nominator(s): Kyle Peake (talk) 09:41, 27 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about the song "Black Skinhead" by American rapper Kanye West from his studio album Yeezus. I have nominated this for FA status as I had worked on it enough in the past to get the article accepted as a GA and have since worked on it heavily; look on revision history and I believe it is in-depth enough to become an FA. Also, the song is debatebly the most notable from West's album, as it charted in numerous countries, went Platinum in three and has received much media attention that is covered in the article from reliable sources. If anyone has improvements to be made, please tell me. Kyle Peake (talk) 09:41, 27 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comment There are problems with fused participles throughout the article (see WP:PLUSING). I suggest ironing them out. Graham Beards (talk) 08:41, 28 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Strong oppose

  • The lead says little about what the song is actually like, and instead features interminable lists of names of co-producers, festivals, award shows, cover artists and countries. This is very banal information that is best relegated to the body of the article. For much more interesting leads look at "Under the Bridge" or "Today".
  • The Composition section features unquoted sentences ("These lines use a simple aesthetic touch to envelope the character played by West on Yeezus in black, rugged gear", "the mind of Yeezus mutates the external idea of God into an internal one") that are far too similar to the source ("This seemingly simple aesthetic touch—to envelope the character of Yeezus (the central figure on the album) in black, rugged gear", "But the twisted, egomaniacal mind of Yeezus mutates the external idea of God into an internal one."). A thorough audit for close paraphrasing is needed throughout the article. Also, since the source is basically offering analysis/opinion, you need to attribute the ideas to the critic; they're not simply facts.

I'll stop here. Listing out everything that's wrong with the article is neither feasible nor within the scope of an FAC. Especially since I believe that this article is fundamentally flawed (undeserving of even GA status: the review was very superficial), and needs a thorough top-to-bottom reworking and rewriting.—indopug (talk) 14:47, 28 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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