Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Archived nominations/October 2016
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- Nominator(s): Redtigerxyz Talk 15:15, 2 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
As Hindus celebrate the festival of the Divine Feminine today, let me introduce you to an interesting aspect of the Mother. Chhinnamasta is a self-decapitated goddess, who holds her severed head in her hand and drinks blood from her wound. She stands on a copulating couple. A goddess of contradictions, she is a life-giver and a life-taker. A GA since 2010, the article was expanded this year. The article was fortunate to be copy-edited by User:Corinne (Talk:Chhinnamasta#GOCE_comments) and to have had a detailed PR by User:Johnbod, User:Nikkimaria, User:Ms Sarah Welch, User:Ssriram mt and User:Ruhrfisch. Thanks everyone for improving the article. Redtigerxyz Talk 15:15, 2 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Images
This is a topic certainly worthy of a FA star, but, for now, I will limit myself to the images:
- File:Chinnamasta1800.JPG Source links appear to be dead. Copyright tags specifying the PD status of the image in both India and the US are needed, are they not? (If I have made a mistake, please let me know.)
- Tags added. Though original site is down, updated with new link of Bridgeman Art Library. Can not archive this due to scripts. --Redtigerxyz Talk 15:41, 4 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- File:Chinnamunda.jpg What am I looking at here? Is this a painting? Also, tags are needed as above.
- This is scan of a painting printed in a book. Tags added. --Redtigerxyz Talk 15:41, 4 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- File:Bundi painting Chinnamasta.jpg It may be worth archiving the source link. Also, tags are needed as above.
- Tags added. Archived. --Redtigerxyz Talk 15:41, 4 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- File:Chinnamasta rajasthan.png Source link is dead. Also, tags as above.
- Archive: https://web.archive.org/web/20130817172648/http://aras.org/galleryimage.aspx?key=chinnamasta. Tags added. --Redtigerxyz Talk 15:41, 4 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- File:Chhinnamasta.JPG Unless this sculpture is in the public domain for some reason, this will only be acceptable if it is permanently on display in a public place/a place accessible to the public, as per Commons:Commons:Freedom of panorama#India. If it is, you should add Commons:Template:FoP-India to the image page.
- FOP added. Redtigerxyz Talk 15:41, 4 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- File:Bengali Chinnamasta.jpg Unless I'm mistaken, this image is not the same as the one on the source page. Also, we will again need multiple copyright tags as above, I believe!
- The image is cropped and the brownness of the paper is removed. Tags added. --Redtigerxyz Talk 15:41, 4 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- File:Calcutta art studio Chinnamasta.jpg Again, I'm not sure I can see the image on the source page? And copyright tags required as above?
- 4th row, 4th column. It is a double image lithograph. I have cropped it; brownness of paper removed. Tags added. --Redtigerxyz Talk 15:41, 4 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- File:Chinnamasta Pahari.jpg Multiple tags needed as above.
- Tags added. --Redtigerxyz Talk 15:41, 4 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- File:Chinnamasta with Shiva.jpg Tags as above. I appreciate that the source URL is the correct one for the file, but where has the scan come from? Is that the original source of the scan?
- The site does not give the source of the scan. http://personal.colby.edu/personal/n/nksingh/kali/pages/Devi.htm Nikky Singh, Crawford Family Professor of Religion, Colby College site uses the image in her lecture. Tags added. Redtigerxyz Talk 15:54, 4 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- File:Chinnamasta yantra color.jpg Am I right in understanding that the author of this file has created it based on the description given in certain Tantric texts? Could a source be cited?
- It seems so that the author has created the image. Though I don't know the source used by the author, similar illustrations are available in books of Frawley and Shankar Narayananan.--Redtigerxyz Talk 15:41, 4 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- File:Maa Chhinnamasta Temple.jpg FOP tag should be added, unless we're sure the building is PD.
- FOP added.Redtigerxyz Talk 15:41, 4 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Sorry for the niggles; I'm confident most/all are fine, but some fiddling at the edges would be helpful! Josh Milburn (talk) 21:58, 2 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks Josh Milburn for the image review. I have some changes. Please check.Redtigerxyz Talk 15:41, 4 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks for these fixes; I'll look more closely soon. It can be helpful to provide an explanation of the changes you have made to images that you have edited- that can help avoid people raising the kinds of worries I did above. Commons:Template:Retouched picture is a convenient template for this purpose. Josh Milburn (talk) 16:38, 4 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks Josh Milburn. Added Retouched tag.Redtigerxyz Talk 16:50, 4 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Closing comments -- I'm not sure why but with more than three weeks of silence, this review hasn't got off the ground except for Josh's helpful image review. I'm therefore going to archive it but am happy to waive the usual two-week waiting period for a renomination given the lack of commentary. Couple of related points though:
- I note several paragraphs finishing with as many as half a dozen citations, which would make verification heavy going -- can you make the referencing a bit more granular?
- There are also some paragraphs finishing with uncited sentences -- all paragraphs should end with at least one citation.
Although I've said I'm happy to waive the two-week wait before renomination, pls consider the first point above, and action the second, before returning to FAC. Tks/cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 04:52, 30 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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- Nominator(s): MarshalN20 Talk 20:47, 23 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Association football's notable acrobatic move, the bicycle kick. A prior FAC did not receive enough support. The improvements made since this FAC have clarified (and condensed) the move's history, nicely integrated the origin dispute into the popular culture section, and also made better use of the images. This article is ready for a FAC promotion; of course, any further feedback to suit any of your specific FAC requirements would be welcome and I have a growing track record (see my past FAC nominations on Peru national football team, Falkland Islands, and Pisco sour) in making sure that articles are of the highest standard for Wikipedia, its contributors and readers. Thank you!--MarshalN20 Talk 20:47, 23 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
A few comments
[edit]I'm not a football aficionado, but I glanced through this – it looks like a well-prepared and well-presented article. I have a few suggestions:
- Please add date details to image captions, mostly missing at present. These would be very helpful to readers.
- I think the "Origin controversy" section is oddly placed at the end of the article, and is also somewhat overdetailed. In my view the disputed origins of the kick would be better dealt with in a couple of crisp sentences at the start of the "History" section.
- I'd consider renaming the "In popular culture" section; there's very little "popular" culture here (football culture, certainly), and popular culture sections are in my experience somewhat frowned on at FAC. Apart from a bit of trivia concerning TV adds, which I'd advise you drop, the section mainly summarises the iconic status of the bicycle kick in football, and perhaps a title such as "Iconic status" might be suitable?
I hope you get some decent comments from the football experts, and wish the article well. Brianboulton (talk) 22:42, 24 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Thank you Brian! I am currently suffocating on work, mostly checking a few papers from my students. I'll reply again sometime during the weekend. Best.--MarshalN20 Talk 15:59, 29 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Brianboulton:. Hi! Thanks again for the review, Brian. Sorry for the delay; all of your points should now be addressed. "Iconic status" does seem like an appropriate title; although it can certainly be changed later if a better subtitle comes up. I left in the TV ad as it is meant to reflect a connection with the popular video game franchise. Ads for association football do tend to highlight this particular skill, so this bit of information is also a nod to them. Please do let me know if you have any further improvement ideas. Sincerely.--MarshalN20 Talk 22:05, 8 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Support: It's well written and seems to provide a thorough coverage of the topic. There look to be enough citations and they are in a proper format. I'd say it satisfies the FA criteria, so I'm lending my support. Nice work. Praemonitus (talk) 22:22, 28 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Thank you very much!--MarshalN20 Talk 16:00, 29 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Closing comment -- sorry but with no reviews for a month this nom has well and truly stalled; given the minimal commentary I don't mind waiving the usual two-week waiting period before a renomination, maybe putting it back at the top of the list will draw more comments next time. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 05:00, 30 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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- Nominator(s): 3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 03:28, 23 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
This article is about Viking metal, a style of heavy metal music based primarily on lyrical themes of the Vikings, the Viking age, and Norse paganism. I first started working on this article back in 2011, and, over time, became fascinated with the subject, came to enjoy the style of music, and delved into the scholarly research about Viking metal. My own interest and research seems to have paralleled with that of academia: Prior to 2010, far fewer sources discussion Viking metal existed, so the past six years have seen a sizeable increase in academic interest in the subject. Over the course of the past five years, myself and other editors have vastly improved this article. There was an conflict two years ago over the definitions and origins of Viking metal between myself and an anonymous editor, but we were able to arrive at a compromise that best summarized the existing literature. The article has subsequently become a good article and has undergone peer review. It adheres to basic policy regarding BLPs and copy-righted material. It adequately summarizes the topic, and covers all key aspects with the needed detail. It follows a consistent layout and reference style. I believe that this article is ready to be a featured article candidate.3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 03:28, 23 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Comments by Retrohead
[edit]- Can you replace during with "emerged in the early 1990s" in the lead
- Once the band is introduced in the article's body, there's no need to repeat the description such as in "the band Bathory incorporated a diverse range"
- Also Deena Weinstein should be just Weinstein in the third paragraph of "Thematic and lyrical focus"
- There are some other minor c/e suggestions of mine, such as replacing symbolism with symbols and visual media with visuals (from the same section), but it's optional.
- Can we have the name of Allmusic's reviewers who reviewed Enslaved's Eld?
- I'm not 100% sure about this one, but isn't it "longing for return to paganism" (from "Burzum")
- Support All in all, a great read. I wasn't aware there was material for an article like this to be promoted to FA.--Retrohead (talk) 11:56, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Thank you, I've made those changes. I hope to eventually get the black metal, folk metal, and pagan metal articles up to the quality of this one.--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 14:53, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Closing comment
[edit]I'm afraid that with a month past and no new reviews, this nom has stalled so I'll archive it shortly. Given the minimal commentary, I'm happy to waive the usual two-week waiting period before a renomination; note also that, as it appears you haven't taken an article all the way to FA yet, you'd be eligible to try the new FAC mentoring scheme if interested. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 05:09, 30 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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- Nominator(s): MPJ-DK 01:40, 15 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
This article is about a Mexican professional wrestling championship, not just a list of champions but an article on the history of the championship, rules etc. This follows the format of the CMLL World Light Heavyweight Championship and CMLL World Middleweight Championship articles which were recently promoted to FA. I have taken all input from those FACs, plus various GANs, FLCs and FACs I've done on Mexican wrestling championships to hopefully produce a high-quality article worthy of the Feature Article status. I am open to any and all suggestions and always willing to work on any issues there may be. MPJ-DK 01:40, 15 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Closing comment -- this nom clearly isn't going anywhere so I'll archive and waive the usual two-week waiting period before a renom; perhaps chucking it to the top of the list again will help get it noticed. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 05:14, 30 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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- Nominator(s): Anarchyte (work | talk) 05:48, 21 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
This article is about an expansion pack for Bethesda's 2015 action role-playing game Fallout 4. I've been working on this article for just over two months and after going through two peer reviews, passing a GA review and being copyedited by the Guild of Copy Editors, I think it's finally at FA standard. Anarchyte (work | talk) 05:48, 21 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @AdrianGamer, Czar, David Fuchs, Jaguar, and Rhain: Pinging all users who have participated in the peer reviews and the GA review. Anarchyte (work | talk) 10:40, 21 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Comments by David Fuchs
[edit]{{doing}} Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs(talk) 18:08, 27 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @David Fuchs: Just in case you forgot
. Anarchyte (work | talk) 12:04, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Having gone through the article I think the biggest issue is it still needs a touchup on the prose front. There's just a lot of stilted language, with explanations for what things are rather ungainly shoved in, for example The V.A.T.S. system carry over from the main game. V.A.T.S. slows the real-time combat—repetitious phrasing, "VATS slows the real-time combat" is hardly illuminating. The article really needs a copyedit from someone capable who hasn't touched the article. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs(talk) 18:27, 18 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- For what it's worth, I agree. Josh Milburn (talk) 19:38, 18 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Comments from JM
[edit]Happy to take a look. I've played some Fallout games but never really got into them. I've sunk far more hours than I care to admit into Elder Scrolls games, though.
Comments from J Milburn that have since been addressed
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Gotta dash; I'll be back for more... Josh Milburn (talk) 22:04, 27 August 2016 (UTC)[reply] Ok, back.
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From the first read-through, I feel that this is a strong article, but that the writing is a little below what is expected of FAs. I also did some copyediting (but more is needed); please double-check. Josh Milburn (talk) 22:55, 27 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @J Milburn: I've fixed and striked the majority of the issues you mentioned. I left a few notes under the comments I didn't understand. Anarchyte (work | talk) 02:34, 28 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @J Milburn: Were the edits for dot points 3 and 4 sufficient or are there any more comments/questions surrounding those? I've collapsed all the other comments underneath that as I've fixed them and FACs tend to get fairly long. Feel free to revert that if you don't want it to be collapsed. Anarchyte (work | talk) 10:50, 29 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
(←) Looking again, even in the lead, I'm not convinced that the first person/third person and VATS details are portrayed well. They come across as trivial details, and the fact you're talking about VATS's effect on combat before you've mentioned combat in its own right is a bit weird. The gameplay section a bit better, but I wonder why you jump into the some of the details (like VATS) without giving more basic info; dude in post-apocalypse landscape stomping baddies, fleeing from monsters, collecting stuff, doing quests, making friends. Some more specific bits:
You mention the lazers in the lead, but not the building blocks.V.A.T.S. or V.A.T.S?- You need to explain somewhere what a synth is. A half-line description of the Church of Atom/Atom wouldn't hurt, either.
"start a war with Acadia" do you perhaps mean something like "trigger a war between the Harbormen and Acadia"?- "The Institute will send agents to reclaim the synths, while the Brotherhood of Steel will launch an expedition to exterminate them. The Railroad will send an operative to make contact with Acadia, though Acadia will reject their help." You're going to need to explain who/what The Institute, the Brotherhood of Steel and The Railroad are.
"dungeon" is jargon (I know I mentioned this above- I know what it means, but I'm a roleplayer. How about "self-contained quest locations"? That's a slightly more explanatory and formal way to say what you say.)- "Reviewers highly praised the addition of new quests but disliked the puzzle sections" That seems to just repeat what you said in the previous paragraph.
- How do you suggest the paragraph be started? I don't have any ideas on how it could be changed.
This isn't a view universally shared, but I find that "Game Revolution similarly expressed", "Metro liked" and "Game Revolution admired" is clumsy/colloquial. Publications don't express views and like/dislike things; writers do."Reviewers were also divided over the storyline: Game Revolution admired the story and new characters,[27] while Peter Brown found it uninteresting.[29] Game Revolution admired the storyline and new characters.[27]" Repetition!- Good catch.
"Some reviewers had problems with the expansion's repetitiveness" As you've already said!- I removed or changed all mentions of it being repetitive so that it's first mentioned in that paragraph.
From checking references, I see that the puzzles were new to Far Habor, and not something in the main game; this could be made clearer!- Done, but I don't think it's worded too well.
"was disappointed that it was somewhat wasted" This suggests that we are endorsing that it was wasted, not something we can do in Wikipedia's neutral voice- Fixed, I think.
Italics for websites or not? I personally prefer not to; YMMV.- I typically add italics for all websites. I've made it consistent to this way.
Much better, but not there yet, for me. Josh Milburn (talk) 15:56, 11 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @J Milburn: I've fixed the majority of the newly mentioned issues, but I'm not entirely sure how to rework the synopsis sections. @Prisonermonkeys and Shadeblade11: Pinging the users who worked on that section the most. Anarchyte (work | talk) 12:13, 12 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Anarchyte — I will have a look when I get a chance, but if I am honest, I am not optimistic; I feel that the prose of the article as a whole needs work. To my mind, it lacks the flair that a GA/FA needs. Prisonermonkeys (talk) 00:10, 14 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Closing comment
[edit]Sorry but with support for promotion and no commentary for six weeks or so this nom has well and truly stalled, so I'll be archiving it shortly. Anarchyte, pls note that per FAC instructions you need to wait two weeks before (re)nominating this or another article for FAC. As it appears you haven't taken an article all the way to FA yet, you'd be eligible to try the new FAC mentoring scheme if interested. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 05:48, 30 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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- Nominator(s): ArsenalFan700 (talk) 19:05, 10 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
This article is about the final of the 2014 Indian Super League season. After passing the good article review, I believe that this page has the potential to move up a level higher, to become a featured article. Inspiration taken from 2011 Lamar Hunt U.S. Open Cup Final. --ArsenalFan700 (talk) 19:05, 10 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Oppose: Sorry about this, but I think this article is some way short of FA standard. The prose is relatively poor in places; I found several examples in the first section of the main body and many others from a quick scan through the rest of the article. Additionally, there seem to be several important details missing which I would expect to read in an article on what was presumably a showcase event. Here are a few suggestions, but these are examples only and NOT an exhaustive list. Addressing these on their own will not be enough; I think the article needs a heavy copy-edit and a bit of a rethink. Sarastro1 (talk) 23:17, 22 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- The lead is VERY short of details on the game, which seems to be the point of the article.
- "is a franchise league started between IMG-Reliance and STAR Sports": I don't think "between" is the best word here. The ISL was not started between anything.
- "make it a known name in the world of football": Not sure this is correct. A "known name" is hardly a high ideal. The source states it was created "with the aim of making the game one of the country's flagship sports and India a name to reckon with in the global arena".
- "which started its inaugural season with eight franchises": Implies that it ended the season differently. Why not simply "had eight franchises"?
- "acted in a round-robin format": A tournament does not "act" in a round-robin format, it uses one.
- "The top four teams at the end of the 14-game regular season would qualify for the play-offs. The play-offs would feature a two-legged semi-final which would pit the first place team against the fourth place team, while second and third would face off against each other. The final would then be a one-legged affair at a neutral venue." Why are all the verbs in the form "would" rather than simply past tense?
- "a one-legged affair": A little idiomatic, and "affair" is hardly the way to describe a final.
- I would like a little more background on how the tournament itself was created, and perhaps a little more about how it was received by the players, public and press. I think for a FA, we should be including this information, briefly, on the whole tournament for background.
- In the venue section: "It was announced," "It was reported"... Why do we need this? Why not simply state what happened?
- "Atlético de Kolkata had the first major opportunity of the second half when Jakub Podaný crossed the ball into the box with both Baljit Sahni and Arnal looking to head it in before David James came out to catch the ball." This is a little hard to follow as there is so much in one sentence, and it will be incomprehensible to someone without a football background. (i.e. what were the players trying to do; cross the ball or catch it? Opportunity to do what?)
- "The Kerala Blasters continued to have the most chances throughout the match, which was compounded in the last minute of regulation time when Michael Chopra had his point blank range shot saved by Apoula Edel": What was actually compounded here?
- There seems to be a lot missing from an article about a subject like this. I would expect some comment on how the match was received. Was the attendance good or bad, better or worse than expected? How was the first final received? Was it a big occasion? Did the public get excited by the prospect? Did people enjoy the game? At no point do we mention TV coverage; who covered it? What countries? What channels? What was the audience? What was media coverage in general like?
- The titles of articles in the references should not be in capitals (MOS:ALLCAPS) Sarastro1 (talk) 23:17, 22 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Honestly, this is all fair enough and what I want. I will now begin the process to hopefully get this page up to a better standard and from their we will see. Cheers. --ArsenalFan700 (talk) 06:32, 23 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Closing comment -- I think it'd be best to conduct a major copyedit away from the pressure of the FAC process so will archive this shortly. ArsenalFan, pls note that per FAC instructions you need to wait two weeks before (re)nominating this or another article for FAC. As it appears you haven't taken an article all the way to FA yet, you'd be eligible to try the new FAC mentoring scheme if you'd like. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 14:43, 29 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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- Nominator(s): -- samtar talk or stalk 09:45, 21 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
This article is about Saguinus oedipus, one of the smallest primates and commonly found in tropical forest edges in northwestern Colombia. I believe it should be featured as it is well written and does indeed exemplify Wikipedia's best work. I believe it meets the requirements of becoming a featured article. -- samtar talk or stalk 09:45, 21 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Hi, a question; did you contribute in the writing of the article? Zad68 seems to have nominated it for GA, will he participate? From the FAC instructions: "Nominators must be sufficiently familiar with the subject matter and sources to deal with objections during the featured article candidates (FAC) process. Nominators who are not significant contributors to the article should consult regular editors of the article before nominating it." FunkMonk (talk) 10:00, 21 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @FunkMonk: Thank you for the question - no I have not contributed to the article, though I am familar with the subject matter. I've left a message on Zad's talk regarding the FA, though opted to nominate due to the inactivity of a number of main contributors - I hope this is not too much of an issue? -- samtar talk or stalk 10:10, 21 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Preferably, you should have waited until Zad responded, but if you have acces to the sources and are familiar with them, it should be possible to follow through. FunkMonk (talk) 10:13, 21 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @FunkMonk: Thank you for the question - no I have not contributed to the article, though I am familar with the subject matter. I've left a message on Zad's talk regarding the FA, though opted to nominate due to the inactivity of a number of main contributors - I hope this is not too much of an issue? -- samtar talk or stalk 10:10, 21 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Closing comment -- sorry but this review seems to have been a bit of a non-starter so I'll be archiving it shortly; perhaps another peer review (the last seems to have been a few years ago) would be worthwhile before considering another FAC nomination. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 14:28, 29 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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- Nominator(s): AffeL (talk) 20:57, 7 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
This article is about the highly rated episode nine of Season six of Game of Thrones. I believe this article should be featured because. Not only have I worked hard to first turn it to Good Article, thanks to help by other Users. After that I nominated it for a Peer Review and also the Wikipedia:WikiProject Guild of Copy Editors(where an admin user helped a lot). Now it's time to get the greatest episode of television history to Feature status. AffeL (talk) 20:57, 7 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Comment: Glancing through the article, if we exclude the lead and plot sections, around two-thirds of the remaining text is given in verbatim quotes. That's far, far too high a proportion – we are supposed to write our articles rather than assemble the words of others; you should familiarise yourself with WP:QUOTEFARM. Many of the quotes are in informal, conversational English, which is contrary to the concept of encyclopedic neutrality. And the humungous quote box in the Reception section is a simple paean of praise that ought to be condensed to a few words. Quite a lot of rewriting is necessary, I think. Brianboulton (talk) 22:54, 10 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Brianboulton: Hello.. could you close/archive the nomination. I do not wish to move forward with this. - AffeL (talk) 20:56, 21 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Sorry about that. I don't have the power, but I'm sure the @FAC coordinators: will see this and act accordingly. Brianboulton (talk) 21:55, 21 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Ask and ye shall receive... Tks Affel/Brian. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 22:00, 21 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Sorry about that. I don't have the power, but I'm sure the @FAC coordinators: will see this and act accordingly. Brianboulton (talk) 21:55, 21 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Closing note: This candidate has been withdrawn, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Ian Rose (talk) 22:00, 21 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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- Nominator(s): MaranoFan (talk) 15:01, 14 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
This article is about Meghan Trainor's second single. I believe it is a comprehensive article with professional prose and defines the topic effectively without going into unnecessary detail and engages the reader. All comments are appreciated.--MaranoFan (talk) 15:01, 14 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Oppose. The following is by no means an exhaustive list of issues; all were caught from a fairly brief skim. The prose is far from FA quality; passive voice and semicolon overuse are among the major issues. The article is too technical and doesn't explain many concepts (particularly radio- and chart-related ones) to a general audience. There are glaring issues with SYNTH and inferring ideas that aren't explicitly stated in the sources. This is a long way from FA and needs substantial peer review / copyediting. Given that this would require a substantial, if not near-complete, overhaul to become FA quality, I cannot support this FAC. Here are some tips for improvement in the meantime:
- 1a (well-written, professional prose):
"Lips Are Movin" is a song recorded by American singer and songwriter Meghan Trainor.
– Trainor is notable for being a singer, not a songwriter, and the song is notable for being sung by her, not written.It was co-written and produced by Kevin Kadish
– the reader is supposed to automatically assume who Kadish co-wrote it with? And this is passive voice, which should be avoided.and was released by Epic Records on October 21, 2014
– more passive voiceIt was co-written and produced by Kevin Kadish, and was released by Epic Records on October 21, 2014, as the second single from Trainor's fourth studio album Title (2015).
– excessively long sentence"Lips Are Movin" was announced in October 2014, along with the unveiling of the official single artwork for the song, and was serviced to radio stations in the same month.
– overly wordy. and specify what "serviced" is for those who don't know music industry slang."Lips Are Movin" is a bubblegum pop, doo-wop and R&B song; it has wry lyrics about a philandering, untruthful man.
– no need for a semicolon here;...song with lyrics...
The music video for "Lips Are Movin" was directed by Philip Andelman and commissioned by Hewlett-Packard.
– passiveBeing a portrayal of behind-the-scenes events during a music video shoot, the video features dancers including Les Twins and Chachi Gonzales.
– awkward and confusingFollowing its release on November 19, 2014, the video received 2.5 million views on YouTube in two days and received positive reviews praising its imagery.
– also wordy and confusingly writtenIt uses a half-sung, half-rapped format and a retro-soul melody with a beat and a percussion-heavy arrangement.
– wordyIt is composed in the key G major; Trainor's vocals span the tonal nodes F3 to B5.
– separate sentencesthe song's artwork and a full-length low-quality audio were leaked online
– what is "an audio"? you mean the song?The same day, it was announced
(by whom?)that "Lips Are Movin" would be officially
(is this necessary?)released to contemporary hit radio in the U.S. on October 21, 2014, as Trainor's second single.
and the official audio premiered on MTV News the following day.
– again, what's with the use of "audio" as a synonym for "the song"? This makes a very simple concept potentially confusing for readers. And "official" is still being overused.In more mixed opinions, Ben Rayner of the Toronto Star said "Lips Are Movin" is "whitewashed into a fairly anodyne mush ... the hip-hop bump and plush basslines that intrude ... are pure cosmetic window dressing". Nolan Feeney of Time said the track sounded too similar to its predecessor; she wrote,"From its retro sound to its handclaps and post-chorus chant, 'Lips Are Movin' seems designed to milk the success of [Trainor's] breakout hit".
– These appear to be negative opinions, not "mixed" ones.It reached number 50 in its third week on the chart.
– Of which chart? The Hot 100 and Mainstream Top 40 charts are mentioned before this. If the Mainstream Top 40, why were the first two weeks skipped over? If the Hot 100, why was the second week skipped over? Is the fact that it reached number 50 significant for some reason? Does this necessitate inclusion?On December 10, 2014, "Lips Are Movin" rose from 13 to eight.
– again, why are we skipping over so many weeks? This is incredibly confusing.(two%)
– it's either "two percent", "2 percent", or "2%".13–seven
– 13-7In the U.K.
– UKThe accompanying music video for "Lips Are Movin" was filmed in Los Angeles and was directed by Philip Andelman.
– Passive voice can easily be avoided (at least partially here) by rephrasing:Philip Andelman directed the music video for "Lips Are Movin",
("accompanying" is filler)which was filmed in Los Angeles.
music-video shoot
– "music video shoot"Trainor's team asked 180LA to develop the look of the "All About That Bass" music video without straying too far from it
– Confusing. I believe this intends to say that the "Lips Are Movin" video was inspired by the "All About That Bass" video, while this reads as if 180LA (also, who is this?) designed the look of the previous video, and not this one.In the song's music video, Trainor sings into a red microphone in front of a pastel blue wall; she is sometimes flanked by backup dancers and television screens.
– Unnecessary semicolon use. These are two separate sentences.
- 1b (comprehensive):
The song was offered as a "first listen" on Shazam
– explain what this meansThe song garnered radio play from three monitored stations the same day, six days before the track's impact date.
– how do you expect the average reader to understand the concepts of "monitored stations" or "impact dates" without explanation or even wikilinks?It was later released worldwide—except in the United Kingdom—as an "instant grat" promotion from the pre-order of Title
– still a lot of things not being explained for the average reader. you're writing to the masses, not the readers of Billboard magazine.The song became the "Most Added" in the Mainstream Top 40 format that week.
– which means...? Why is this significant? Explain.Elsewhere in Europe, "Lips Are Movin" peaked within the top-ten in Austria, the Czech Republic, the Netherlands, and Spain
– specific peak positions are mentioned for every other country in this section. Why not these? <><Cowan of Canadian Business said, "Cynics will view this as a decidedly stodgy brand trying to make itself hip by hanging out with cool kids.
– Who is being referred to here, Hewlett-Packard? This isn't specified. <><
- 1c (well-researched):
- Express and Billboard are used to support the song being of the bubblegum pop, doo-wop and R&B genres. Neither source supports R&B; bubblegum pop is mentioned in Express but doesn't support the claim (
[Trainor] makes bouncy and beautiful bubblegum pop
in reference to her general artistry, not this particular song; a SYNTH violation). "Pop" is mentioned in the Billboard source but not included here; why? <>< - Express is used to support the claim that
Some reviewers noted that the song made Trainor from a one-hit wonder to a successful pop artist
. The source's exact wording:All About The Bass topped the charts in 58 countries and it looks like she's on the way to another monster hit with the insanely catchy Lips Are Moving.
A bit of a reach. Likewise, USA Today (also used to support this claim) reads:You thought All About That Bass would be Trainor's one hit? Wrong. Lips lacks the novelty, but it's a better record.
This doesn't indicate that the author thought Trainor was a one-hit wonder prior to this song. Neither source refers to Trainor as a successful artist. <>< It was reportedly written in eight minutes by Kevin Kadish and Meghan Trainor and produced by the former.
– Implies that it was also produced in 8 minutes, which isn't stated in the source cited (nor is the claim that Kadish produced the song, unless I overlooked something)."Lips Are Movin" debuted at number seven on the Australian Singles Chart on November 9, 2014, peaked at number three the following week, and spent 11 weeks in the chart's top ten. It was Trainor's second consecutive top-three single in Australia,
– all of this is attributed to one source (Hung Medien), which only supports its debut and peak positions. It doesn't specify that it peaked its second week, that it spent 11 weeks in the top ten, or that it was her second consecutive "top three" single. <><"Lips Are Movin" entered the New Zealand Singles Chart at number 30 on November 10, 2014. It reached number eight in its sixth week and peaked at number five, becoming Trainor's third consecutive top-ten hit in that country.
– same as above.Writing for music website Idolator, Bradley Stern called the video a "squeaky-clean visual," and praised its bright and colorful imagery,
– the source claimsThe sassy, swinging cut’s just been given a squeaky-clean visual, full of bright, colorful sets and even brighter red lips all over the place.
Where is the praise for these things, exactly? It seems to only note the existence of these things.Yahoo! writer Lyndsey Parker praised Trainor's fashion in the video
– again, failing to see "praise" for this in the source
- Express and Billboard are used to support the song being of the bubblegum pop, doo-wop and R&B genres. Neither source supports R&B; bubblegum pop is mentioned in Express but doesn't support the claim (
- 2a (concise lead):
"Lips Are Movin" was a commercial success, becoming Trainor's second consecutive single to reach the top five in Australia, the United Kingdom, and the U.S. Billboard Hot 100, where it peaked at numbers three, two, and four, respectively. It also reached the top ten in several European countries, including Austria, Spain, Germany, and the Netherlands.
Excessive detail for the opening, on top of this being extremely wordy and poorly written.Trainor has performed "Lips Are Movin" live on several shows, including Today, The Voice, and Dancing with the Stars. It was also performed during Trainor's That Bass Tour (2015) and MTrain Tour (2015).
Are these details so paramount to a reader's understanding of the song that they warrant mention in the lead?
- 2b (appropriate structure):
- The TOC could be reduced if information about the single's release (from section "Production and release") were merged with the "Music video" and "Live performances" sections (into something along the lines of "Release and promotion"), as the lattermost two pertain to the single's promotion. <><
- The "production" part of the "Production and release" section doesn't appear to exist. This appears to deal more with the composition/songwriting.
Slant Magazine's Alexa Camp compared "Lips Are Movin" to its predecessor, writing that it "strictly adheres to the same beat sheet as its predecessor (doo-wop throwback, girl-group harmonies, bubblegum-pop hooks)"
– This is in the "Critical reception" section, but appears to focus more on the song's compositional elements <><
- Ive addressed the concerns above that I deemed valid. Some haven't been done, but I request a third (non-biased) opinion on them.--MaranoFan (talk) 09:59, 16 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Can you indicate which ones you did and which ones you deemed invalid? Otherwise it is very hard for a third opinion to be given. Mattximus (talk) 14:44, 16 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Mattximus: Done. Marked all not deemed valid with a "<><".--MaranoFan (talk) 16:51, 16 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Would you care to explain how these are not valid? Chase (talk | contributions) 17:53, 16 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Mattximus: Done. Marked all not deemed valid with a "<><".--MaranoFan (talk) 16:51, 16 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Can you indicate which ones you did and which ones you deemed invalid? Otherwise it is very hard for a third opinion to be given. Mattximus (talk) 14:44, 16 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- When I say invalid, I mean they do not violate any policy or would be preferred in their current state. For the chart gains, there is no real source for them. I observed the song's chart run and can confirm that this was its chart trajectory. Major gains have been added to the article.--MaranoFan (talk) 18:26, 16 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks for pointing those out. Does that mean you have made all of the other changes to the satisfaction of the reviewer? Can you indicate these as well? Mattximus (talk) 22:54, 16 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- If they were made to the satisfaction of the reviewer? Its best if he judges that himself. Did I make all other changes? Yes. And to my satisfaction.--MaranoFan (talk) 05:12, 17 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- It should be up to the reviewer to see if you have met their changes. If there is disagreement it should be discussed. You seem to be missing the point of featured articles, to gain from peer review. Mattximus (talk) 11:13, 17 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- If they were made to the satisfaction of the reviewer? Its best if he judges that himself. Did I make all other changes? Yes. And to my satisfaction.--MaranoFan (talk) 05:12, 17 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Ive addressed the concerns above that I deemed valid. Some haven't been done, but I request a third (non-biased) opinion on them.--MaranoFan (talk) 09:59, 16 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Note: The nominator has been blocked indefinitely from editing. Chase (talk | contributions) 16:42, 19 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Closing comment -- if the block happens to be successfully appealed, the nominator can bring it back to FAC. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 02:40, 21 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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This article is about a medical food ingredient and dietary supplement that is a natural product in humans and has medical and athletic performance-enhancing applications for preventing/reversing muscle wasting and improving body composition.
This is the second pharmacology article that I've worked on for FA status. My first pharmacology FA was amphetamine, so this article's layout and formatting mirror that article. Like amphetamine, this article includes citations in the lead. I will not remove these because many of these statements are medical claims; however, I'm amenable to moving the citations into a note at the end of each paragraph as was done in the lead of amphetamine if reviewers of this nomination prefer this approach.
The labels in the section headers and their organization in the article follows MOS:PHARM and MOS:MED#Drugs, treatments, and devices. The sources used to cite medical claims in this article are required to satisfy WP:MEDRS; most, if not all, of the WP:PAYWALLED medical reviews that are currently cited in the article are and will be temprorarily available in this link for viewing/downloading to allow reviewers to conduct WP:V checks for the duration of this nomination and any subsequent FAC nominations. The file names (without the .pdf extension) of the papers listed in this link reflect the reference names (i.e., <ref name="...">
) defined in the source code of the HMB article.
Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 16:03, 12 August 2016 (UTC); Updated at 05:30, 23 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @FAC coordinators: I'm requesting that this nomination be closed/archived a little early. After speaking to John on his talk page, he expressed interest in completing his review but indicated that he likely won't have time to work much on this over the next week or two. I feel it would be better to just get the 2 week nomination hiatus out of the way while he's busy. Since Axl is currently on vacation/holiday, Zefr is unwilling to return to his review, and Nergaal hasn't responded to my recent pings or talk page messages, I don't expect much progress to be made in this nomination between now and when it would normally be closed. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 19:28, 4 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks for that Seppi, will action. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 22:05, 4 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Notes by the nominator about reference formatting
[edit]I've attempted to standardize the formatting of all references in the article as follows:
- Page ranges are written out in an unabbreviated format (e.g., 191–194 is used in page ranges instead of 191–4) with an ndash per MOS:NDASH.
- Journal titles use the standardized pubmed abbreviations for each journal cited, provided that it is listed in the NLM Catalog. Only the abbreviated words and the last word in a journal title are followed by a period.
- All dates use the DMY format.
- Journal citation dates include the month (if available) and year of the publication date.
- Book citation dates include the month and year of publication.
- Web and database citation dates include the day, month, and year of the most recent revision that was listed prior to the access date, if available.
- Book citations list the 13 digit ISBN.
- The names of the authors in all citations follows the standard pubmed author format for an author list.
- For example: "John Randomguy Doe, Bob Jeremy Frank, Jean Dumas" is written as "Doe JR, Frank BJ, Dumas J" in the author list.
Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 01:40, 28 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Comments by Doc James
[edit]- The large quotes raise copyright concerns for me. IMO quotes should be keep to less than 20 words. Lawyers from a pharma company have told me 7 but I think they were just bluffing. User:Diannaa or User:Moonriddengirl your thoughts? Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 21:29, 12 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- If there's consensus here to remove/censor the quotes, then I'm okay with this; however, I assure you that the current length of the quotes is not a copyvio concern: the Hazardous Substances Data Bank (HSDB) is a database of monographs that contains literally nothing but quotations from copyrighted academic literature, copyrighted professional textbooks, or PD government websites. E.g., their entry on delta 9-Tetrahydrocannabinol is a massive page that contains nothing but excerpts that are copied verbatim from the source which is cited beneath the excerpt. PubChem transcludes almost all of HSDB's quotations to its own monographs on chemicals as well (for comparison: PubChem THC link). A number of the academic journal article quotes in the THC entry are longer than the longest quotes included in the HMB article and there's no mention in the HSDB's FAQ about obtaining permission to source their content from copyrighted publications like this; hence, the current references in the HMB article are not copyright problems if the HSDB's and PubChem's monographs aren't. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 22:30, 12 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I know this is archived, but I'm only just now seeing it and hate to leave it without response. :) There is no legal "word count" limit on the size of quotations; it is entirely context dependent. For this reason, the lawyers that told you 7 from the pharma company, Doc James, were totally making stuff up, but we also can't take the precedent of databases of monographs or PubChem, Seppi333. We are neither of those sites, and our purposes and nature are very different. Wikipedia:Non-free_content#Text notes that "extensive quotation of copyrighted text is forbidden" - there's no specifics, because what constitutes "extensive" depends on so many factors, including the length of the source (90% of a source is "extensive" even if the quote is three sentences long), the length of the new home (90% of the article is extensive, even if the quote is a paragraph out of a 400 page book), and whether the quote is the 'heart' of the source (which is why we can't just reproduce the top 5 of creatively compiled lists, even if the list contains 100 items). There's also the larger question of whether we are building something new with the quote or using it to supersede the need to review the original - which would lend towards a finding of copyright infringement. And there are movement value questions related to the fact that we encourage broad reuse, even commercially, which is why Wikipedia has more conservative copyright attitudes than non-commercial organizations, as profit is a consideration in fair use. It's complicated and cannot be nailed down to a "We can only use X words" or even a "We can safely use X words," and we cannot use text just because some other website does. In each instance, we need to ask ourselves if our use is transformative and the minimal excerpt of the non-free content that we need to further academic advancement. (Sometimes, for instance, we don't need a quote at all and can rest with a paraphrase or summary. Sometimes, the precise quote is important.) --Moonriddengirl (talk) 15:02, 28 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Yes I am well aware that the lawyers were making it up. We still however want to be conservative as lawyers can harass an organization whether they have a case or not. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 22:47, 28 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Moonriddengirl: Ah, I stand corrected then. Anyway, this nomination won't be archived until sometime around mid-October, so there's no issues with posting here at the moment. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 02:06, 29 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I know this is archived, but I'm only just now seeing it and hate to leave it without response. :) There is no legal "word count" limit on the size of quotations; it is entirely context dependent. For this reason, the lawyers that told you 7 from the pharma company, Doc James, were totally making stuff up, but we also can't take the precedent of databases of monographs or PubChem, Seppi333. We are neither of those sites, and our purposes and nature are very different. Wikipedia:Non-free_content#Text notes that "extensive quotation of copyrighted text is forbidden" - there's no specifics, because what constitutes "extensive" depends on so many factors, including the length of the source (90% of a source is "extensive" even if the quote is three sentences long), the length of the new home (90% of the article is extensive, even if the quote is a paragraph out of a 400 page book), and whether the quote is the 'heart' of the source (which is why we can't just reproduce the top 5 of creatively compiled lists, even if the list contains 100 items). There's also the larger question of whether we are building something new with the quote or using it to supersede the need to review the original - which would lend towards a finding of copyright infringement. And there are movement value questions related to the fact that we encourage broad reuse, even commercially, which is why Wikipedia has more conservative copyright attitudes than non-commercial organizations, as profit is a consideration in fair use. It's complicated and cannot be nailed down to a "We can only use X words" or even a "We can safely use X words," and we cannot use text just because some other website does. In each instance, we need to ask ourselves if our use is transformative and the minimal excerpt of the non-free content that we need to further academic advancement. (Sometimes, for instance, we don't need a quote at all and can rest with a paraphrase or summary. Sometimes, the precise quote is important.) --Moonriddengirl (talk) 15:02, 28 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- If there's consensus here to remove/censor the quotes, then I'm okay with this; however, I assure you that the current length of the quotes is not a copyvio concern: the Hazardous Substances Data Bank (HSDB) is a database of monographs that contains literally nothing but quotations from copyrighted academic literature, copyrighted professional textbooks, or PD government websites. E.g., their entry on delta 9-Tetrahydrocannabinol is a massive page that contains nothing but excerpts that are copied verbatim from the source which is cited beneath the excerpt. PubChem transcludes almost all of HSDB's quotations to its own monographs on chemicals as well (for comparison: PubChem THC link). A number of the academic journal article quotes in the THC entry are longer than the longest quotes included in the HMB article and there's no mention in the HSDB's FAQ about obtaining permission to source their content from copyrighted publications like this; hence, the current references in the HMB article are not copyright problems if the HSDB's and PubChem's monographs aren't. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 22:30, 12 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Comments by Nergaal
[edit]OpposeWeak oppose this is a chemical with absolutely 0 chemical information on it. I understand it is most relevant as a performance-enhancer, but that does not mean it has no chemical information about it outside physiological conditions. Also, the article does not explicitly say it is a performance-enhancer that is not controlled at all. Nergaal (talk) 13:17, 14 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Nergaal: There's very little experimental chemical data available on this compound; it was hard enough just to find an experimental mp/bp. In any event, I'm not sure what kind of chemical information you have in mind so unless you can be more specific or give examples, this is not an actionable objection.
- The article does not explicitly state "it is a performance enhancer that is not controlled at all" because that statement is not made anywhere in reliable sources. It's probably true, but if I said that without a reference it would be WP:OR. Edit: to clarify, I do know of sources that make a statement about its status in specific countries (e.g., the United States), but not globally. I can address this in a region-specific manner if you think it's worth adding. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:25, 14 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- The fact that it is used as a performance-enhancer and is a "drug" seems a bit weird to an average reader that it is not controlled. Talking about USA and EU would suffice since they tend to be the most stringent about it. Also, WADA has a list so saying that it is not on that list would be useful. Nergaal (talk) 19:39, 14 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- In relation to other performance-enhancing drugs, its regulatory status isn't really any different from caffeine or creatine. Both are drugs (by this, I mean "pharmacologically active compounds") that are sold over-the-counter and which have well established athletic performance-enhancing effects. Caffeine is more similar in the sense that it's also used clinically in some cases, but it's not an endogenous compound like creatine. In any event, I'm willing to clarify its regulatory status; is there a particular statement that you'd like to include to address this?
- The lead does include the statement "
As of 2015, HMB was not tested for or banned by any sporting organization in the United States or internationally.
", but it doesn't specifically refer to WADA. In any event, I'll look for sources for adding a statement about whether or not it's banned by WADA; however, if their policy on banned substances is like the NCAA, their lists may not actually be comprehensive due to possible pharmacologically-related functional analogs of banned substances (aka designer drugs). There might not be sources that explicitly cover whether or not HMB is banned by WADA if that is the case, so I'll let you know what I find after I follow up on this. - I have sources on hand for its regulatory control status in the US; hopefully it won't be too hard to find a source for the EU as a whole. I'll probably include this information under the "Available forms" heading after I look for an EU reference.
- Is there any particular information about its chemical properties that you'd like to see added? I had a difficult time finding any notable information to add from references about HMB's chemical properties. User:Boghog also mentioned that there really isn't a lot of information related to its laboratory/industrial synthesis either (see User talk:Boghog/Archive 10#Synthesis). Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 20:11, 14 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Scifinder would be the best place to search for available chemical information on this compound if any of you have access to it. I can gain access to Scifinder, but that will involve me needing to update my OS so that I can get the security software needed to connect to a VPN with the university, which I won't be able to get around to for a few days. M. A. Bruhn (talk) 01:40, 15 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I unfortunately don't. If you see any notable information on the the conjugate acid or the base's physical characteristics (e.g., odor, consistency/form, taste, color, etc) or a discussion/description of its chemical structure, that would be useful. Since I've seen some inconsistencies on its experimental properties between references, I also need to find a secondary source that lists its density with a reference to a primary source. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 18:26, 15 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- On second thought, I just remembered that HMDB includes structural classification information on compounds listed in its database, so I'll just use this - http://www.hmdb.ca/metabolites/HMDB00754#taxonomy - for describing its structural class. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 18:31, 15 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- It'll probably be a another day or two before I get around to addressing these issues. Been busy irl. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 19:28, 17 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- The fact that it is used as a performance-enhancer and is a "drug" seems a bit weird to an average reader that it is not controlled. Talking about USA and EU would suffice since they tend to be the most stringent about it. Also, WADA has a list so saying that it is not on that list would be useful. Nergaal (talk) 19:39, 14 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Nergaal: After looking for about an hour, I couldn't find any statement about the regulation of HMB which was more specific than the one made by the reference to which I added the relevant quote in this diff. I'm guessing that this is simply because nutritional supplements generally don't require approval by a regulatory agency before being marketed in a given country (as noted in the dietary supplement article). I believe that I've finished addressing your comments/concerns from above (regulatory status, permitted use by NCAA/WADA, and chemistry-related information) with the addition of this material. Are you satisfied with the current changes that I've made and do you have any other comments/objections about the current article content? Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 03:07, 23 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Nergaal: Is there something that you still want me to add or have you just been busy IRL? Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:41, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Can the pic in biosynthesis be changed to also show the chemical formulas? The lead could have less refs IMO. Also, the lead says it is good for muscle grwth, but perhaps mention what biocycle is it supplicating. The history section needs to be merged or expanded. Nergaal (talk) 14:33, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I could use
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to annotate the chemical formulas as wikitext onto the image, but there isn't much room to add text for some of the compounds on the right side of the image; I'd have to expand the width of the image to add formulas to those since the only place to add an annotation to MC-CoA is on the right side. That said, the CoA compounds have pretty long chemical formulas due to the coenzyme A group (e.g., MC-CoA is C26H42N7O17P3S) – are you sure you want me to add that? - Would you prefer that the lead refs be grouped at the end of the paragraph? I ended up doing this in amphetamine's lead and wouldn't mind doing it again here.
- This page revision - Special:permalink/737260423 - is an example of how it would look in the 2nd and 3rd paragraphs. I didn't change the 1st lead paragraph simply for the sake of comparison. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 17:23, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I've added a summary statement from the body about the mechanism of effects/pharmacodynamics to the lead in the 1st paragraph: "
HMB produces these effects in part by stimulating myofibrillar muscle protein synthesis and inhibiting muscle protein breakdown through various mechanisms, including activation of mechanistic target of rapamycin complex 1 (mTORC1) and inhibition of proteasome-mediated proteolysis in skeletal muscles.
" - I've removed the history section pending expansion. The content was previously only covered in the lead; Axl mentioned that it wasn't covered in the body in his section below, so I created the history section in response. I suppose this will have to be 1 of those instances where a lead statement isn't covered in the body for technical reasons unless I can find more information relevant to the historical aspects of HMB. IIRC Jytdog linked a ref below that might contain useful information about HMB-related history, but I need to read through it to be sure. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 15:04, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Nergaal: I found some relevant historical HMB-containing commercial product information in the Iowa State University FY2011 proposal that Jytdog linked to below. The relevant excerpt is located at Talk:Beta-Hydroxy_beta-methylbutyric_acid#FAC-related_references in the green quote box. If I cover this in the history section, it should end up being a 3–4 sentence paragraph - would that be sufficient for an expansion? Ideally, I'd like to mention something about who actually discovered the chemical originally in that section, but unfortunately I haven't read anything about that to date. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 17:06, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I expanded the history section into a 5 sentence paragraph today – Beta-Hydroxy beta-methylbutyric acid#History. If there's any issues with the current section, let me know. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 08:22, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I could use
- Can the pic in biosynthesis be changed to also show the chemical formulas? The lead could have less refs IMO. Also, the lead says it is good for muscle grwth, but perhaps mention what biocycle is it supplicating. The history section needs to be merged or expanded. Nergaal (talk) 14:33, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Nergaal: I need your input on #1 and #2 above before proceeding on those; I believe I've addressed the other two issues on its mechanism (#3) and expanding the history section (#4) as described above. Please let me know if you'd like me to make any other changes. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 08:33, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Nergaal: Sorry to annoy you with a ping again, but I still need your input on the first two points above when you get a chance. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 17:49, 9 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I came to take a quick look and found a bunch of problems. It is obvious no chemist has taken a stab at this article. You really need somebody with some chemical background. The melting point cannot possibly be at -30 °C, and the ref used is useless. A substance does not have a pH but a pKa. I am sure something about its lactone can be said or about some exotic synthetic ways. Anything chemistry related really. 21:20, 9 September 2016 (UTC)
- @Nergaal: you're probably right about needing a chemist to review this; chemistry is literally the only subject area in pharmacology-related articles in which I don't have an adequate background knowledge. As for the MP/BP, I sought feedback from WP:WikiProject Chemicals at WT:CHEM#MP/BP of β-Hydroxy β-methylbutyric acid to determine what MP and BP to use. I'll request a review of this article in this FAC nomination at WT:CHEM in an attempt to address your concerns; however, I'd strongly suggest mentioning and clarifying your objection about the MP in that discussion (WT:CHEM#MP/BP of β-Hydroxy β-methylbutyric acid) in order to address the issue. Edit: just to clarify, the article and cited source indicate that the experimental least upper bound for the MP is −32 °C (i.e., it doesn't melt at that temperature), they don't say that the MP is −32 °C. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 21:41, 9 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- As for the laboratory/industrial synthesis of HMB, @Boghog: can you comment on this? Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 21:42, 9 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Nergaal: could you comment on the first 2 issues from above about the image annotations and lead citations? I still need your feedback on those. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 21:52, 9 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Pretty much every compound has a mp. I think SciFinder sometimes lists a bunch of these numbers. Or go to Aldrich.com and put the CAS number and open the SDS document. Nergaal (talk) 22:25, 9 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I seem to need an account to use SciFinder; I'll ask at WP:RX and WT:CHEM sometime later tonight (I need to log off WP for now) to see if someone else can access the database entry for me. As for the Sigma Aldrich website, they list "−80 °C(lit.)" as the MP. Do you believe that this is a very reliable source for this data? As I mentioned in the WT:CHEM thread that I linked, I've found at least 3 different MPs listed for this compound in different databases, so ideally I'd like to cite a secondary source that cites primary literature. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 22:47, 9 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Unfortunately I do not have access to SciFinder either. HMB is a liquid at room temperature and therefore by definition, it must have a melting point below room temperature and I don't think one can dismiss that the melting point could be as low as -30 °C or even lower (compare with propionic acid whose melting point is -21 °C). I do agree that we need a better source.
- Concerning HMB acid dissociation constant, the supplied source stated that the pH of HMB was less than three is clearly in error. First of all, the acidity constant should be abbreviated as pKa, not pH. Also the pKa of aliphatic carboxylic acids is normally in the range of 4-5 (e.g., acetic acid – 4.76). I have not been able to find an experimental value, however the ChemAxon calculated value is 4.55 which is much more reasonable. I have modified the text accordingly.
- The lactone of of HMB, 4,4-dimethyloxetan-2-one (CAS # 1823-52-5), is known, but it does not appear to be particularly notable and hence I question its relevance to this article. Boghog (talk) 07:54, 10 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- In re-reading the Coffman et al., JACS, 1958 citation, I now notice that this source does provide pKa values (4.42±0.02), melting point (glass at –80°C. apparently it does't crystallize), and an alternative synthesis (carboxylation of t-butanol by treatment with carbon monoxide and Fenton's reagent). I will add this. Boghog (talk) 06:40, 11 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Nergaal: Thank you for your comments that prompted me to take a second look at the chemistry section. I think I have now addressed your concerns regarding the melting point and pKa. In addition, I have added more detail about the synthesis from diacetone as well as an alternative synthesis from t-butanol. In my opinion, the synthesis section should be restricted to economically viable reactions that can be used industrially and exclude exotic synthetic routes whose notability is questionable. The originally published syntheses are simple, high yield, and cheap. Hence there has been little need for improved syntheses and as a consequence, there is not an extensive literature describing the preparation of HMB to draw on. Boghog (talk) 07:56, 11 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Nergaal: When you get a chance, can you follow-up on Boghog's reply/changes to the article and/or provide further feedback on what content to add/fix in the article? I'm not really sure what you'd like me to do at this point. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 22:39, 16 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Seppi333: I have access to SciFinder if you still need information from it. Sizeofint (talk) 18:21, 18 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Sizeofint and Boghog: That would help a lot. Boghog has expressed a willingness to work on the chemistry-related content in the article (see User_talk:Boghog#trimethylamine monooxygenase and FMO3), so it would be best to correspond with him to determine what he needs. I'm not familiar with SciFinder at all. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 18:31, 18 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Hi @Sizeofint: I am trying to expand the chemistry section, but do not have access to SciFinder to find appropriate sources. I have tried searching Google Scholar, PubChem, and other free search engines and have not found much beyond the Coffman et al., JACS, 1958 citation. I just need a list of citations that describe the preparation or properties of HMB (CAS # 625-08-1) and I can take it from there. I suspect the list of citations will not be very long, but I could be wrong. Also the lactone (4,4-dimethyloxetan-2-one (CAS # 1823-52-5), PMID 11841278) was mentioned above. If there are any sources that describe the conversion of HMB into its lactone or vice versa, that would also be very useful. Boghog (talk) 19:05, 18 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Sizeofint and Boghog: That would help a lot. Boghog has expressed a willingness to work on the chemistry-related content in the article (see User_talk:Boghog#trimethylamine monooxygenase and FMO3), so it would be best to correspond with him to determine what he needs. I'm not familiar with SciFinder at all. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 18:31, 18 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Seppi333: I have access to SciFinder if you still need information from it. Sizeofint (talk) 18:21, 18 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Nergaal: When you get a chance, can you follow-up on Boghog's reply/changes to the article and/or provide further feedback on what content to add/fix in the article? I'm not really sure what you'd like me to do at this point. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 22:39, 16 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I seem to need an account to use SciFinder; I'll ask at WP:RX and WT:CHEM sometime later tonight (I need to log off WP for now) to see if someone else can access the database entry for me. As for the Sigma Aldrich website, they list "−80 °C(lit.)" as the MP. Do you believe that this is a very reliable source for this data? As I mentioned in the WT:CHEM thread that I linked, I've found at least 3 different MPs listed for this compound in different databases, so ideally I'd like to cite a secondary source that cites primary literature. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 22:47, 9 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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- With thanks to Sizeofint for supplying database searches, I have expanded the synthesis section. There are several more syntheses that could be added, but most of these are obscure reactions or reactions where HMB is a side product. Hence I question the notability of these. Also there were some early syntheses reported (and associated physical data of the synthesized HMB) based on an aldol condensation without dehydration between acetone and ethyl acetate. However I think this would be highly unlikely since the dehydration is the driving force for the reaction. As far as physical data, there is not much more that could (or should) be added. By far, the most notable aspect of HMB is that is a naturally produced metabolite and a food additive . Much less has been published about its chemistry. Hence per WP:DUE, it is appropriate that the chemistry section of this article is significantly shorter than some of the other sections. Boghog (talk) 09:35, 25 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Nergaal: Boghog has been co-opted as a nominator to help address issues with the chemistry section. He has expanded the section since you last commented, so could you take a look and follow up with him? I'd appreciate it. Edit: FWIW, "Chemistry" is now the 2nd longest section in this article. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 17:57, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Comments by Jytdog
[edit]First, wow, clearly a lot of work went into this. Thanks for all that work! Jytdog (talk) 22:19, 16 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Support Jytdog (talk) 02:13, 28 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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This is a difficult case where we have something marketed as a dietary supplement that may have actual medical use for conditions like sarcopenia. Nissen (the inventor) started a company (see here) that sells/licenses it as a nutritional ingredient (see here) - not as a drug - to other companies that include it in their dietary supplement products - they have done well and the list of the many companies that actually sell it is here. It is marketed for example by Abbott Nutrition as "nutritional therapy" (a purely fluff marketing term for "dietary supplement") that "helps build and maintain lean body mass" per this) (None of that business stuff is in the article really, and I will circle back around and add that later unless someone else does it first; I like that stuff) Anyway, for a dietary supplement, that is what it is and is par for the course. But I am very uncomfortable with descriptions of medical use. There is no evidence in the sources that HMB is actually used as a treatment for anything in medicine. Reviews claiming efficacy and safety based on (small) clinical studies, and authors of papers recommending its medical use (and one of those papers had "medical writing assistance" from Abbott Nutrition) do not read on actual medical use. Also, language in the medical section like "it is recommended...." needs to go. I strongly oppose FA and even GA while this medical stuff is in the article in this way. If this were all moved to research I could live with it. Jytdog (talk) 22:19, 16 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Jytdog and WhatamIdoing: Yes, I think it would be a good idea to get WAID's input; the more the better. ![]()
As for the dosing info, the reason I added this to that section is because that sort of information isn't be readily available in something like a drug's prescribing information or on supplement labels/bottles for that use. I also think it's necessary for comprehensive coverage of the topic in this particular circumstance. Hence, this is one of the cases where I think an exception to strict adherence to the letter of MOS:MED is appropriate (for comparison, the only dosing info in amphetamine is a sentence in Amphetamine#Overdose which states that some individuals have used 5 grams, or roughly 100 times the maximum recommended therapeutic dose [which is 60 mg], in a single day; I included this statement because I thought it was notable). It's worth noting that I also included pricing information in the article which doesn't strictly conform to the MOS either, but I included it anyway since it's a convention in other drug articles. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 02:58, 20 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
A few comments, just from reading this section (i.e., not from reading the article itself, which is in the next tab):
I'm unlikely to finish reading the article today. (Please ping if you want my attention.) WhatamIdoing (talk) 14:21, 21 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Jytdog: I think what I'm going to end up doing is cover the marketing/clinical use of HMB in medical foods and clinical research involving the isolated compound as a dietary supplement in separate paragraphs in the section on muscle wasting. Juven includes 2 additional bioactive dietary compounds relative to the supplement form, so this is worth mentioning IMO. The research that supports the associated health claims of the medical food (specifically Juven) is relatively old compared to the clinical research involving supplemental HMB alone for sarcopenia, which is what most of the current reviews of clinical research with HMB discuss. I only remember seeing one or two passing mentions of clinical research involving the use of HMB for treating muscle wasting in AIDS patients. IIRC, only about a third of the recent clinical reviews on muscle wasting that I've read have discussed the broader use of HMB for the treatment of muscle wasting in general; those reviews are the generally the ones that cite/discuss the older clinical research with HMB. For context, PMID 15080599 (from 2004; this isn't cited in the article) appears to be the most recent meta-analysis of trials involving glutamine/arginine/HMB for AIDS/cancer (note: I haven't looked at any reviews outside the of the 5 year MEDRS filter), whereas PMID 26169182 (from 2015) is the most recent meta-analysis of trials involving HMB for sarcopenia. There was a more recent phase 3 clinical trial involving the Juven formulation (PMID 18293016 - from 2008) for cancer cachexia, but it apparently had a low rate of compliance and only showed a trend (p=.08) increase in lean body mass, as measured via bioelectrical impedance analysis (this is a fairly "noisy" method for estimating lean body mass). The RCT did make a rather interesting supposition about the contribution of HMB relative to the other 2 compounds in Juven's bioactivity though: " Although arginine has been shown to promote wound healing [15], and glutamine is also a regulator of muscle turnover, HMB, a leucine metabolite, is probably the most active agent in the mixture". I need to do a little more research to find medical reviews that support the claims associated with the 2 medical food formulations before I add anything, because I'd like to ensure that I'm using the best medical sources about Ensure ... and Juven. I'll probably get around to adding coverage of the clinical research supporting the claims of these products by sometime tomorrow night. Also, I hope you don't mind that I switched the section headers back to how they were originally ("Medical" and "Enhancing performance") - I'd like to keep the section headings in amphetamine and HMB consistent whenever possible since their layout will set a precedent for other pharmacology articles once this article is promoted. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 15:40, 23 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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I apologize for not getting back to this. I never managed to finish reading the article. I'm satisfied with the issues discussed in this section, though. WhatamIdoing (talk) 18:32, 22 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Comments by Zefr
[edit]Oppose: --Zefr (talk) 17:07, 21 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Collapsed pending an actionable response from Zefr -- Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:37, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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Although adequately written and structured, the article doesn't meet the criteria for GA/FA status. Author/nominator (A/N) User:Seppi333 has worked diligently to produce a scholarly article, but there are numerous concerns and disqualifiers for GA/FA. Mainly, the topic is given WP:UNDUE weight, and is not notable in any FA portal: publicly, HMB is simply a dietary supplement with unproven effect, so does not qualify for Medicine, Sports or Science FA portals. HMB is a natural metabolite and dietary nutraceutical only, and is not a topic sufficiently notable for GA/FA attention. The section on Clinical research underlies two problems: firstly, the evidence to date for efficacy in treating sarcopenia or for muscle enhancement is far from adequate for regulatory approval, and therefore also is weak or absent of WP:MEDRS sourcing. All the research on HMB cited is WP:PRIMARY and published in non-clinical journals, so has not been subjected to sufficient scientific rigor. HMB is not approved as a drug for treating sarcopenia and is not physiologically or pharmacologically proven to have have any effect, consequently rendering it inadequately tested by scientific rigor. Secondly, A/N appears to be a user of the product and promotes its efficacy, suggesting bias in content emphasized and sources selected. Conclusion with comments for FA administrators: 1) included among the criteria for GA/FA status should be that the topic is notable. HMB is not notable, is not approved by regulatory agencies as an effective, safe drug for use in humans, and is little more than a nutraceutical fad for would-be athletes like innumerable other dietary supplements; 2) included among the GA/FA criteria should be that an article cannot be promoted for evaluation by the same person who wrote most of the article. In other words, only an independent editor who has not worked substantially on the article, but who has expertise, should nominate for GA/FA review. In the case of HMB, all the pushing for FA approval is being done by the article's main author who is also a promotional user of the supplement. Comments on content (A/N, author and nominator are the same) 1. A/N has accounted for > 95% of the content and is alone in promoting it for rapid consent first as a GA candidate, but then without due process and few signs of interest or confirmation by fellow editors, promoted it alone to FA review. 2. in the HMB article itself, there has been little/no cross-fertilization of content, sources and interpretation. Possible reasons for this isolation of editor input are 1) the topic is not generally of interest and/or 2) A/N has a history of aggressively defending and warring over one particular view, discouraging collaboration. Signs of non-collaborative behavior are here and here. 3. A/N is an advocate of using HMB for performance-enhancement and admits bias, indicating underlying WP:SOAP and WP:PLUG which should disqualify a GA/FA candidate. 4. the article has imbalance and verges on WP:OR, particularly in the Clinical research section. There are no counter-intuitive discussions about why HMB has no value. A likely reason is that negative outcomes from research on nutraceuticals are unpublishable, and the only remaining evidence for non-effect comes from personal accounts that are not WP:SCIRS. Publication of zero-effect results on true drug candidates is a critical part of winnowing candidate human therapies. The same standards should apply to supplements of questionable value like HMB. 5. even for the literature cited, there is too much falling within WP:PRIMARY. The reviews cited are mainly of poor quality having been published in non-clinical journals. There is overuse of sports journals which are infamously unscientific and poorly edited, or nutrition journals which may be an outlet of marginal credibility for nutraceuticals. On balance, there is little if any WP:MEDRS quality in the topic or sources. 6. Accordingly, the section on Pharmacology really isn't of a high quality pertaining to human mechanisms. 7. The lede is a burden to wade through for the general user. It is heavily over-cited and over-quoted per WP:OVERCITE. GA/FA criteria: 1. well-written: Generally, yes. Major caveats are that the lede is laborious as not concise with obsessive/excessive use of quotes throughout which may discourage encyclopedic review by a general reader. 2. verifiable: dubious, as negative/counter-intuitive results are not reported or are unavailable. Emphasis on the topic is WP:UNDUE. The content reflects bias and the sources are not of MEDRS standard. 3. broad in coverage. Generally yes, but counter-intuitive arguments are absent and negative analyses are not provided. 4. NPOV. No, as only one perspective that is favorable and detectably promotional is provided. The "clinical evidence" purported for use of HMB to treat sarcopenia is overstated, under-supported by WP:MEDRS, not accepted by any regulatory agency as an approved drug, and is not in common practice. 5. stable. The article appears to be stable largely because there has been one major contributor, A/N, writing more than 95% of the content. Controversial or contested editing has been aggressively reverted by A/N, discouraging collaboration. 6. media. Appear to be ok. To conclude, A/N should be commended for the hard work of assembling information on HMB. Relevant advice, however, is here. The article and its topic are not notable and the sourcing quality falls far short of GA status, so is certainly not FA. --Zefr (talk) 17:07, 21 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
I do not intend to give stepwise revisions of the HMB article because 1) as simply a dietary supplement among hundreds of similar agents with dubious qualities, HMB is a minor, low-notability topic not deserving of GA/FA review. Unless there is a content issue worthy of further evaluation, I will not be returning to this discussion. 2) it is unpleasant to interact with the author/nominator of the HMB article, User:Seppi333, who seems incapable of constructively dealing with criticism, e.g., saying firstly (and fairly) in response to my review: "Your statements about my editing behavior and alleged bias aren't relevant to this nomination, so I'm not going to address those comments." then later addressing my critique: "he's just trying to be a dick." WP:EQ, WP:NPA. Secondary comments further supporting opposition: 1. Lede overciting and overquoting: MOS:LEADCITE and throughout the article, WP:CITEKILL 2. Sources on muscle wasting and performance enhancement. The supporting publications in the HMB article are in non-clinical or low-quality journals, filled with speculation, exaggeration and lack of rigorous scientific evidence (a characteristic commonly applied in the marketing of many dietary supplements), and are not MEDRS quality because they do not satisfy the same requirements for proof of efficacy that a drug must meet. An enteral agent producing a change in human disease or physiology is defined as a drug by the FDA. HMB is not a drug; it is simply a supplement with unproven effects like all supplements, and is subject to labeling restrictions defined here. HMB is not a nutrient, not an antioxidant vitamin, does not have a structure/function claim, and does not have any FDA-approved health claims, so by regulatory definition does not have any proven physiological effects in humans. Existing literature for HMB does not meet good-quality MEDRS standards. 3. MEDRS qualification. Sources in the HMB article do not meet good MEDRS qualities by definition under WP:MEDASSESS which says: "When writing about treatment efficacy, knowledge about the quality of the evidence helps distinguish between minor and major views, determine due weight, and identify accepted evidence-based information." HMB literature doesn't qualify by this definition, and leads to WP:UNDUE and the qualifications of WP:MEDINDY. All of the 5 statements in MEDINDY apply to the scientific vagueness about HMB, most appropriately "If independent sources discussing a medical subject are of low quality, then it is likely that the subject itself is not notable enough to have its own article or relevant for mention in other articles." When using a flowchart for choosing MEDRS quality sources under "Biomedical journals", those sources in the HMB article for "medical" and "performance enhancement" fall under "Other", i.e., low quality, further demonstrating the overall weakness and low notability of HMB as a topic. 4. Not "medical" and not a medical food. This new revision in the HMB article entered on 23 Aug is wrong and misleading to a Wikipedia user. HMB is simply an ingredient in a supplement product not proved as an effective medicine or medical food. HMB itself is not independently proven to be effective for this purpose, and is neither a medical food nor a drug ("medicine"); it is one among many ingredients in dietary supplement products not proven individually to be effective for muscle wasting (hence none is defined as a drug). "Medical food" is a specific FDA designation here, not applicable to HMB itself. Such references to the use of HMB as a medicine or as having any physiological effect should be removed from the article as unproven, misleading, not FDA approved and not MEDRS compliant. --Zefr (talk) 17:19, 23 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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Comments by Sizeofint
[edit]- Support on Media
- Acceptable copyright status - Images from scientific journals have appropriate CC-BY licenses. Other images are appropriately licensed original works by editors. All images appear to have relevant author and publication date information.
- Captions - Images are succinctly and descriptively captioned. Perhaps change "(i.e., the number of micromoles in a liter of blood plasma)" to "(in units of micromoles per liter of blood plasma)" or similar. I don't think the "i.e." is necessary. Image captions are referenced when needed.
- Images used where appropriate - Is there a appropriately licensed image of HMB as a salt, free-acid, or one of its available forms?
- Image layout - Image placement is logical and doesn't cause unsightly collisions.
Sizeofint (talk) 06:05, 27 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Sizeofint: Thanks for taking on an image review.
- "HMB free acid" refers to the compound "beta-hydroxy beta-methylbutyric acid" (i.e., the acid w/o any inactive moieties attached to the molecule), so File:Beta-Hydroxy beta-methylbutyric acid.svg is an image of HMB free acid. This image is currently used in the drugbox and a similar PNG image is used in Beta-Hydroxy beta-methylbutyric acid#Chemistry. There is an image of the calcium salt form on commons (File:Calcium hydroxymethylbutyrate skeletal.svg), but it uses a different convention for illustrating the location of the beta-hydroxy group on the compound relative to how it's illustrated throughout the article; this is why I decided not to use it. I could probably get someone to redraw the image using the convention used throughout the article if you think it's worth adding an image of the calcium salt. I'm not familiar with the programs specified in MOS:CHEM/Structure for creating structure drawings, otherwise I'd do this myself. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 08:47, 27 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Forgot to mention: I've edited that image caption per your suggestion. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 08:50, 27 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Seppi333: I am more referring to the physical form of HMB, not so much structure diagrams. The article describes HMB-FA as a "transparent, colorless to light yellow liquid" at room temperature. I am curious if there is an image of this physical form or its calcium salt available anywhere. Sizeofint (talk) 16:28, 27 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Sizeofint: Oh. I don't think there's any images of the pure free acid or calcium salt forms available anywhere online. While it would be easy enough to just take a picture of a commercial product as a tablet or after emptying a capsule or gel cap, they include a lot of fillers and bindings agents so that probably wouldn't be too informative for the "Chemistry" section. If you thought something like this might be useful for the "Available forms" section, I could take a picture of a commercially available formulation containing the calcium salt easily enough. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 22:44, 27 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Yes, I think that would be worthwhile. It's not anything that will hold up my support though. Sizeofint (talk) 23:51, 27 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Sizeofint: Oh. I don't think there's any images of the pure free acid or calcium salt forms available anywhere online. While it would be easy enough to just take a picture of a commercial product as a tablet or after emptying a capsule or gel cap, they include a lot of fillers and bindings agents so that probably wouldn't be too informative for the "Chemistry" section. If you thought something like this might be useful for the "Available forms" section, I could take a picture of a commercially available formulation containing the calcium salt easily enough. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 22:44, 27 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Seppi333: I am more referring to the physical form of HMB, not so much structure diagrams. The article describes HMB-FA as a "transparent, colorless to light yellow liquid" at room temperature. I am curious if there is an image of this physical form or its calcium salt available anywhere. Sizeofint (talk) 16:28, 27 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- My bad for not getting around to this yet; I'll have it uploaded by saturday at the latest. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 21:05, 31 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Sizeofint: I've uploaded an image and placed it halfway into the beta-Hydroxy beta-methylbutyric acid#Enhancing performance section so that it spans the part of the "Available forms" section, hopefully without breaking the page-spanning line under the "Side effects" heading (like the one above here) on most browsers. Does the image and its placement look ok to you? Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 09:16, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Seppi333: Looks great! Sizeofint (talk) 00:25, 4 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Comments by John
[edit]Just a beginning here. I have skim-read the article and the previous comments. I understand that a couple of reviewers have had qualms about over-quoting and NPOV. Have these concerns been addressed at all? I will be reading the article and the review more closely now. As I work through I will make a light copyedit with the reviews already made in mind. I will also make comments, recommendations and ask questions here. Does that sound ok? --John (talk) 19:26, 31 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Sounds good.
- W.r.t. NPOV: Only Zefr has claimed that there's an NPOV issue in the article, but he won't point me to a source that supports his claim about there being some form of contradictory research that isn't mentioned in the article. I'm not really sure how to address his objections given the circumstances; he's being so vague that my only possible option is to delete large swaths of article text, which I won't do without a consensus among several editors.
- W.r.t. the quotes: Doc James mentioned his concern about potential copyright problems associated with the lengthy quotes in the article. He asked Moonriddengirl to comment and she mentioned that there's a number of factors that determine whether text quotations are fair use or not. Neither of them have asked me to remove the quotes as of yet; however, as I mentioned in that section, I'm perfectly willing to prune the quotes down or even remove/censor them entirely if they or others genuinely believe that the quotations present a problem. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 20:59, 31 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Thank you, I will keep those comments in mind as I now begin to read the article properly. --John (talk) 21:04, 31 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Lead
- Medical reviews of randomized controlled trials indicate that there are no issues with safety from long-term use as a dietary supplement in adults.[2][10][15] Is this NPOV?
- The relevant text in the citations that support that statement are currently quoted in the each reference which supports it. The statement is a summary of the text in the body, where "long-term use" is used in place of the phrase "chronic use" from 1 of the references. In clinical trials, it has been used daily for up to a year w/o any reported adverse effects. To my knowledge, there have been no adverse effects reported from the daily use of the compound at any dose in any clinical trials in humans. This is why there's no "Overdose" section in the article. In any event, it's probably best to have someone else from WP:MED who has read the article to comment about its neutrality. @Jytdog, M. A. Bruhn, and Doc James: do the three of you think that the summary of the safety profile in the lead and the section on adverse effects are neutrally worded and accurately reflect the cited reviews? Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 23:44, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Yes, that is NPOV. I've looked through those sources and over a dozen others; HMB appears to be remarkably safe for chronic usage by adults. M. A. Bruhn (talk) 23:58, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I would suggest adding an "as of" date to the beginning of the statement, and maybe replace "indicate that there are" with "have found" . That is a pretty good catch, actually. Jytdog (talk) 00:18, 2 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I've edited the statement accordingly. [12] Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 00:36, 2 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I would suggest against this. It is definitely more technically true, but it is over-qualified to the point of violating NPOV by under-representing its safety. It has been really well studied. Look at these statements from reviews: "The safety profile of HMB is unequivocal", "Chronic consumption of HMB is safe in both young and old populations", "Further, chronic consumption of HMB appears safe ... No serious adverse effects from HMB consumption have been reported". You can't really "prove" safety, but the extensive trials on it which haven't turned up a single report of serious harm, and only an occasional whiff of irreproducible, very mild adverse effects, at least "indicate" that there are no issues with safety. M. A. Bruhn (talk) 01:02, 2 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- while i hear that, a) none of the trials were very big and b) even with things that were tested in thousands of people, sometimes things only emerge when something has been in millions of people (vioxx, avandia, etc). The statement in the reference... "chronic consumption of HMB appears safe ... No serious adverse effects from HMB consumption have been reported" is wise and good. Jytdog (talk) 01:10, 2 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- After looking at the statement again, I think using an "As of" is somewhat problematic here since it's unusual to date statements about side effects (e.g., "As of June 2014, the known side effects of XYZ are..." or "As of December 2015, the side effects of ABC that have been found in clinical trials are...") in drug articles. I don't think there's anything wrong with the "have found" wording, but I'm going to cut the "As of" template because it doesn't seem to set a good precedent for writing about side effects in other WP:PHARM articles. The publication date of the most recently published reference which cites that sentence is what I used to date the statement, so I don't think there's really any loss of information by removing it. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 02:31, 2 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- while i hear that, a) none of the trials were very big and b) even with things that were tested in thousands of people, sometimes things only emerge when something has been in millions of people (vioxx, avandia, etc). The statement in the reference... "chronic consumption of HMB appears safe ... No serious adverse effects from HMB consumption have been reported" is wise and good. Jytdog (talk) 01:10, 2 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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- "Since" and "while" make these sentences slightly ambiguous. Is it possible to reword?
- Sure, I don't see why not. If you have a particular way of rephrasing it in mind, feel free to change it. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 23:44, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- HMB is sold in the United States and internationally ... You mean it is sold all around the world? This looks very insular to the majority of readers, who are not Americans. Just say it is sold all around the world, if that is an important point for the lead. I am not sure that it is.
- the conjugate base, calcium β-hydroxy β-methylbutyrate monohydrate (HMB-Ca) Why the italics?
- The clause "a monohydrated calcium salt of the conjugate base" which immediately precedes "calcium β-hydroxy β-methylbutyrate monohydrate" is referring to/talking about that particular compound/phrase, so I figured MOS:WORDSASWORDS applies here. I did something similar in the lead of amphetamine when talking about what that word "amphetamine" properly refers to. If you think it shouldn't be italicized, I don't mind removing the italics. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 23:44, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- both in and outside of competition I prefer to avoid "outside of"; do we need to say this at all?
- WADA/NCAA both make a distinction between the use of certain ergogenic substances during competition vs at any time. E.g., the WADA banned substances list has 3 tabs on the left side that link to pages on substances which are banned in specific sports, at all times, and during competition. However, it probably isn't necessary to specify that. To address this and the following bullet point simultaneously, I combined both sentences into the following statement: "
As of 2015[update], HMB has not been banned by the National Collegiate Athletic Association (NCAA), World Anti-Doping Agency (WADA), or any other athletic organization in the United States or internationally.
" I don't think it's really necessary to mention the lack of testing for it since that's sort of implied. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 23:44, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- WADA/NCAA both make a distinction between the use of certain ergogenic substances during competition vs at any time. E.g., the WADA banned substances list has 3 tabs on the left side that link to pages on substances which are banned in specific sports, at all times, and during competition. However, it probably isn't necessary to specify that. To address this and the following bullet point simultaneously, I combined both sentences into the following statement: "
- Close paraphrasing is a problem. The source has "The drug is not tested for nor banned by any sporting organization" and the article says "As of 2015, HMB was not tested for or banned by any athletic organization in the United States or internationally". There's that awful clunky phrase again, but the paraphrase is a more pressing concern.
- My bad on the paraphrasing. I should have caught that. I've attempted to address the phrasing and close paraphrasing issues with the revision that I've described in the above bullet. Let me know if the wording is ok. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 23:44, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Especially as I was looking at NPOV, I see potential to rewrite this into something a little less pro-HMB. I will have more comments later but if this is a fair sample of the whole article I could not support it at present. --John (talk) 21:08, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I think the goal here should be to ensure that the existing article text is an accurate restatement of what is asserted about it in current medical reviews. If a sentence in the article includes a medical claim which is too strong relative to what is asserted in existing literature, then the statement obviously should be revised per WP:V. If an assertion which is contradictory to what is stated in the article and the cited literature exists in other current medical literature, then it should also be covered/cited in the article per WP:DUE/WP:NPOV. However, I don't think the current wording about HMB's clinical efficacy or safety is overstated since I worked with Jytdog (see his review above) and M. A. Bruhn (see the "Comments about safety" section on the HMB talk page) to ensure that the evidence which supports the statements of efficacy and safety in the "Uses" and "Side effects" sections is clearly and accurately described in the text. To my knowledge, there are no current medical reviews which make assertions that contradict any statements in the article.
- Anyway, I figured the existing article text would need a little work before satisfying 1a. Your prior experience in this area is why I asked you specifically for help.
Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 23:44, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- User:John I completely hear you on the NPOV thing. Seppi is correct that this flows directly from the sources, which are pretty darn unimpeachable with regard to their type per MEDRS, and per MEDASSESS we cannot go second guessing what they say. I am dismayed by what they say - in my view they are way too definite and rosy based on the data they use - but that is my problem, not Wikipedia's. :) And I have not seen any reviews that bring a different perspective. Seppi reflected the sources accurately. So these statements are OK per NPOV in my view. Jytdog (talk) 23:58, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- You two are both looking at this article as if it is a pharmaceutical, it's not. Why are dietary supplements considered safe until proven harmful under US law whereas pharmaceuticals are considered harmful until proven safe? If you can't answer that question then you shouldn't be presuming to know better than the literature written by those that have actual expertise in the area. M. A. Bruhn (talk) 04:49, 2 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- The answer to why they are treated differently is politics. Dietary Supplement Health and Education Act of 1994. And pharmaceuticals are not "considered harmful until proven safe" but that is offtopic. In any case please discuss content and sourcing and stop talking about other editors per se. Jytdog (talk) 19:53, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Supplements need to be proven harmful to be taken off the market, drugs have to be proven safe to put on the market, that is what I was trying to say. If you want to dismiss this as entirely due to politics then go ahead, you can think whatever you like. As for your last comment, why don't you reflect on that yourself. M. A. Bruhn (talk) 04:28, 7 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- The answer to why they are treated differently is politics. Dietary Supplement Health and Education Act of 1994. And pharmaceuticals are not "considered harmful until proven safe" but that is offtopic. In any case please discuss content and sourcing and stop talking about other editors per se. Jytdog (talk) 19:53, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- You two are both looking at this article as if it is a pharmaceutical, it's not. Why are dietary supplements considered safe until proven harmful under US law whereas pharmaceuticals are considered harmful until proven safe? If you can't answer that question then you shouldn't be presuming to know better than the literature written by those that have actual expertise in the area. M. A. Bruhn (talk) 04:49, 2 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
General point I am going to hold off on a more detailed review until the concerns about NPOV are properly addressed. Here is what I mean, with my FAR hat on. Whether we consider this substance as a pharmaceutical, a dietary supplement or a food, an article which is universally positive looks like it breaches NPOV. A quick Google search readily yields results like these:
- Kreider RB, Ferreira M, Wilson M, Almada AL. Effects of Calcium ß-Hydroxy-ß-methylbutyrate (HMB) Supplementation During Resistance-Training on Markers of Catabolism, Body Composition and Strength. Int J Sports Med 1999; 20: 503-5091
- Journal of the International Society of Sports Nutrition
- In studies, HMB has repeatedly failed to show any solid evidence that it increases lean muscle mass, increases strength output or reduces post workout muscle soreness [1, [2], [3].], which leads to
1: Int J Sport Nutr Exerc Metab. 2001 Sep;11: Beta-hydroxy-beta-methylbutyrate (HMB) supplementation does not affect changes in strength or body composition during resistance training in trained men. 2: J Strength Cond Res. 2009 May;23(3):827-35. Effects of nine weeks of beta-hydroxy-beta- methylbutyrate supplementation on strength and body composition in resistance trained men. 3: J Strength Cond Res. 2010 Feb;24(2): Exercise-induced muscle damage is not attenuated by beta-hydroxy-beta-methylbutyrate and alpha-ketoisocaproic acid supplementation. I lack the expertise and time to trawl properly through the sources to evaluate these sources or to find more, but I think a general reader may be perplexed not to see these more nuanced critiques represented in our article. If, on the other hand, these are outdated or misguided claims which have been debunked, it would be interesting to present the claims and the counter-claims. --John (talk) 19:31, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @John: I'm not sure that those sources even satisfy WP:RS, much much less WP:MEDRS. If you can find a MEDRS-quality source that contains "counterclaims" like the ones you've linked, I'd be happy to add them. Unfortunately, per MEDRS, I can't add anything that doesn't meet that guideline when adding and sourcing a medical claim. I don't think I'll be able to do anything to act on your objection about an alleged NPOV issue because I know of no medical sources that make the same assertions as these websites. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 19:45, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- (edit conflict) User:John - NPOV = accurately reflecting what reliable sources say. For content about health, WP:MEDRS defines reliable sources, and not one of the sources you cite above are OK per MEDRS. I As I noted above, here, I too was unhappy with how positive recent reviews are, and I actually raised that at WT:MED for discussion, here: Wikipedia_talk:WikiProject_Medicine/Archive_80#Question_about_a_journal. And please take the time to read that. Please do not criticize the NPOV aspect of this article based on sources that are not reliable. Thx. Jytdog (talk) 19:48, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Those responses can cover this subject to the degree that it is considered as a medical food. Are there any sources that speak to perceptions of its efficacy as a bodybuilding supplement? As this is not a health concern but a more general human one, I am not sure that MEDRS needs to apply. --John (talk) 20:04, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- That's interesting; we don't usually have any kind of content about "popular perceptions" about any health intervention. We apply MEDRS to content about health with regard to dietary supplements etc all the time. And to bodybuilding too. That is definitely health content. Jytdog (talk) 20:17, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- You're the experts, but if the International Journal of Sports Medicine is not considered a reliable source, there are an awful lot of other articles here that need adjusted. --John (talk) 21:27, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Here's an interesting and I think MEDRS-compliant source which seems to present a fair summary of the various studies. There seem to be conflicting results. The article should probably reflect that. --John (talk) 21:33, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- John for pete's sake. Here is what you wrote: Journal of the International Society of Sports Nutrition. The link there is to a blog. That blog is not a reliable source. That blog posting is about this paper published in the Journal of the International Society of Sports Nutrition. That paper is a PRIMARY source (see MEDRS definitions) We don't use primary sources for content about health, we use literature reviews or statements by major medical or scientific bodies. In the post just above, you link to PMC 2245953 which = PMID 18173841. This is indeed a review, but one from 2008 - eight years old. Again per MEDRS (specifically WP:MEDDATE) we use the most recent reviews that are published, generally not more than five years old for actively-researched topics, and this is indeed actively researched. As I said above, NPOV is based on reliable sources, and MEDRS defines reliable sources. Please base your comments on WP's policies and guidelines. Jytdog (talk) 21:51, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- To my knowledge, there are currently only 2 MEDRS-quality reviews which focus entirely upon the effects of HMB in athletes - PMID 25663250 and PMID 23374455 - and one which should be published within the next couple of months: [13]. I've already used these 2 reviews to source content in the article and I'm actively monitoring pubmed for when the 3rd one is published. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 10:43, 7 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- John for pete's sake. Here is what you wrote: Journal of the International Society of Sports Nutrition. The link there is to a blog. That blog is not a reliable source. That blog posting is about this paper published in the Journal of the International Society of Sports Nutrition. That paper is a PRIMARY source (see MEDRS definitions) We don't use primary sources for content about health, we use literature reviews or statements by major medical or scientific bodies. In the post just above, you link to PMC 2245953 which = PMID 18173841. This is indeed a review, but one from 2008 - eight years old. Again per MEDRS (specifically WP:MEDDATE) we use the most recent reviews that are published, generally not more than five years old for actively-researched topics, and this is indeed actively researched. As I said above, NPOV is based on reliable sources, and MEDRS defines reliable sources. Please base your comments on WP's policies and guidelines. Jytdog (talk) 21:51, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- That's interesting; we don't usually have any kind of content about "popular perceptions" about any health intervention. We apply MEDRS to content about health with regard to dietary supplements etc all the time. And to bodybuilding too. That is definitely health content. Jytdog (talk) 20:17, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Those responses can cover this subject to the degree that it is considered as a medical food. Are there any sources that speak to perceptions of its efficacy as a bodybuilding supplement? As this is not a health concern but a more general human one, I am not sure that MEDRS needs to apply. --John (talk) 20:04, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- (edit conflict) User:John - NPOV = accurately reflecting what reliable sources say. For content about health, WP:MEDRS defines reliable sources, and not one of the sources you cite above are OK per MEDRS. I As I noted above, here, I too was unhappy with how positive recent reviews are, and I actually raised that at WT:MED for discussion, here: Wikipedia_talk:WikiProject_Medicine/Archive_80#Question_about_a_journal. And please take the time to read that. Please do not criticize the NPOV aspect of this article based on sources that are not reliable. Thx. Jytdog (talk) 19:48, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
If there's an issue with the current summary sentence in the "Enhancing performance" section due to its lack of specificity, I'm okay with writing another sentence or two following the summary sentence in that paragraph to specifically address why there are positive and negative findings[note 1] per the 2 reviews that focus on this topic - primarily this International Society of Sports Nutrition (ISSN) review which is a comprehensive review of all HMB studies in athletes as of February 2013,[note 2] but also this review (most of this is attributed to statistical design issues in certain studies) - and which subpopulations appear to benefit more from HMB (IIRC, untrained individuals "appear" to obtain more of a benefit, but I didn't think this was particularly notable because I wasn't aware of a study which compared groups composed of HMB-treated untrained individuals, HMB-treated trained individuals, placebo-treated untrained, and placebo-treated trained individuals; this study design would allow for a statistician to determine if there's a statistically significant difference between the average lean mass gains in the untrained vs trained HMB-treated groups).
If the issue is with something which isn't covered in one of the currently cited reviews, I'll probably need your help with finding a source that makes a statement supporting your POV.
So, in a nutshell, if you still think that there's still a problem, just let me know exactly what the issue is and I'll do my best to address it. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 18:07, 9 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @John: I just want to be perfectly clear about what positive clinical findings from supplemental HMB that I've chosen to cover in the article: I did not cover recent positive findings involving HMB that were covered in MEDRS-quality reviews that either have not been replicated or been supported by research on a sample which is (IMO) sufficiently large even if that finding has been replicated in 1 or more clinical trials. Some examples of positive (i.e., statistically significant) findings that I chose not to mention in the article, despite being covered in one or more MEDRS-quality reviews of placebo-controlled clinical trials with HMB on humans, include:
- a slight lowering of LDL ["bad"] cholesterol in HMB-treated individuals relative to controls
- greater improvements in nitrogen balance from the HMB-only group relative to both Juven [i.e., an HMB+arginine+glutamine mixture] and placebo groups in trauma ICU patients
- decreases in post-discharge mortality and better nutritional status in HMB+protein-treated malnourished hospitalized adults relative to placebo-treated controls (the placebo in this case was a supplement containing only carbohydrates)
- improvements in aerobic/endurance exercise performance and indices of aerobic function in HMB-treated athletes relative to controls
- greater power output during anaerobic exercise in HMB-treated athletes relative to controls
- As mentioned above, all five of these positive findings are cited by at least 1 MEDRS-quality review (e.g., the review to which the statements are hyperlinked) and the latter 2 findings (i.e., improved aerobic performance and power output) are supported by multiple primary studies, so I COULD add all 5 of these findings to the article. However, I CHOSE NOT TO because I personally don't feel that the evidence base is strong enough to merit inclusion in the article. You need to realize that I am actually erring on the opposite side of NPOV that you think I am: I'm not covering all of the positive findings that are supported by the cited literature.[note 3]
- Lastly, one review published in July 2014 cited 2 other reviews (neither of which was the comprehensive ISSN review) to make the assertion that more than 20 primary publications showed positive results on body composition and muscle function/strength.[1] As of today, about 50 pubmed-indexed clinical trials with HMB in humans have been published (this assertion is verifiable in this link), however only a fraction of those specifically examined the effect of daily HMB use on lean body mass and muscle strength/function in athletes. E.g., some of those 50 studies only examined unrelated outcomes, like the effects of long-term HMB supplementation on cardiovascular system and endothelial function in older adults, the immediate cellular effects of HMB in the skeletal muscle tissue of living humans, the effects on aerobic performance, post-discharge mortality in trauma ICU patients, etc.. Hopefully what I've mentioned here and the medical reviews that I've cited/linked will give you an idea of the current state of evidence supporting the assertions in the "Medical" and "Enhancing performance" sections in the article. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 19:59, 9 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks Seppi333 for the considered response. It isn't so much that I have a POV that I want to see represented, it is more that my knowledge and experience make me suspicious of products that virtually claim to be elixirs, with perfect efficacy and no side effects, as I know and you know that in the medium to long term there is no such thing. In addition to the qualms I feel about the very positive gloss that is being given to this product in Wikipedia's voice (remember we had a similar conversation with regard to Adderall at the amphetamine FAR which we resolved amicably?), I have the additional sense of potential charlatanism and snake-oil salesmen at work, given my suspicion of bodybuilding supplements and the accusations of conflict of interest in some of the positive studies. I am not advocating for a particular POV here, but for NPOV which is policy. I would suggest, again, that a more sober wording of some of the article may answer this point. Let's pretend it is a car, or a movie. We report the rave reviews, the stars at the premiere, the awards it won, but we also report the complaints that it was over-rated. Obviously we have to go with the sources, and I hear what you say about MEDRS; this sourcing works for claims about its safety for sure, inasmuch as the subject of this article is a medicine or medical food. But I don't see anything wrong in covering it as a commercial product as well; it's possible that the majority of people reading this article will be interested in finding out about it for this reason, and if there are adverse consumer experiences out there, people reporting it didn't particularly work for them, we might profitably consider adding them to the article if they are well-sourced. Honestly, the article will read better with a more balanced approach. Incidentally, both of you, there are no strong feelings about this on my side, I am just doing my best to help you to review this article as requested, and Jytdog I am doing my best to "base [my] comments on WP's policies and guidelines." as I understand them. The relevant one here is WP:NPOV which reads in part Neutrality requires that each article or other page in the mainspace fairly represent all significant viewpoints that have been published by reliable sources, in proportion to the prominence of each viewpoint in the published, reliable sources. I'll have more to say later, and some specific recommendations. I am working at quite a slow pace as I have a lot of other things going on but rest assured I will not forget the work we are doing here. --John (talk) 00:10, 10 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- A couple of weeks have now passed and I should have a bit more time to put into this. If nobody objects I will have a hack at the prose; I'll do some specific recommendations. Before I do that I will read the article in detail again, to take account of the changes, which I see as a modest improvement. The pH looked awfully low, and I am glad that was picked up! --John (talk) 22:04, 17 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks John - I appreciate your willingness to take on a review of the prose. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 14:35, 18 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @John: Since Boghog has been co-opted as a nominator to work on the chemistry content in the article to address Nergaal's concerns, I should be able to devote the majority of my time to addressing any concerns that you and Axl have about the wording and illustrations in the article. There should only be about two weeks remaining before this nomination is either archived or promoted though, so do you think you'd be able to read through the article and provide a list of issues for me to work on before then? I should be able to promptly address any concerns involving how the prose is written; finding appropriate sources for new article content or revising any of the diagrams might take me a bit longer, but I should be able to make any of those changes within a day or two provided that the an objection involving either of those is sufficiently specific.
FWIW, I didn't say this before, but I'm completely okay with revising any of the statements in the article to address potential NPOV concerns provided that the revised statement still satisfies WP:V. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 03:27, 25 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]- Thank you. I haven't forgotten about this. I will get to this in the next day or two, I promise. --John (talk) 20:08, 25 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @John: Since Boghog has been co-opted as a nominator to work on the chemistry content in the article to address Nergaal's concerns, I should be able to devote the majority of my time to addressing any concerns that you and Axl have about the wording and illustrations in the article. There should only be about two weeks remaining before this nomination is either archived or promoted though, so do you think you'd be able to read through the article and provide a list of issues for me to work on before then? I should be able to promptly address any concerns involving how the prose is written; finding appropriate sources for new article content or revising any of the diagrams might take me a bit longer, but I should be able to make any of those changes within a day or two provided that the an objection involving either of those is sufficiently specific.
- Thanks John - I appreciate your willingness to take on a review of the prose. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 14:35, 18 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- References
- ^ Rahman A, Wilund K, Fitschen PJ, Jeejeebhoy K, Agarwala R, Drover JW, Mourtzakis M (July 2014). "Elderly persons with ICU-acquired weakness: the potential role for β-hydroxy-β-methylbutyrate (HMB) supplementation?". JPEN J. Parenter. Enteral Nutr. 38 (5): 567–575. doi:10.1177/0148607113502545. PMID 24072740.
More than 20 publications in humans have demonstrated benefit with HMB supplementation associated with increased lean body mass without fat gain, improved markers of muscle strength, and decreased onset of muscle soreness with training and reduced markers of muscle damage.5,29
- Notes
- ^ By "positive and negative findings", I mean "statistically significant and statistically insignificant effects", not good/healthy and bad/unhealthy effects.
- ^ Of all the medical reviews that I've linked to today, this review is the only one that focuses exclusively on the effects of supplemental HMB in athletes.
- ^ These findings ARE WP:DUE due to their coverage in a MEDRS-quality source and normally findings like this are covered in pharmacology articles. However, as I've already stated here and alluded to in Jytdog's section, I'm choosing not to cover these findings simply because I believe that the findings should be verified in a second study or validated in a larger sample - and ideally have an established biomolecular/pharmacodynamic basis for the effect - before being covered in a section on a substance's clinical effects in healthy individuals.
This is exactly the same approach that I used when writing about the performance-enhancing effects of amphetamine in Amphetamine#Enhancing performance, which you and many others reviewed in its 5 FAC nominations.
Comments by Axl
[edit]In the lead section, paragraph 2, is it necessary to include grapefruit as an example of a citrus fruit in the last sentence? Axl ¤ [Talk] 11:29, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Grapefruit is mentioned in more sources than citrus fruit, so I went ahead and removed the latter and kept the former in the lead. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 11:44, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks. Axl ¤ [Talk] 12:00, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Grapefruit is mentioned in more sources than citrus fruit, so I went ahead and removed the latter and kept the former in the lead. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 11:44, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
From the lead section, paragraph 3: "The effects of HMB on human skeletal muscle were first discovered by Steven L. Nissen at Iowa State University in the mid-1990s." Is Steven L. Nissen really a notable person who should be mentioned in the lead section? The lead is supposed to be a summary of the whole article. However neither Steven L. Nissen nor Iowa State University are mentioned in the rest of the article. Axl ¤ [Talk] 11:34, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I'm aware that it isn't mentioned in the body, but the only place to put it would be in a History section which would contain a single sentence. I didn't think anyone would really care, but
since this issue has come up I've created that section to address it.Steven Nissen is the founder of Metabolic Technologies, which jointly owns all the patents on HMB with the Iowa State University. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 11:44, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply] - Since Nergaal objected to the 1 sentence section, I'll recreate the history section if I can find some information to expand it with. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 14:51, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- As mentioned in Nergaal's section above, I could expand the history section to a 3–4 sentence paragraph. Is that sufficient? Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 17:34, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- A short "History" section would be great. Axl ¤ [Talk] 19:11, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Alright, I'll expand the section by sometime tomorrow and ping you when I'm done. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 19:37, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Axl: I've finished expanding the "History" section. Does it look ok to you? Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 08:16, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Yes, thanks. Axl ¤ [Talk] 10:04, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Axl: I've finished expanding the "History" section. Does it look ok to you? Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 08:16, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Alright, I'll expand the section by sometime tomorrow and ping you when I'm done. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 19:37, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- A short "History" section would be great. Axl ¤ [Talk] 19:11, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- As mentioned in Nergaal's section above, I could expand the history section to a 3–4 sentence paragraph. Is that sufficient? Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 17:34, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I'm aware that it isn't mentioned in the body, but the only place to put it would be in a History section which would contain a single sentence. I didn't think anyone would really care, but
In "Pharmacology", is is possible to add HMB (and perhaps L-leucine) alongside amino acids in the first diagram? Axl ¤ [Talk] 12:02, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Sure, I can do that. The font won't be a perfect match with the one used in the rest of the image though - is that ok? Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 12:10, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I've updated the image from [14] to [15]. If you're okay with that change, let me know and I'll update the captions in the articles where that image is used. Otherwise, I need to revert the image. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 12:32, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- The adjustment looks good. The new diagram also looks appropriate for the other two articles where it is used—as long as leucine and HMB are the primary mediators rather than other amino acids. Please go ahead and change the caption. Axl ¤ [Talk] 19:15, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- According to the review that the image is from (not the caption, but the article text itself), leucine and its metabolites, specifically HMB, are the most significant modulators of MPS, which they affect through the illustrated mTOR signaling pathway.
The reference that they cite (Wilkinson et al. 2013) demonstrated that both leucine and HMB induce pronounced activation/phosphorylation of mTOR in humans, leading to increased myofibrillar MPS in skeletal muscle in vivo. Other amino acids also affect mTOR activity and myofibrillar MPS, but generally to a much lesser extent than leucine. Anyway, I'll go ahead and update the captions a little later today. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 19:37, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]Crucially, this negative protein balance is transiently reversed (MPS > MPB) after food intake (contingent on sufficient high‐quality protein), such that net protein balance is neutral on a daily basis (MPS = MPB). The mechanisms underlying the anabolic effects of food intake involve both the stimulation of MPS (Rennie et al. 1982) and suppression of MPB (Wilkes et al. 2009). The potent increase in MPS is driven almost entirely by essential amino acids (EAAs) (Smith et al. 1992), with the branched chain AA (BCAA: leucine, isoleucine and valine), in particular leucine [and its metabolite(s), e.g. β‐hydroxy β‐methylbutyric acid (HMB) (Van Koevering & Nissen 1992)] being central to these effects (Wilkinson et al. 2013). Although the mechanisms underlying the unique anabolic properties of leucine are incompletely defined, recent work in yeast and cultured mammalians cells has demonstrated that leucyl tRNA synthetase is upstream of activating the hitherto ‘cellular AA sensor’, the mechanistic target of rapamycin complex 1 (mTORC1) in response to leucine (Bonfils et al. 2012, Han et al. 2012).
– the review linked above- I just noticed that "AA" is used twice in the graph at the bottom, so I need to revise the image to add something like "and HMB" beneath "amino acids (AA)" tomorrow when I have more time. I've reverted my change to the image for now. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 02:55, 2 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- According to the review that the image is from (not the caption, but the article text itself), leucine and its metabolites, specifically HMB, are the most significant modulators of MPS, which they affect through the illustrated mTOR signaling pathway.
- The adjustment looks good. The new diagram also looks appropriate for the other two articles where it is used—as long as leucine and HMB are the primary mediators rather than other amino acids. Please go ahead and change the caption. Axl ¤ [Talk] 19:15, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I've updated the image from [14] to [15]. If you're okay with that change, let me know and I'll update the captions in the articles where that image is used. Otherwise, I need to revert the image. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 12:32, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Sure, I can do that. The font won't be a perfect match with the one used in the rest of the image though - is that ok? Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 12:10, 1 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Yes, thank you. Axl ¤ [Talk] 10:08, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
In "Pharmacology", subsection "Pharmacodynamics", paragraph 1: "Chronic supplementation with HMB for one month in rats." I am not convinced that one month is "chronic". (The word "chronic" usually refers to longterm diseases.) Axl ¤ [Talk] 11:34, 2 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Removing that word is fine with me. I've cut it. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 05:43, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks. Axl ¤ [Talk] 10:14, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Removing that word is fine with me. I've cut it. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 05:43, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Axl: The sentence "The signaling cascade that mediates the HMB-induced increase in human skeletal muscle protein synthesis has been identified in vivo.
" isn't entirely correct. HMB's immediate biomolecular target isn't mTOR (mTOR does function as an energy and amino acid sensor, but I'm not sure that HMB is "sensed" by mTOR analogous to how most proteinogenic amino acids do, which modulate mTOR activity through its capacity to "sense" protein precursor availability via amino acid signaling through the Rag family of GTPases (Rag GTPases) [see diagram – top left box]) - HMB would need to bind to a receptor or a different enzyme which induces mTOR phosphorylation as a downstream effect in its signaling cascade. HMB's proximal biomolecular target(s) in humans aren't currently known (this is why I included information on potential upstream targets in the pharmacodynamics section based upon in vitro and animal studies with HMB which detected signaling events involving IGF-1, Akt, and mitogen activated protein kinases), but components of its signaling cascade downstream have been identified in humans in vivo - namely mTOR phosphorylation, mTORC1 activation, p70S6 kinase phosphorylation, and 4EBP1 phosphorylation. Would you mind if I changed this sentence back to how it was or if we revised it to reflect the fact that it's immediate biomolecular target isn't known? Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 06:23, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- The original sentence was: "As of May 2016[update], components of the signaling cascade that mediate the HMB-induced increase in human skeletal muscle protein synthesis have been identified in vivo." It certainly was not clear to me that some aspects of the cascade are still unknown. You might assert that omission of the definite article (i.e. stating just "components" rather than "the components") implies that not necessarily all components are known.
- How about "many components", "most components" or "some components"? Axl ¤ [Talk] 10:34, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- "Many" would probably be best out of those 3. Personally, I'd probably go with "several", but I'll leave it up to you. In case you want to read the relevant literature, this primary source was the basis for that statement - it's cited by and covered in the 3 reviews which support that or the following sentence. One of the reviews is authored by many of the same individuals who authored that primary source, so I figured citing it in that section along with the reviews would be reasonable. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 10:48, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- That source is heavy going, especially as I have no expertise in this field. While it is clear that HMB's (insulin-independent) prevention of muscle protein breakdown is not fully understood, its effect on muscle protein synthesis seems to be better elucidated. Anyway, "several" would be fine. Axl ¤ [Talk] 12:55, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I've updated the wording in that sentence accordingly. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:38, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Okay, thanks. Axl ¤ [Talk] 11:42, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I've updated the wording in that sentence accordingly. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:38, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- That source is heavy going, especially as I have no expertise in this field. While it is clear that HMB's (insulin-independent) prevention of muscle protein breakdown is not fully understood, its effect on muscle protein synthesis seems to be better elucidated. Anyway, "several" would be fine. Axl ¤ [Talk] 12:55, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- "Many" would probably be best out of those 3. Personally, I'd probably go with "several", but I'll leave it up to you. In case you want to read the relevant literature, this primary source was the basis for that statement - it's cited by and covered in the 3 reviews which support that or the following sentence. One of the reviews is authored by many of the same individuals who authored that primary source, so I figured citing it in that section along with the reviews would be reasonable. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 10:48, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- How about "many components", "most components" or "some components"? Axl ¤ [Talk] 10:34, 3 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"Pharmacology", subsection "Pharmacodynamics", paragraph 1. The first half of the paragraph is about human skeletal muscle, while the second half is about the less-well understood non-muscle protein. Would you consider splitting the paragraph into two distinct paragraphs? I realise that this would leave each with only two sentences. Axl ¤ [Talk] 11:49, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- The reason that I grouped them together is that the sources discussed the latter effect (IGF-1 signaling) in the context of increased mTOR phosphorylation. I could split the paragraph if you really think it's necessary, but it is discussing the phenomenon in context of same context as the former sentences (mTOR signaling). This is why I grouped the sentences together. Are you sure you want me to split it into 2 paragraphs in light of this? Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 09:36, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Well, I asked you to consider it. You have done so, and you still think that a single paragraph is better. Let's leave it as it is. Axl ¤ [Talk] 10:14, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- The reason that I grouped them together is that the sources discussed the latter effect (IGF-1 signaling) in the context of increased mTOR phosphorylation. I could split the paragraph if you really think it's necessary, but it is discussing the phenomenon in context of same context as the former sentences (mTOR signaling). This is why I grouped the sentences together. Are you sure you want me to split it into 2 paragraphs in light of this? Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 09:36, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
From "Pharmacology", subsection "Pharmacokinetics", paragraph 1: "The plasma clearance of HMB-FA, which reflects tissue uptake and utilization, is roughly 25–40% higher than the clearance of HMB-Ca as well." I am unconvinced that plasma clearance reflects tissue uptake and utilization. Actually the phrase "plasma clearance" is somewhat vague. Is this the same as "clearance (pharmacology)"? (Have a look at this reference.) It is very peculiar that HMB-FA has a higher "plasma clearance" while also having a longer elimination half-life (as indicated by the preceding sentence). I am aware that the source (Wilson) states: "Perhaps the most intriguing findings were that plasma clearance, indicative of tissue uptake and utilization, was 25% greater with HMB-FA consumption compared with an equivalent HMB-CA consumption." Axl ¤ [Talk] 12:21, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- That statement ("... which reflects tissue uptake and utilization") comes from both of the cited sources (a primary study on HMB pharmacokinetics and a review). From my reading into the sources, I believe it's referring to the plasma clearance into body tissues, primarily skeletal muscle wherein it is metabolized, not clearance into urine by the kidneys. I don't entirely understand the mechanics that mediate this effect. Do you have a proposed rewording? Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 09:36, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Both papers misuse the term "[plasma] clearance". This makes me uneasy about accepting them as references for the claim about tissue uptake.
- A suitable statement might be "Tissue uptake and utilization of HMB-FA is 25–40% higher than for HMB-Ca." Is there another source that provides this information without mentioning "clearance"? Axl ¤ [Talk] 13:07, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I'll take a look and follow up if I can find anything. I'll probably use your suggested version either way. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 20:02, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- This study in rats (by Shreeram) indicates higher bioavailability for Ca-HMB. Regarding clearance, Shreeram states: "This observation is in agreement with Fuller et al. who observed a 25% increase in the systemic clearance of FAHMB compared with CaHMB." Shreeram also mentions: "Another plausible explanation for the increased clearance of FAHMB might be rapid tissue uptake and/or oxidation compared with CaHMB." Axl ¤ [Talk] 12:20, 7 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Compared to HMB-FA, HMB-Ca has a higher relative bioavailability in rats and a lower relative bioavailability in humans. I'm hesitant to use an animal study to cite PK info for this reason. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 16:20, 7 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Axl: I've reworded the statement per your suggestion. Only these 2 studies with HMB in humans - PMID 21134325 & PMID 26373270 - appear to cover the difference in tissue uptake/utilization between HMB-Ca and HMB-FA. On a related note, our definition in the lead of the clearance (pharmacology) article appears to be in agreement with how PMID 15601437 (i.e., the study about plasma clearance that you linked) defines it. I don't really see any inconsistency between how the 2 cited sources (the ISSN review and PMID 26373270) and PMID 15601437 use the term "plasma clearance"; the latter article indicates that metabolism and/or excretion in organs (e.g., skeletal muscle) other than the lungs, kidneys, and liver contributes to plasma clearance. Per its abstract, "
Plasma (total, systemic...) clearance is determined by all the individual metabolizing/eliminating organ clearances and involves mainly liver and kidney clearances.
". Nonetheless, I now realize that the way I originally wrote that statement ("The plasma clearance of HMB-FA, which reflects tissue uptake and utilization, is roughly 25–40% higher than the clearance of HMB-Ca as well") was incorrect because it suggested that ALL of HMB's plasma clearance is due to tissue uptake and utilization (i.e., due to HMB metabolism to cholesterol, presumably mostly in skeletal muscle, or to acetyl-CoA in various body tissues). This is clearly false because its renal excretion rate is 10–40%, as stated in the article and the sources which cite that statement. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 20:34, 9 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]- Thank you. I am happy with the current statements. Axl ¤ [Talk] 11:44, 12 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Axl: I've reworded the statement per your suggestion. Only these 2 studies with HMB in humans - PMID 21134325 & PMID 26373270 - appear to cover the difference in tissue uptake/utilization between HMB-Ca and HMB-FA. On a related note, our definition in the lead of the clearance (pharmacology) article appears to be in agreement with how PMID 15601437 (i.e., the study about plasma clearance that you linked) defines it. I don't really see any inconsistency between how the 2 cited sources (the ISSN review and PMID 26373270) and PMID 15601437 use the term "plasma clearance"; the latter article indicates that metabolism and/or excretion in organs (e.g., skeletal muscle) other than the lungs, kidneys, and liver contributes to plasma clearance. Per its abstract, "
- Compared to HMB-FA, HMB-Ca has a higher relative bioavailability in rats and a lower relative bioavailability in humans. I'm hesitant to use an animal study to cite PK info for this reason. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 16:20, 7 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- This study in rats (by Shreeram) indicates higher bioavailability for Ca-HMB. Regarding clearance, Shreeram states: "This observation is in agreement with Fuller et al. who observed a 25% increase in the systemic clearance of FAHMB compared with CaHMB." Shreeram also mentions: "Another plausible explanation for the increased clearance of FAHMB might be rapid tissue uptake and/or oxidation compared with CaHMB." Axl ¤ [Talk] 12:20, 7 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I'll take a look and follow up if I can find anything. I'll probably use your suggested version either way. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 20:02, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- That statement ("... which reflects tissue uptake and utilization") comes from both of the cited sources (a primary study on HMB pharmacokinetics and a review). From my reading into the sources, I believe it's referring to the plasma clearance into body tissues, primarily skeletal muscle wherein it is metabolized, not clearance into urine by the kidneys. I don't entirely understand the mechanics that mediate this effect. Do you have a proposed rewording? Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 09:36, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
In "Pharmacology", subsection "Biosynthesis", the diagram has a misspelling: "β-methyl-gluconly-CoA" on the right should be "β-methyl-gluconyl-CoA". Axl ¤ [Talk] 12:07, 12 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed: Before After. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:45, 13 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks. Axl ¤ [Talk] 18:37, 13 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed: Before After. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:45, 13 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- In "Pharmacology", subsection "Biosynthesis", the diagram appears to show two pathways that re-join at the end as acetyl-CoA. However, alongside HMB-CoA, there is a (reversible) reaction to MC-CoA. Use of the abbreviation here makes the diagram less obvious that this is the same chemical as β-methyl-crotonyl-CoA. Shouldn't these two be conflated, so that there is a sort of "triangle" between HMB, HMB-CoA and MC-CoA, straddling both sides of diagram? Axl ¤ [Talk] 12:13, 12 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I haven't read the original source in which the image was first published (IIRC, it's a 1990 paper by Stevem Nissen), but I think the rationale for drawing the image that way was to emphasize the fact that, whenever biotin is deficient or in instances of MC-CoA carboxylase deficiency, MC-CoA metabolism is diverted away from its standard pathway and ultimately results (through unspecified mechanisms) in large urinary concentrations of HMB w/ no effect on urinary HMB-CoA concentrations; the increase in urinary HMB above the basal concentrations found in healthy adult urine appears to be about 10−100-fold and 1000-fold for biotin deficiency and MC-CoA carboxylase deficiency, respectively. The intermediate steps were probably also glossed over by the authors who drew it because the reactions involved in those circumstances aren't fully understood.[note 1] I've been thinking about creating a new biosynthesis diagram to address some of the issues with the current one. Besides the fact that it illustrates a single pathway between HMB and MC-CoA in two different parts of the diagram (i.e., HMB ← HMB-CoA ← MC-CoA and HMB → HMB-CoA ↔ MC-CoA; this should really just be illustrated as HMB ↔ HMB-CoA ↔ MC-CoA, with a note that the "←" direction dominates during biotin deficiency), some of the pathways that are covered in the metabolism section aren't reflected in that image. I don't have time to draw an entirely new diagram at the moment, but it's on my to-do list. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:45, 13 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- If you think it's worth covering what I've mentioned in the note[note 1] in the metabolism section, let me know. I didn't think HMB-carnitine to be a notable intermediate product in the metabolism of HMB because it's converted back into HMB-CoA, although it might also be directly converted to HMB. This wouldn't be the first time that I've omitted mention of an intermediate product in an FA or FA-nominated article though.[note 2] I haven't done a thorough literature search on the carnitine intermediate, so I only know of a single ref - this primary source[1] - that covers component of HMB's metabolic pathway. If you think it's worth adding to the article, I'll see if I can find a review that covers the metabolism of "3-hydroxyisovaleryl carnitine" to 3-hydroxyisovaleric acid (aka HMB).Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 22:04, 16 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I haven't read the original source in which the image was first published (IIRC, it's a 1990 paper by Stevem Nissen), but I think the rationale for drawing the image that way was to emphasize the fact that, whenever biotin is deficient or in instances of MC-CoA carboxylase deficiency, MC-CoA metabolism is diverted away from its standard pathway and ultimately results (through unspecified mechanisms) in large urinary concentrations of HMB w/ no effect on urinary HMB-CoA concentrations; the increase in urinary HMB above the basal concentrations found in healthy adult urine appears to be about 10−100-fold and 1000-fold for biotin deficiency and MC-CoA carboxylase deficiency, respectively. The intermediate steps were probably also glossed over by the authors who drew it because the reactions involved in those circumstances aren't fully understood.[note 1] I've been thinking about creating a new biosynthesis diagram to address some of the issues with the current one. Besides the fact that it illustrates a single pathway between HMB and MC-CoA in two different parts of the diagram (i.e., HMB ← HMB-CoA ← MC-CoA and HMB → HMB-CoA ↔ MC-CoA; this should really just be illustrated as HMB ↔ HMB-CoA ↔ MC-CoA, with a note that the "←" direction dominates during biotin deficiency), some of the pathways that are covered in the metabolism section aren't reflected in that image. I don't have time to draw an entirely new diagram at the moment, but it's on my to-do list. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:45, 13 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- In "Pharmacology", subsection "Biosynthesis", the diagram does not show that the conversion of MC-CoA and MG-CoA to HMB-CoA and HMG-CoA occur during biotin deficiency. Axl ¤ [Talk] 12:16, 12 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Also, the diagram does not show the conversion of HMB-CoA to HMB (during biotin deficiency) at all. Axl ¤ [Talk] 12:47, 12 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- As noted above, I'm probably going to draw an entirely new diagram to illustrate the more comprehensive info in the 3-Hydroxyisovaleric acid#Metabolism section and address the issues with the current one. I'm hoping to get around to this within the few weeks.Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:45, 13 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Also, the diagram does not show the conversion of HMB-CoA to HMB (during biotin deficiency) at all. Axl ¤ [Talk] 12:47, 12 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
"Pharmacology", subsection "Biosynthesis", paragraph 2 mentions β-methylcrotonoyl-CoA, while the diagram indicates β-methyl-crotonyl-CoA. Axl ¤ [Talk] 12:22, 12 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Added a hyphen to the text. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:45, 13 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Actually I was more concerned about the -oyl vs -yl suffix. Axl ¤ [Talk] 18:40, 13 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Oh. I didn't even notice that; I've removed the o. It's now "β-methylcrotonyl-CoA". Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:23, 14 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- lol, thanks. Axl ¤ [Talk] 10:26, 16 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Oh. I didn't even notice that; I've removed the o. It's now "β-methylcrotonyl-CoA". Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:23, 14 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Actually I was more concerned about the -oyl vs -yl suffix. Axl ¤ [Talk] 18:40, 13 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Added a hyphen to the text. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:45, 13 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
From "Pharmacology", subsection "Biosynthesis", paragraph 2: "During biotin deficiency, HMB can be synthesized from MC-CoA via enoyl-CoA hydratase and an unknown thioesterase enzyme, which convert MC-CoA into β-hydroxy β-methylbutyryl-CoA (HMB-CoA) and HMB-CoA into HMB respectively." Does the unknown thioesterase convert MC-CoA into HMB-CoA? (I think so, but the sentence needs to have the syntax & formatting adjusted.) Axl ¤ [Talk] 12:28, 12 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I don't believe that it does; the function of this "unknown thioesterase" enzyme is to cleave off the CoA group from a substrate molecule. If it were to accept MC-CoA as a substrate as well, it would probably cleave it into beta-methyl-crotonic acid and free CoA. Enoyl-CoA hydratase is responsible for HMB-CoA ↔ MC-CoA; the unknown thioesterase is responsible for HMB-CoA → HMB + free CoA. The statement is cited by the first and last sentences of this reference's quote.[1] For context, "3HIA" is HMB and "3-hydroxyisovaleryl CoA" is HMB-CoA. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:45, 13 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- In that case, the diagram seems to contradict the text. The diagram shows conversion of MC-CoA directly to HMB via enol-CoA hydrase [not hydratase]. There is no implication of a thioesterase at all. Axl ¤ [Talk] 10:35, 16 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Yep, I'm aware. This is the specific pathway that I was referring to above with the statements: "
I haven't read the original source in which the image was first published (IIRC, it's a 1990 paper by Stevem Nissen), but I think the rationale for drawing the image that way was to emphasize the fact that, whenever biotin is deficient or in instances of MC-CoA carboxylase deficiency, MC-CoA metabolism is diverted away from its standard pathway and ultimately results (through unspecified mechanisms) in large urinary concentrations of HMB w/ no effect on urinary HMB-CoA concentrations ... The intermediate steps were probably also glossed over by the authors who drew it because the reactions involved in those circumstances aren't fully understood
". I probably should have clarified that I was specifically referring to the somewhat misleading depiction of MC-CoA → HMB being catalyzed by enoyl-CoA hydratase alone, along with the second depiction of an HMB-CoA ↔ MC-CoA pathway, when I said this - my bad. In any event, "enol-CoA hydrase" is a less common synonym of "enoyl CoA hydratase"; if you want me to add a "y" to "enol" and a "ta" after the "hydra", I probably could make that change to the image without making it look odd. As for the thioesterase, if you'd like me to add that to the image then I'd probably delete the "enol-CoA hydrase" and use the closest font in MS Paint to the one used in the image to add "enoyl CoA hydratase + unknown thioesterase". Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 22:04, 16 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]- Thank you for the clarification. I don't mind whether "enoyl-CoA hydratase" or "enol-CoA hydrase" is used, but the text should be consistent with the diagram. If "enoyl-CoA hydratase" is more commonly used, then this is preferable. I don't think that two enzymes should be applied to a single step in the diagram. Rather, enoyl-CoA hydratase should lead to HMB-CoA, then the thioesterase should show conversion of HMB-CoA to HMB. [Sorry for the delayed response. I am currently on holiday.] Axl ¤ [Talk] 08:03, 20 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Ah, alright. I'll see what I can do about adjusting the graphic accordingly. I should be able to do this over the next day or two. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 03:13, 25 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Axl: before after - how's that look? I can't add new text to the image in paint; it ends up looking awful, but I managed to change enol CoA-hydrase to enoyl CoA-hydratase using the image text and add HMB-CoA as a product of enoyl CoA-hydratase using arrows and the same text in the iamge. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 17:45, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks. That's an improvement. Axl ¤ [Talk] 19:26, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Axl: before after - how's that look? I can't add new text to the image in paint; it ends up looking awful, but I managed to change enol CoA-hydrase to enoyl CoA-hydratase using the image text and add HMB-CoA as a product of enoyl CoA-hydratase using arrows and the same text in the iamge. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 17:45, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Ah, alright. I'll see what I can do about adjusting the graphic accordingly. I should be able to do this over the next day or two. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 03:13, 25 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Thank you for the clarification. I don't mind whether "enoyl-CoA hydratase" or "enol-CoA hydrase" is used, but the text should be consistent with the diagram. If "enoyl-CoA hydratase" is more commonly used, then this is preferable. I don't think that two enzymes should be applied to a single step in the diagram. Rather, enoyl-CoA hydratase should lead to HMB-CoA, then the thioesterase should show conversion of HMB-CoA to HMB. [Sorry for the delayed response. I am currently on holiday.] Axl ¤ [Talk] 08:03, 20 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Yep, I'm aware. This is the specific pathway that I was referring to above with the statements: "
- In that case, the diagram seems to contradict the text. The diagram shows conversion of MC-CoA directly to HMB via enol-CoA hydrase [not hydratase]. There is no implication of a thioesterase at all. Axl ¤ [Talk] 10:35, 16 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- I don't believe that it does; the function of this "unknown thioesterase" enzyme is to cleave off the CoA group from a substrate molecule. If it were to accept MC-CoA as a substrate as well, it would probably cleave it into beta-methyl-crotonic acid and free CoA. Enoyl-CoA hydratase is responsible for HMB-CoA ↔ MC-CoA; the unknown thioesterase is responsible for HMB-CoA → HMB + free CoA. The statement is cited by the first and last sentences of this reference's quote.[1] For context, "3HIA" is HMB and "3-hydroxyisovaleryl CoA" is HMB-CoA. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:45, 13 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
In "Chemistry", could any information about melting point, boiling point & density be added? Axl ¤ [Talk] 11:57, 13 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- MOS:PHARM notes that basic chem/phys properties should just be covered in the drugbox, but I don't mind adding the melting point and density if you think it's worth covering these. The BP isn't that notable since, at normal atmospheric pressure, it decomposes instead of boiling at high temperatures. Would you like me to add a sentence on the MP and density? Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:45, 13 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Ah, okay. No need to for any change. Axl ¤ [Talk] 10:38, 16 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- MOS:PHARM notes that basic chem/phys properties should just be covered in the drugbox, but I don't mind adding the melting point and density if you think it's worth covering these. The BP isn't that notable since, at normal atmospheric pressure, it decomposes instead of boiling at high temperatures. Would you like me to add a sentence on the MP and density? Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:45, 13 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
From "Chemistry", paragraph 1: "The pKa of HMB-FA is 4.4, which is higher than the pH of gastric acid." I suppose that the implication is that in the stomach, HMB-FA exists mainly as the free acid form rather than conjugate base form. Can this be mentioned in the article? If not, it might better to remove the reference to gastric pH. Axl ¤ [Talk] 12:02, 13 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]- Removed it. Seppi333 (Insert 2¢) 13:45, 13 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Okay. Axl ¤ [Talk] 10:39, 16 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- References
- ^ a b c d e f g Mock DM, Stratton SL, Horvath TD, Bogusiewicz A, Matthews NI, Henrich CL, Dawson AM, Spencer HJ, Owen SN, Boysen G, Moran JH (November 2011). "Urinary excretion of 3-hydroxyisovaleric acid and 3-hydroxyisovaleryl carnitine increases in response to a leucine challenge in marginally biotin-deficient humans". J. Nutr. 141 (11): 1925–1930. doi:10.3945/jn.111.146126. PMC 3192457. PMID 21918059.
Reduced activity of MCC impairs catalysis of an essential step in the mitochondrial catabolism of the BCAA leucine. Metabolic impairment diverts methylcrotonyl CoA to 3-hydroxyisovaleryl CoA in a reaction catalyzed by enoyl-CoA hydratase (22, 23). 3-Hydroxyisovaleryl CoA accumulation can inhibit cellular respiration either directly or via effects on the ratios of acyl CoA:free CoA if further metabolism and detoxification of 3-hydroxyisovaleryl CoA does not occur (22). The transfer to carnitine by 4 carnitine acyl-CoA transferases distributed in subcellular compartments likely serves as an important reservoir for acyl moieties (39–41). 3-Hydroxyisovaleryl CoA is likely detoxified by carnitine acetyltransferase producing 3HIA-carnitine, which is transported across the inner mitochondrial membrane (and hence effectively out of the mitochondria) via carnitine-acylcarnitine translocase (39). 3HIA-carnitine is thought to be either directly deacylated by a hydrolase to 3HIA or to undergo a second CoA exchange to again form 3-hydroxyisovaleryl CoA followed by release of 3HIA and free CoA by a thioesterase.
- Notes
- ^ a b MC-CoA appears to be converted to HMB-CoA only at the inner mitochondrial membrane, since this is where enoyl-CoA hydratase is localized in humans.[1] Subsequently, HMB-CoA is then converted to a carnitine intermediate ("3-hydroxyisovaleryl carnitine" aka "beta-hydroxy beta-methylbutyryl carnitine") for translocation across the inner mitochondrial membrane and into the mitochondrial intermembrane space;[1] Once across the membrane, HMB-carnitine is then converted either directly to HMB or first to HMB-CoA and then HMB.[1] These reactions would probably take place somewhere in the same cell outside of mitochondria, like in the cytosol or at the cell membrane, but could occur in the mitochondrial intermembrane space or at the outer mitochondrial membrane.
So, in a nutshell, the metabolism of MC-CoA to HMB occurs through one or both of the following 2 pathways:[1]
• MC-CoA → HMB-CoA → HMB-carnitine → HMB
• MC-CoA → HMB-CoA → HMB-carnitine → HMB-CoA → HMB
The 2nd pathway is more notable since all reviews on HMB's metabolism that I've read have discussed the HMB-CoA → HMB reaction.
HMB-carnitine → HMB would occur via an unknown hydrolase enzyme.[1]
HMB-carnitine → HMB-CoA might be catalyzed the same enzyme that mediated the HMB-carnitine → HMB-CoA reaction. - ^ Amphetamine is metabolized into a compound called "amphetamine hydroxylamine", a potentially toxic metabolite, in the process of being converted to phenylacetone, an inactive metabolite; however, the same enzyme that catalyzes the conversion from amphetamine to amphetamine hydroxylamine (FMO3) also catalyzes the conversion of amphetamine hydroxylamine to phenylacetone, where the hydroxylamine compound would remain bound to the enzyme during this multi-step process. This metabolite isn't covered in the amphetamine article or its metabolism graphic because it requires an overly long and technical explanation to explain why it's a biologically active and likely toxic metabolite which doesn't exert a detectable toxic effect on cells and is not detectable in body fluids following amphetamine metabolism (see the discussion at User talk:Boghog/Archive 7#Metabolites).
Similar to the metabolism of HMB involving HMB-carnitine, the metabolism of amphetamine to its hydroxylamine intermediates appears to only be covered by specialized primary sources on certain enzymes or the intermediate compounds. All medical reviews from 2010-2016 that cover amphetamine's detectable metabolites in blood plasma and urine lack mention of these intermediates.
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