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Questel - Intellectual Property Business

Questel is a company specialized in Intellectual Property (IP). It provides user-friendly online services for searching and watching worldwide patents, trademarks, and industrial designs. Innovative and expanding, Questel describes itself to “provide the most comprehensive and current databases worldwide”. In the past two years, Questel launched two major products in the IP industry: orbit.com (also known as QPAT) for patent practitioners and edital.com for trademark practitioners. All in one place, IP challenges are made easy to face: search, analyze, set up alerts, order documents, share results, and manage portfolios. References: 1.Research Information - Feb./March 2009 - http://www.questel.com/customersupport/userdoc/docpdf/Research_Info_FebMar2009_questel.pdf 2. La Dépeche du GFII - June 2007 - http://www.questel.fr/assistanceclient/docpdf/depeche_prixiexpo_2007.pdf 3. Intellogist: http://www.intellogist.com/wiki/Report:QPAT 4. PIUG list: http://wiki.piug.org/display/PIUG/Patent+Databases —Preceding unsigned comment added by Questel08 (talk • contribs) 16:51, 28 December 2009 (UTC)

Hi Questel08, it looks like your user name is derived from the company. It is a good idea to have a username that reflects you as a person instead. Otherwise we might be thinking that you are here to promote the company. After choosing a new user name You will have to rewrite your article to be less promotional. Terms such as "user-friendly" "innovative" "challenges are made easy to face" are promotional and attempt to make the topic look good. These are known as Peacock terms. Graeme Bartlett (talk) 05:02, 7 January 2010 (UTC)

Feedback regarding OfferMe

Hi All,

I recently posted an article in my userspace regarding the company I work for OfferMe - Check it out

After waiting two weeks for feedback from some recommended editors, I published it and the article was deleted within the hour as SPAM. I believe this had more to do with my employment rather than the content, but would be open to suggestions of edits to make to the content.

I should point out that I'm merely an employee of the company, owning no stock or part-ownership etc.

Further, I believe this site, OfferMe, is definitely Wiki-worthy. OfferMe, like Groupon, BuyWithMe and more, is part of a change in eRetail. OfferMe is relatively more popular than Groupon considering it only caters to the Australian market. They also hold a strong position within the Aussie-web community, which can be seen in the following places:

• Facebook
• Twitter
• WordPress

The interest with these fans, followers and supporters has been generated in the past four months, since the launch of Group Buy. There are also links in the article to press that's appeared regarding OfferMe.

Anyways, as I said before, I'm open to all constructive criticism. So if you have some, please fire it over.

Cheers --Nadimcsharbean (talk) 03:55, 7 January 2010 (UTC)

• One way is to hope that some independent person can write it. Make a request at Wikipedia:Requested articles/Business and Economics/Businesses and Organizations. Graeme Bartlett (talk) 04:44, 7 January 2010 (UTC)
• Another way is to only write about the material that can be sourced from the references that you provided. This will make the content less coherent and more about how it is new and different. It would not be a list of features of the system. I believe there are enough to demonstrate notability. Facebook and twitter do not prove notability. User:Nadimcsharbean/OfferMe. Being an employee, you will be in a difficult position to say anything negative about it. This is COI. Graeme Bartlett (talk) 04:53, 7 January 2010 (UTC)

Feedback for Draft Article

I have created a draft article in my account as a 'work in progress'. Please review my most recent draft edited. I would like to know whether my article meets the criteria of notability and neutrality, before I submit it for creation. Thankyou. 24.150.166.112 (talk) 19:46, 30 December 2009 (UTC)

I cannot tell where you put it, as you have no other recent contributions, you must have edited from another IP number. Where is the draft? Graeme Bartlett (talk) 04:40, 7 January 2010 (UTC)

Thankyou for your response. Here is the link to the draft http://wiki.riteme.site/wiki/Wikipedia_talk:Articles_for_creation/Stephen_Gaetz

24.150.166.112 (talk) 16:07, 7 January 2010 (UTC)

Feedback requested for references, COI

I'm hoping to create a page for the program I work for. This raises a conflict of interest flag to Wikipedia, but I think the article is a valuable contribution to the encyclopedia for two reasons:

1) this is a U.S. Army public outreach program that honors civilians -- more than 2.2 million as of this writing; and

2) The program generates a very significant amount of press coverage -- in the past year the program has held events that have been covered multiple times by CNN, Forbes Magazine, The Washington Post, Dallas Morning News, Boston Globe, CBS Morning Show, and many local network affiliate stations.

Because of my potential conflict of interest, I have kept the information to a minimum and cited heavily. Thanks in advance for your feedback. Maxmingus (talk) 16:34, 7 January 2010 (UTC)

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U.S. Army Freedom Team Salute FTS) is an official U.S. Army Commendation Program sponsored by the Secretary of the Army and Army Chief of Staff.

The Program recognizes:
• The Parents and Spouses of Active Duty Soldiers
• The Parents, Spouses, and Employers of Army National Guard and Reserve Soldiers
• Honorably Discharged Army Veterans
• All Army Supporters who have contributed to the U.S. Army mission and its Soldiers

All those recipients of the Freedom Team Salute Commendation receive a personalized letter and certificate of appreciation signed by both the the Secretary of the Army and Army Chief of Staff, and an official U.S Army lapel pin.

As of June 2009, the program had issued more than 2 million Commendations.

Contact information
U.S. Army Freedom Team Salute
2461 Eisenhower Ave, Ste. 1406
Alexandria, VA 22331
Info@FreedomTeamSalute.com

Expert editors opinion / HPSCHD

Hello, I just created my first article on my user page, and i'd like to get in touch with editors to see if they think it's ready for the real wiki. The article is about HPSCHD, a piece by John Cage and Lejaren Hiller that for some reason did not have a page on wikipedia, even though it is considered one of the cornerstones of early computer music. Please see http://wiki.riteme.site/wiki/User:Wikiwikiputt/HPSCHD Any feedback will be greatly appreciated! —Preceding unsigned comment added by Wikiwikiputt (talk • contribs) 00:34, 11 January 2010 (UTC)

one issue is copying sentences verbatum from your sources. You should rewrite in your own words. But this article looks good. You could have more secondary references, such as reviews from newspapers. Graeme Bartlett (talk) 10:34, 11 January 2010 (UTC)

Please review and let me know what you think - GIBCO

I had posted this as an article and it was deleted with a few comments so perhaps this would be a better avenue. I think perhaps this content would work very well as a company stub (http://wiki.riteme.site/wiki/Category:Company_stubs) for http://wiki.riteme.site/wiki/Category:Companies_established_in_1962 or perhaps here http://wiki.riteme.site/wiki/Category:United_States_manufacturing_company_stubs

Please let me know what I can do to improve and possibly get this listed on wikipedia....thanks!

Cell Culture Bottle

GIBCO® (originally standing for Grand Island Biological Company) is a manufacturer of media, sera and reagents for industrial and academic cell culture. The company was originally started in 1962 by Bob and Earline Ferguson as a tissue culture media company in the garage of their home in Grand Island, NY. In the early days, the Ferguson's started their business by selling serum harvested from horses raised on their land.

In 1983, GIBCO® merged with Bethesda Research Laboratories (BRL) to form the original Life Technologies, Inc. producing all media and reagents under the brand GIBCO BRL®. In the year 2000, Life Technologies was acquired by the Invitrogen™ Corp. which began selling cell culture media, sera and reagents again under the GIBCO® Brand. Today, GIBCO® is again part of the newly formed Life Technologies (2008) but it's manufacturing is still based in Grand Island, NY.

Life Technologies currently has cell culture manufacturing facilities making GIBCO® products in Grand Island, NY, USA; Paisley, Scotland, UK; and Auckland, New Zealand and are ISO-9001 certified and compliant with guidelines established by the FDA's Quality Systems.

Throughout the years, GIBCO® has focused on product development and holds patents on technologies such as the production of dry powder media in the early 1960's, the development of chemically defined media in the 1990's and the launch of a redesigned media bottle in 2008 recieving an AmeriStar award for packaging innovation. Since the year 1991, Google Scholar shows over 200,000 references to the use of GIBCO® products in published papers and patents.

External Links

• GIBCO®
• GIBCO acronym definition
• Company history

• Hello, the use of the TM and R symbols does not meet the Manual of Style, and suggests that you may be working for that company, as others are unlikely to write in this way. The notability guideline is WP:CORP which describes the kind of company articles that should be in Wikipedia. You must be careful to not make the article appear like an advertisement or promotion. The article should therefore cover less about the products that they wish to sell and more about the company. Graeme Bartlett (talk) 21:56, 13 January 2010 (UTC)

Article for published author

I've finished writing an article about published author Connie Ann Kirk, posted at http://wiki.riteme.site/wiki/User:BKred/Connie_Ann_Kirk. I believe she fulfills WP:Notability for authors inasmuch as she has had "multiple independent periodical articles or reviews" (Booklist, School Library Journal, Writers' Journal, to name a few). I would love some feedback. BKred (talk) 05:55, 23 December 2009 (UTC)

Are the articles about her as a person? Graeme Bartlett (talk) 12:37, 1 January 2010 (UTC)

*Librarything.com confirms her books: http://www.librarything.com/author/kirkconnieann&norefer=1 but do you have biographical material, too? A list of books is not enough. --DThomsen8 (talk) 02:53, 17 January 2010 (UTC)

External links

• [1]- Official FTS web site
• [2] - Facebook site
• [3] - Official U.S. Army web site
• [4]) - Secretary of the Army
• [5] - Army Chief of Staff

• [6] - Department of the Army's Freedom Team Salute
• [7] - DeRidder officials commended for supporting Army and its mission
• [8] - Thank You Cards from Across America Sent to Troops for Thanksgiving Holiday
• [9] - Thanksgiving spirit sweeps across Army
• [10] - Columbus Blue Jackets Celebrate Veterans Day with Military Appreciation Night on November 11
• [11] - Students, WWII veterans find common ground
• [12] - Veterans Day: School program honors veterans at North Butler
• [13] - Ind. veteran receives milestone award
• [14] - Brigadier General Rebecca Halstead Helps Parker College Honor Our Nation’s Heroes
• [15] - Freedom Team Salute offers holiday recognition
• [16] - John Campbell teacher receives high praise from the U.S. Army
• [17] - Army Veteran Honored

• If you leave out the contact info this looks like quite a reasonable article. Hopefully the external links could be used to expand the proposed article. Usually we would not like facebook as a source. Graeme Bartlett (talk) 20:11, 7 January 2010 (UTC)
• This is a good start for an article, and it is likely that other editors can improve and add to it, especially if the article has the right categories and the article talk page has templates. The numerous links will provide material to others. The capitalization of some nouns in the article may not be appropriate for a Wikipedia article.--DThomsen8 (talk) 03:04, 17 January 2010 (UTC)

References

Comment: Thankyou for bringing your proposal to the Drawing Board. I would suggest that this is merged with steam mop. The product itself does not appear very notable. To be notable it should appear in more than one reliable and independent publication. You also forgot to say that you can purchase similar products for 25% of the TV price. It seems that the purpose here is to disparage the topic, and this is one reason to delete it. Graeme Bartlett (talk) 21:15, 14 January 2010 (UTC)

Drown disambiguation

Having stumbled upon Thomas Messinger Drown, and then discovering that Drown redirects to Drowning, I thought that what is needed is a disambiguation page for Drown as a surname. Here is the information I have so far:

• Frank Drown (born ca. 1920) is an American author and former missionary to Equador
• Julia Kate Drown (born 23 August 1962) was the Labour member of Parliament for Swindon South from 1997 until 2005
• Thomas Messinger Drown, (1842-1904) was the fourth President of Lehigh University in Bethlehem, Pennsylvania

This is a reasonable start, but can I create Drown (surname) and ignore songs and other material with the word Drown in it? If so, what do I do with the redirect? What do other editors advise?--DThomsen8 (talk) 02:28, 17 January 2010 (UTC)

No comments? I am going ahead with a Drown (surname) article. --DThomsen8 (talk) 18:13, 18 January 2010 (UTC)

Sounds fair enough to me! You can put a WP:hat note on top to refer to Drowning. Should say Drown redirects here, For the cause of death see Drowning. Or something like that. Graeme Bartlett (talk) 21:32, 18 January 2010 (UTC)

It turns out there is a nomination to delete Drown (disambiguation), but there is support for keeping it and added material, and Drown (surname) is just fine. Take a look. --DThomsen8 (talk) 01:37, 19 January 2010 (UTC)