User talk:Zhifanfu/He Jiankui

Reagle review

@Zhifanfu, this needs additional work before I can review it for moving content to the mainspace. The first issue is you need to properly cite your sources using Wikipedia's tools. Second, the voice needs to be encyclopedic. Any type of judgement sentence needs to have a source and citation. I've marked a few such sentences with a "by whom" template, but the whole piece needs to be revised accordingly. See this slide and its sucessor. -Reagle (talk) 15:09, 21 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Zhifanfu, I've done a major revision of the prose, but the tone still needs work. If you are the one applying this ethical framework to Jiankui, that is original research. What scholars have written about this? If they are in the citations, then you need to mention them in the prose as well: "Dr. Smith analyzed Jiankui's violation relative to the 4 principles of...." -Reagle (talk) 18:15, 1 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Zhifanfu, I tweaked a mentioning of researchers to show how it can be done. Also, once you move to mainspace, you'll want to link to various Wikipedia articles, and add a few more sources (e.g., Beauchamp, which is cited on the Medical Ethics page). Reagle (talk) 13:55, 2 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]