User talk:Zhalu
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[edit]Hello, Zhalu, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:45, 21 January 2020 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review. General info
• Whose work are you reviewing?
Zhalu
• Link to draft you're reviewing:
User:Zhalu/sandbox
Lead
Guiding questions:
• Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
It is a completely new article so yes.
• Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
Yes, it says who they are and when they were founded.
• Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
Yes, it has the members' names, little bit of history and includes some of the discography.
• Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? Yest, but it will be added later.
• Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
It is mainly concise, but has a few details that are not needed for the lead. Lead evaluation
Content
Guiding questions:
• Is the content added relevant to the topic?
Yes
• Is the content added up-to-date?
No as the history section hasn't been added yet.
• Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
There is content missing due to the article not being finished.
Content evaluation
Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:
• Is the content added neutral?
Majority.
• Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
Saying that S-Kiddi is an excellent producer seems a bit biased.
• Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
Not sure.
• Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
A little bit for a person to have a positive view.
Tone and balance evaluation
Sources and References
Guiding questions:
Sources have not been added yet.
• Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
• Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
• Are the sources current?
• Check a few links. Do they work?
Sources and references evaluation
Organization
Guiding questions:
• Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
Everything written is very easy to understand.
• Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
Most of it seems correct, but instead of saying They are the member of C.D.C(Chengdu Rap House). I would put They are members of C.D.C (Chengdu Rap House).
• Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
Yes. There is history, members and discography.
Organization evaluation
Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media
No images nor media has been added.
• Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
• Are images well-captioned?
• Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
• Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?
Images and media evaluation
For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.
• Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
No, sources have not been added yet.
• How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
Sources not added yet.
• Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
Yes. It has the content box and the headings.
• Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?
No links have been made.
New Article Evaluation
Overall impressions
Guiding questions:
• Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
New article so it has a good start.
• What are the strengths of the content added?
What is written is easily understood.
• How can the content added be improved?
Just adding more to it so it is more comprehensive.
Overall evaluation
ErrbodysHope (talk) 00:24, 8 March 2020 (UTC)
Speedy deletion nomination of A1 Top Masta(A.T.M.)
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A tag has been placed on A1 Top Masta(A.T.M.), requesting that it be speedily deleted from Wikipedia. This has been done under section G11 of the criteria for speedy deletion, because the page seems to be unambiguous advertising which only promotes a company, group, product, service, person, or point of view and would need to be fundamentally rewritten in order to become encyclopedic. Please read the guidelines on spam and Wikipedia:FAQ/Organizations for more information.
If you think this page should not be deleted for this reason, you may contest the nomination by visiting the page and clicking the button labelled "Contest this speedy deletion". This will give you the opportunity to explain why you believe the page should not be deleted. However, be aware that once a page is tagged for speedy deletion, it may be deleted without delay. Please do not remove the speedy deletion tag from the page yourself, but do not hesitate to add information in line with Wikipedia's policies and guidelines. If the page is deleted, and you wish to retrieve the deleted material for future reference or improvement, then please contact the deleting administrator. Tatupiplu'talk 19:14, 4 April 2020 (UTC)
Notes
[edit]Hi, I saw that your first version of A1 Top Masta was deleted. You recreated it at A1 Top Masta, where it has been tagged with several issues.
- This is written in a non-neutral tone. We cannot say on our own that something is excellent, creative, or so on. The article must be neutral, otherwise it runs the risk of coming across as promotional or even biased for or against the topic. So for example, rather than saying that the group is good at combining things, just say that they combine things.
- Avoid statements such as "everyone does..." and "everyone has...", as these statements are almost always unlikely to be true. For example, you have the statement "Every student has this song in the MP3, which can be said to be the youth of many people." This statement is very unlikely to be true, as it's very unlikely that absolutely every student in Chengdu has this downloaded. For example, not everyone likes the same stuff, so it stands to reason that people who don't like hip-hop wouldn't download it.
- The issue with statements of this nature is that while they may be intended to make something or someone seem more notable, it actually has the opposite effect and instead makes the topic seem like we're trying to promote or "sell" it to the reader, to convince them that they should like what's being discussed.
- When stating that someone is the only person to do something, make sure that you have a very good source that backs this up. For example, the article claimed that one of the members was the only rapper to also be a director, something that is almost certainly not the case. On a global scale the chances of someone being both a rapper and director are very high and would also be if looking solely at China.
- This needs sourcing that is independent of the group itself, in order to establish notability. It's especially important when it comes to claims of major claims, as we need to be able to back them up. Keep in mind that bands/groups aren't automatically notable and popularity in and of itself doesn't make something notable (but does make it likely that there will be sourcing), so the sourcing is absolutely necessary to establish notability.
- The history section has info about the members' individual exploits, but not really anything about what they've done together. Some background is fine, but the article should predominantly be about the band.
I hope that this all helps! I've done some cleanup to remove the promotional content, but I'm concerned that it could still be deleted because of the lack of independent coverage in reliable sources. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 13:24, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
Nomination of A1 Top Masta for deletion
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A discussion is taking place as to whether the article A1 Top Masta is suitable for inclusion in Wikipedia according to Wikipedia's policies and guidelines or whether it should be deleted.
The article will be discussed at Wikipedia:Articles for deletion/A1 Top Masta until a consensus is reached, and anyone, including you, is welcome to contribute to the discussion. The nomination will explain the policies and guidelines which are of concern. The discussion focuses on high-quality evidence and our policies and guidelines.
Users may edit the article during the discussion, including to improve the article to address concerns raised in the discussion. However, do not remove the article-for-deletion notice from the top of the article. ... discospinster talk 13:50, 10 April 2020 (UTC)