User talk:Zac.allard/sandbox
Josh's peer review for Zac:
This is a great article! Totally liking what you have here so far. Below you’ll find my small, nitpicky criticisms.
I really like your first section ("Postmodernist Film"). Your explanation of postmodernist film is great--totally clear, easy to understand. You might find a way to incorporate a citation or two, though, just to substantiate things. Also, your last sentence in that section is a little confusing at the end ("...to create a work in which a something different than traditional narrative expression.")
In your second section (“Overview of Postmodernism”), some of your statements, while helpful and totally relevant, might benefit from a little clarification. For instance, you might elaborate on what you mean by, “Modernism was interested in master and meta narratives of history” and “Myths of progress toward something better and inevitable were important to Modernism.”
The parenthetical asides seem a little out of place in the Wikipedia context. Though it’s not a huge deal, it does affect the tone.
I’m totally fascinated, but a little confused, by something in your “Postmodernist Film” section. First you say that auteur theory is connected to modernist cinema, but then you go on to list a bunch of postermodernist filmmakers whose names one generally associates with auteur-style filmmaking (Tarantino, Lynch, Wes Anderson, etc.). Maybe you could add a sentence or two to explain this seeming contradiction.
A couple sentences in this section are a little confusing: “The idea that the meaning can (and mostly will) be found in the spaces and transitions and collisions between words and moments and images.” and “The basic thrust of this argument the spaces between the words or the cuts in a film create just as much meaning as the words or shots themselves.” You might consider clarifying or re-wording them.
You might consider using blockquote and /blockquote tags for some of your longer quotes.
All your examples of postmodern filmmakers are pretty current. Are there any older postmodern directors that you might include to round out your list? Maybe some of the new wavers?
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