User talk:Vrodrig9497/sandbox/TheLostDeacde
Talk on the Aftermath Everything looks good except for a few possible minor grammar mistakes. In the sentence:"There was certain cities in Mexico that saw an increase in foreign investments, specifically the United States, which brought an influx of people which brought the increase of GDP," I think it should say: There "were" certain cities instead of "was". Also, maybe it could be worded a little differently. It was a little confusing to process. Here's an idea, but you don't have to use it if you don't want to: "There were certain cities in Mexico that saw an increase in foreign investments, specifically in the United States, which brought an influx of people (and thus/ resulting in) the increase/growth of GDP. Other than that everything looks good. Nice use of hyperlinks. Sources are cited! good work. If you remember when you look at my entry, could you help me determine if one of my sources is credible enough to pull information from? It's the citation following this excerpt: "debt payments rose from roughly $6.3 billion U.S. dollars in 1971 to $28 billion in 1976." Thank you.
MTom44 (talk) 23:19, 16 April 2017 (UTC)
Talk on the History
I fixed one of your sources because it had a spelling mistake, but other than that your section looks great. I looked into the source and it seems to be a credible source to pull information from.
Vrodrig9497 (talk) 12:07, 17 April 2017 (UTC)
Talk on the Effects on Mexico versus Chile
Your section looks great. The only thing that is missing is an external link to another wiki page. Maybe put a link to Chile's economy wiki page?
Vrodrig9497 (talk) 18:53, 20 April 2017 (UTC)
Talk on the Society and Education
This section is very well written and though out the only thing I might change is possibly adding a citation after "kids of primary and secondary school age were forced to return to school instead of earn money for their families." However this is fine if it is the same citation as the next sentence.
H.maddox (talk) 04:44, 21 April 2017 (UTC)
Talk on History
Great job using lots of sources. It was very well written. I could not find any grammar mistakes or corrections to suggest. Madeleinelancaster (talk) 15:16, 21 April 2017 (UTC)
Talk on Effects on Mexico versus Chile
Content of this section was very good. The only suggestion I have is to make the first three sentences of the first paragraph a little smoother. When reading it sounds just a little choppy. But otherwise very good.