User talk:Verdagj/sandbox

Although Ian has not gotten to reviewing your page yet, you should be eliminating all of the bullet points and putting most of it in prose. Each section should not just be bullet points. Your references also are not done correctly and most of them have not been inserted as proper footnotes. Keep working on it and do not wait for your review from Ian. The more you get done, the less he will have to say about it. MMBiology (talk) 03:30, 3 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback

@Verdagj and DKS7623: Nice work on your article draft, but it still needs a lot of work. It isn't yet at the stage where I can offer much feedback. For starters, you should make the changes that Dr Mynlieff mentioned in her feedback - you need to convert your bullet points into paragraphs. You need to convert the references that aren't actual footnotes into real references. You need to improve your references - right now, they're incomplete. Use the Cite tool in the Visual Editor to create complete, properly-formatted references. Once you've done the basics of fleshing out your article, let me know and I can offer some more feedback. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 03:52, 7 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @Ian (Wiki Ed):. We updated our Sandbox as much as we could, and had to post it on the mainspace for our assignment. I posted on the article Talk Page about our intentions for the article and what we are currently working on. At the moment, we are trying to meet with our professor so we can figure out how to go about fixing the references. Please let us know what we can fix in the meantime. I understand there are still bullet points in the "Function" section, we're waiting on one of our members assigned to that section to finish it. Verdagj (talk) 05:11, 10 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @Verdagj:. The most obvious problem that you haven't yet addressed is the issue of references. All of the full-sized numbers in square brackets are not actual references. They're just numbers. You need to convert these to actual references. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:37, 11 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]