User talk:Ttbioclass/Halibut

Article review

Hello Ttbioclass,

I enjoyed reading your first article draft. I liked how you talked about the different sex determining genes between Atlantic Halibut and Pacific Halibut. However, there are a couple of things I would recommend you add to that section. You may want to add a sentence or two describing the difference between XX/XY and ZZ/ZW, or maybe link them to another wiki article that talks about them. You may also want to add a picture to show how Atlantic/Pacific Halibut look (unless they look exactly the same). Your section about fisheries was informative. I would suggest you mention what environmental factors (water temperature? Food abundance?) are causing the difference between the Greenland halibut subpopulations. There is a small grammatical error you may want to fix in the second sentence of the last paragraph. You should change “is” to “are” in the sentence “there is small differences between subpopulation…”. Overall, it was nice first draft. Nica88 (talk) 23:20, 27 October 2022 (UTC)

Hello, I added information about the differences between XX/XY and ZZ/ZW, and I also added links to the Wikipedia articles on them. I added pictures of the Atlantic, Pacific, and Greenland Halibut. I also added what the environmental factors are that cause the difference in subpopulations. I also fixed the grammatical error. Thank you. Ttbioclass (talk) 18:06, 29 October 2022 (UTC)

Kenneth's Review (Second Review) This is an amazing article. However, I believe the article would be awesome if more information would be included. For instance, the outline of the article was rich with contents, but many of these contents or segments or headings were missing in the main draft. This makes the article a bit disorganized. You might have to make the article to flow by ensuring that headings there appeared in your outline were addressed in the main article, or you can delete them from the outline if you have decided not to address them in the article. For instance, in the outline, you had the following: 1.1 Species 1.2 Genetics 1.3 Physical Characteristics 1.4 Diet But they were missing in the main draft.

Furthermore, in the segment on sex determining, it would be great to begin the paragraph with one sentence describing what a Halibut fish is (but if you are working on an existing article, this can be ignored). In addition, you can split some of the sentences into two, hence, making it easier for the reader to understand the message being passed.

On the Fragmentation of population segment, the first sentence needs some punctuation marks (and despite its large {,} range the populations remain largely homologous due to a lack of barriers for gene flow between its four major populations{.} There are small differences.

Still on the fragmentation of population segment, it would be great to arrange Halibut fragmentation in form of location, genetics, and include possible causes of these. Also, including more pictures in this segment would be great.

Overall, I like this article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ogwu94 (talk • contribs) 20:51, 3 November 2022 (UTC)

Hello, those parts of the outline were from the original article I am adding to. I had them on the page, but the professor removed them. I added in the punctuation marks you suggested, and I added some pictures to the segment on fragmentation of population. Ttbioclass (talk) 07:20, 26 November 2022 (UTC)

Nia's Review

I really liked how much detail that you put into both of the included sections! Although I did notice that your outline includes several other sections which are not included in your draft here, so I would add to those. I feel like adding some other topics and information to the other sections would really make the article even more interesting and complete. As far as organization goes I would be sure to incorporate a section somewhere in the beginning introducing the readers to halibut by giving them some basic/general information about the species first, before going into detail and moving on to the other sections though. Also I liked how you added a lot of detail and have big paragraphs packed with tons of information, however I would just make the titles over each section a bit larger, or bolder, or use bullet points(etc.). Just to show more distinction between each of the sections. As well as to break up the information within each section into smaller pieces. The reason I say this is because the way it looks/reads right now is kind of more like an essay where each section looks long, drawn out and connected in a way, and not broken up(I feel like this will just make it easier for the reader to go through it with their eyes while reading without losing their place). Those are all of the suggestions I had that I think might help. Overall I think you did an awesome job! Curlygirl897 (talk) 17:55, 5 November 2022 (UTC)

Hello, the sections in the outline were parts of the original article that I originally had but the professor took out. I made any titles I could larger. Thank you. Ttbioclass (talk) 07:42, 26 November 2022 (UTC)