User talk:TenaLesly/sandbox

Peer Review

To begin, I would say go back and look through for grammar issues, I noticed misplaced commas, spacing and misspelling mainly.

I also dont really understand the sentence: "With that said, racist joking augurs jokers to be "taboo" whil under the surface this signals real views they may possess" Perhaps it is from grammatical issues but I would suggest stating the facts and cutting out the necessaries like "with that said"/ "under the surface" as Wikipedia boasts being a neutral/factual source.

The last 2 sentences of the first paragraph are very good in summing up the issue with Racist Humor! Very clear and you have a solid source.

For the second paragraph, I think it might solely be based on your personal conclusions and opinions, because there is no source or support for statements like: "The inaction and silence to such racist jokes are supposed to be seen as a reflection of a color blind society. However, the frequency of such behavior as well as denying that such humor is racist helps to make racism a more embedded feature of society".

"They market their material as being equally offensive to each racial group so that they can’t be seen as racist towards specific racial groups." - this is a really good and interesting point! Perhaps consider expanding on this topic.

Overall, you make a lot of interesting and very strong claims, and while they may be accurate, I would consider finding multiple solid sources to back them up. (hard core Wikipedia people will definitely not accept them if there aren't multiple reliable sources) - also theres an issue where your first source isn't visible. I think you discuss the subject very well and would mainly suggest sticking to the facts of what research has found to make your addition strong!

Gi4444 (talk) 23:56, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review

Hi Tena!

I found your article contribution to be a very high-quality and substantial addition to the original Wikipedia article. I am surprised that there is not more coverage of racist humor on Wikipedia, so the content you added is very valuable. You have a solid article structure in giving a brief introduction and defining your terms, giving sources and examples, and a concise conclusion.

A simple way you could strengthen your addition is to correct a few small grammar/spelling mistakes, for example, forgetting the "e" in the word "while." Your content is great and it will be even more powerful when those little errors aren't there to distract from you primary contributions.

I checked out your source "Racism without Hatred? Racist Humor and the Myth of 'Colorblindness'" and it seems to be an excellent resource to include in your article. The other source, "The White Racial Frame: Centuries Of Racial Framing and Counter-framing." wouldn't open from within the article but is definitely worth including, I found it very interesting. It also would be helpful to include a mention of it directly in the text when you define "white racial framing," like adapting your phrase "However the prevalence of racist humor is seen at every level of society and thought to be a part of sustaining "white racial framing[2]" which refers to promoting white superiority over other races." to include "as described by Joe Feagan in 'The White Racial Frame: Centuries Of Racial Framing and Counter-framing.'"

You did a good job giving examples without completely sacrificing objectivity by mentioning Rosanne Barr and Paula Deen. It might be helpful to expand on what the context around their racist humor was. However, it might be difficult to do this while retaining neutrality.

Your contribution does an excellent job in maintaining an objective stance overall. Your second paragraph, while strong and well-written, might have a little too much personal opinion on the matter. Overall, your addition to the article is useful and well done and I acknowledge and congratulate your hard work. Abbycanningwiki (talk) 00:37, 22 October 2018 (UTC) Abby Canning