User talk:Tdamm1992/Kidney Cancer/Luoy15 Peer Review
Hi Tiffany,
Great job on the article. I feel that your expansion of the article was neutral and supported very well by neutral references. Most of the article was very understandable for a non-medical person. I have the following suggestions for you.
Not for your edits but for the article, the Causes section may need more references.
Medical imaging
You may want to reword the sentences with the differential:e.g. “There are large number of different causes for flank/abdominal mass that includes kidney tumor. Therefore, the first step is visualization of the mass via medical imaging.” You may want to use for expanded term for “IV Contrast” as it may sound confusing to layman. You might also want to add what stage of CKD is 45 GFR.
Biopsy
Sorry if this is nitpicky, you may want to expand on saying “cancer metastasized to the kidney is managed systemically”, to clarify just add “will require systemic chemotherapy”. I like your explanation of the PPV. It's really good.
Otherwise, your expansion for the article fills all of the objectives you set previously.
Great job!
Yi
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