User talk:Swolfr/sandbox
Peer Review #1
[edit]Introductory sentence – Good Summary – Good Context - Good Organization - Good Content – Good Balance – N/A (not enough body text) Tone – Good Citations - Excellent Sources - Excellent Completeness – Excellent New sections - Good Re-organization - Good Gaps - Good Smaller additions – N/A (no original article) Coverage – N/A (not enough body text) Article body – N/A (not enough body text)
The overview section could become the lead paragraph that goes before the table of contents without a heading. The first paragraph has a good introductory sentence, but it could be strengthened by adding in more information about what its implications are. Bacteria names should be written in italics with the genus name capitalized and the species lowercase (Genus species). When only the genus is mentioned, it should still be capitalized and in italics. In order to have a better summary, each section could be mentioned once. Putting more of the information from the rest of the article into the lead paragraph would also improve context. The first paragraph could discuss the importance of this disease so that the notability of the article is not disputed. The history section could be included in the lead paragraph, unless there is enough information to warrant a separate section. If it remains its own section, it should be the first body paragraph instead of the last because it’s still considered background information. The sections obviously need more information, but I think the sections will offer a good description of the disease. The writer could look at other articles for diseases and see what kinds of sections they have. Host range, pathology, and epidemiology could be moved to the beginning and then the discussion of the human implications could be discussed after. The citations look like they’re formatted correctly and are from scholarly sources. Smneu (talk) 00:42, 5 April 2019 (UTC)