User talk:Summerhill Loon
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- Happy editing! Jojhutton (talk) 01:28, 26 July 2010 (UTC)
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Hi, the above article has been submitted for the "Did you know" section of the Main Page, but there are some problems with the article which you recent edits may have introduced. Please see Template talk:Did you know#Aberdeen Student Show. Thanks, Dabomb87 (talk) 14:50, 3 August 2010 (UTC)
- Hi, I see that the article has now been moved to the prep queue, so other editors may not have shared my opinion. Anyway, I think that the article contains too much trivial detail. To be honest, I think your past involvement with the show may have influenced your edits to the article; that is, you've attached more importance to certain aspects of the show than I would expect to read about in an encyclopedia article. For example, I find the origins of the "Student Show titles" too "crufty" to mention in an article, and much of it comes across as unverified original research (though it's probably true). Also, why do are there so many paragraphs about notable people who have participated in or directed the show? How does that aid understanding of the topic at all? Most of the material in the notable directors section isn't even about the students' roles in the show but about their other activities. This is just one person's opinion, so feel free to ignore it. However, if you do want my advice on how to improve the article, I would suggest trimming it significantly so it looks more like it does in this version. Cheers, Dabomb87 (talk) 13:20, 4 August 2010 (UTC)
- Cheers. I apologize if I came across as brusque in my previous comment. I should mention that some of your edits were very good and improved the article quite a bit, such as the inclusion of the table. Dabomb87 (talk) 14:06, 4 August 2010 (UTC)
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