User talk:Suhib almasmoom/Devana Chasma Rift Zone

Suggestions on improvement

1. In the second part:RIFT DEVELOPMENT. I think you could talk more about why it is still active. What makes it so active. You mentioned it is formed by mantle plume. I will be curious why these mantle plume so active, what is the dynamo.

2.The last part: COMPARISON BETWEEN VENUS AND EARTH RIFT SYSTEM. Does Earth have those still active zones? If yes, what is the comparison between that on Venus.

3.If you want to involve the part: General history of the region in the final page, move it to the first part.

Kzhan15 (talk) 02:07, 6 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Suhib,

Nice page overall, I think you've got a great start going!

1. Your image still needs a lot of work, I think you probably know this, but it should be done using some computer software to give it a professional look.

2. I would expand general history. This is an interesting section, a few lines on each event could be fun.

3. A few typos. I would do another grammatical check of the page.

cheers,

Adam

Aturn4000 (talk) — Preceding undated comment added 15:44, 6 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hey Suhib! First off I really like your topic and you did a great job on your draft. A few things that I think need to be improved on are citing your pictures, expand on the rift development section, and work on your original image. Let me expand on those suggestions: As far as the citations go, I think you did a good job! I would make sure that you have a citation for each of your images and also some of your sentences that aren't common knowledge. I know those can be easy to miss. I would expand the topic on the rift development by adding more details and providing more "links" back to other wiki pages. The last suggestion is the original image. I'm impressed that you drew it yourself and I like the procession of each step. I would recommend making it look a little more professional by trying to use adobe illustrator or even microsoft word/power point to try to draw it out. I know this is a rough draft, but also double check punctuation, capitalization, and sentence structure--I would be happy to help proofread it for you after you have made your final edits. Just let me know if you need help and great job! Eblamble (talk) 13:58, 6 March 2014 (UTC)Erica Allen — Preceding unsigned comment added by Eblamble (talk • contribs) 00:09, 6 March 2014 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Eblamble (talk • contribs)

Graeme Bartlett's review

It's a bit unusual to call Magellan an aircraft! In the see also section you do not need to link things linked in the text. You should have drawn your diagram on blank paper. The diagram suggests to me that the rifts should be tangential, but being noth-south sounds like the rifts are radial. Graeme Bartlett (talk) 10:10, 15 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]