User talk:Stibbals
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[edit]Hello, Stibbals, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Adam and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 03:23, 31 January 2017 (UTC)
Peer Review of Article:
I think you have done a good job with the work you have done so far. The "Origins" section of the article was a much needed addition. I also liked your use of the Whren v. United States court case as it gives readers a concrete example of the phrase's prevalence within today's society. Furthermore, you did a great job of incorporating the material you gathered from your sources and putting it in your own words. In order to improve the article, I think you could add to the "criticisms of the concept" section; right now, the article seems a little one-sided as it offers extensive examples regarding the phrase but does not provide a whole lot of information regarding the opposing view. I also think that you should further expand on the New Jersey example. It seems like this could be another section by itself as it directly relates to the issue as well as our class - in terms of the treatment of blacks in America. Finally, I think you could restructure the article as many of the sections seem to just providing more examples. The flow of the article would be better if you combined some of the sections. All in all, I think you are off to a great start! Newton3254 (talk) 15:00, 9 March 2017 (UTC)
Peer Review - Nicholas Moore
[edit]Great job adding the "Origins" section to the article, and citing all of the information as well. It was also interesting to see the example of New Jersey that you provided; this really helped to ground my understanding of how and to what degree racial profiling against blacks while driving really occurred. Although the "Generalizations" section was not part of your contribution to the article, it could use some attention. This section should either be eliminated and the information moved to another section, or the section should be expanded enough that "Generalization" is appropriate to be its own section. The section of the article titled "Examples" could also use an update and some re-organization. The most recent example is from 2014, but the sections begins with an example from 2009, and ends with an example from 2002 - consider arranging these examples in chronological order to make the section easier to read, and more helpful to the reader. Overall your contributions sound encyclopedic and add to the value of the article!