User talk:Stefanija Kovacevic/Rhagoletis mendax
Hey Stef, it looks like you're off to a good start. The sections that you have laid out look like they will do a good job of breaking the subject down into relevant chunks. I would suggest using in-text citations as you write because it will be easier than adding them all at the end (no in-text citations in the lead yet). Additionally, I would avoid italicizing words that are not Latin binomials (ex. "in their lifetime" in the lead) as it reduces the neutrality of your tone. Finally, make sure that your lead/intro touches on some of the material that will be covered in the article below. Doing so will help tie the article together a bit better. Cheer, Anna Annawesthaver4340 (talk) 00:38, 2 March 2020 (UTC)
Hi Stef,
You are definitely off to a great start. I have a list of some suggestions for you:
1. The sentence "The larva then falls into the soil and pupates" I would change "into" to "to".
2. The following sentence "Blueberry maggot infestations are generally controlled chemically[2]." I would prefer that you are specific and use the term chemical insecticide.
3. The following sentence "It attacks several species of blueberry and related plants" I would add the species (latin names) of blueberries for high and low bush in brackets. I would also change "plants" to species. Lastly CABI has some information on other species that it uses as a host which would be good to include in your section on hosts.
4. When you click on the term "apodous" it does not give you any link to a definition. Can you fix this?
5. The following sentence should be completed - "The abdomen of females is pointed and has four horizontal bands of fine white setae separating the sections, while the male abdomen is more rounded and has only three[3][5]" by adding horizontal bands of setae.
6.remove "real-time" from the sentence with biochemical testing. Regular PCR is fine. Real-time PCR is only necessary if you are looking ot quantify the concentration of DNA.
7. Is the ovipositor of this fly serrated?
8. Under the distribution section it states both coasts of Canada and the US. To me this implies that it is present in west but we do not have this species in BC. We are concerned about the potential for moving into BC since we have the largest blueberry industry by far! It is also not found in Newfoundland. I would revise this sentence.
9. Is there an on-line DD calculator that you could add a link to?
10. You need to spend some time on controls - there is lots of papers on trapping, pesticides, etc that you could add to this section. I have provided a reference to one below and I will email you 2 other pdf's.
Lastly, I would try not to rely to heavily on reference #2. It is very heavily used throughout your article. Great work so far. If you have any questions don't hesitate to contact me. I am always available on-line.
Michelle
Reference: Deployment and Utility of Traps for Management of Rhagoletis mendax (Diptera: Tephritidae) Sonia O. Gaul, Willis T. A. Neilson, Evans N. Stabrooks, Lorne M. Crozier, Mac Fuller — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sustainable pest (talk • contribs) 03:37, 25 March 2020 (UTC)