User talk:Sr101skl
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Peer Review
[edit]I added a peer review to your article! Jamieturner11 (talk) 19:03, 7 November 2023 (UTC)
Peer review of African-American dance
[edit]Lead
[edit]Guiding questions:
Be sure to begin with an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the topic. Think a dictionary definition.
The article is long enough that the lead could be beefed up quite a bit. You could have a paragraph on history, then another on social meaning, a third on tradition and cultural expression.
The lead currently includes information that is not repeated elsewhere in the article. For instance, the list of African American dance companies is not repeated elsewhere. Your lead should contain no new information, only stuff that is also stated in the body of the article.
Content
[edit]When you mention specific scholars (such as Katrina Thompson), it's always a good idea to give a few words of context: "Historian Katrian Thompson found that..." (or whatever her discipline is).
Your section on New York City and Harlem Renaissance should mention the minstrel show and Master Juba!
Fix the "citation needed" markers.
The lists in the social dance section would better be converted into prose.
Likewise the list of dancers under modern dance.
Why not merge the liturgical/spiritual section into the cultural expression section? The sacred/liturgical section is only one paragraph long, so it should probably be merged into another section. It might also belong in the tradition section, which is also only one paragraph long.
Tone and Balance
[edit]This is good.
Sources and References
[edit]This is good.
Organization
[edit]No worries here.
Images and Media
[edit]Very good.
Overall impressions
[edit]Over all, this is great work. My suggestions would push this to be the best it could be, but you've already done an admirable job. Abukun (talk) 19:10, 12 December 2023 (UTC)