User talk:Spapa003/sandbox

Prof Garcia's Comments

This is EXCEPTIONAL, Sergio! You have done an amazing job here! I commend you for all of this - well done! As you move forward, maybe consider taking a look at the new phenomenon of "ze/zer/zis" and other genderless pronouns that exist. Make sure that you take a look at the work of gender scholars such as Cecilia Ridgeway. A quick and easy thing to do is to take a look at who teaches gender courses on campus and email those professors to ask for particular suggestions on what to include. But well done, Sergio. You are doing so well. Alfgarciamora (talk) 13:34, 6 October 2016 (UTC)

Week 6: You are doing such great work, Sergio! Wow! Keep up the great work! =) As you write, make sure you continue citing your sources (like you do) so that you can remember where that information came from. I look forward to seeing what you produce. Alfgarciamora (talk) 12:42, 12 October 2016 (UTC)

@Spapa003: Sergio: you have seriously done such an amazing job here. I am so impressed with you and your work! As you finish moving everything to your mainspace, make sure that you edit your language so that it is more encyclopedic and that the structure of the page is in line with the Wikipedia style. Just take a look at well-crafted pages online and see what makes them so well-crafted. Mirror yours on those pages. But well done, Sergio. I commend you for a job well done. Alfgarciamora (talk) 20:13, 4 November 2016 (UTC)

Thank you very much for your advice Professor @Alfgarciamora:. I am waiting for professor Ritchie's suggestions about the genderless language . He well knows about queer studies and I hope I can get some suggestions from him. Also, I am reading some articles and getting some ideas on how to make the page more encyclpedic. Spapa003 (talk) 03:24, 9 November 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review

Hello! I have chosen your very interesting page to peer review for this week's assignment. I was reading your work and found that it was very easy to read and had a clear idea as to what it was that you have planned for the future of your page. It was very interesting how you chose to add "nonsexist language" it is definitely something which was missing. I also noticed that it was a topic which is very prevalent today; however, I would suggest that you remember to keep an unbiased voice when writing on your final page. I cannot wait to continue to read your work and see how the page improves. Mvale086 (talk) 23:49, 18 October 2016 (UTC)

Thank you very much for your feedback. I will keep in mind about the unbiased voice more because this topic is very controversy today not only because of the feminist issue but also adding the third gender noun and pronouns for transgender people in some culture. --Spapa003 (talk) 02:09, 24 October 2016 (UTC)Spapa003 (talk) 03:22, 9 November 2016 (UTC)