User talk:Sloth Mode/Corvus

The content provides a neutral and well-balanced addition to the article. However, some of your sources are not drawn from peer-reviewed sources. It may be further helpful to know that you can reuse your previously mentioned citations rather than creating a second citation for the same article. The structure of your content could also be enhanced with a couple minor edits that I will suggest next. “They have also been known to associate with other animals like coyotes and wolves. These associations are linked to feeding and hunting.” This statement could be made more concise by creating a single sentence. You could change this to: They have also been known to form associations with other animals like coyotes and wolves, which are linked to feeding and hunting. “They are also known to trust wolves in the pack they follow, when encountering a carcass killed by animals other than wolves they will be more apprehensive to eat from it.” This is an awkwardly long sentence that could be split into two separate sentences. You could change this to: They are also known to trust the wolves in the pack they follow. When encountering a carcass that was not killed by a wolf, they will be more apprehensive to scavenge from it. “In the past there have been plenty of studies conducted on how ravens and corvids in general learn. Some of these studies have concluded that the brains of ravens and crows compare in relative size to great apes.” The end of sentence is awkward. It could be enhanced with citations (even by reciting previously mentioned articles). You could change this to: In the past, there have been several studies conducted on how corvids — with a particular focus on ravens — learn. Some of these studies show that the brains of ravens and crows relatively compare in size to that of great apes. “Even though the brain differs significantly between mammals and birds we can see larger forebrains in corvids than other birds (except some parrots), especially in areas associated with social learning, planning, decision making in humans and complex cognition in apes.” This is another long sentence that could be split into two separate sentences. You could change this to: Although there are significant differences between the brains of mammals and birds, there are larger forebrains in corvids than other birds (except some species of parrot). This difference impacts areas associated with social learning, planning, decision making in humans, and complex cognition in apes. I feel that these few minor tweaks could make your contributions more polished, but you are doing a fantastic job overall! Keep up the great work 😊 Strike2426 (talk) 23:19, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

I have created a peer-review for the draft of your article contribution. Overall I felt that your contribution was quite well written although in my opinion you article could benefit from more reliable sources as noted in my review. I did like the addition of the photo and thought it added a good visual aspect to your draft as the reader can visualize how ravens and wolves interact. I believe your article would also benefit from reviewing statements you have made and ensuring they are backed up by reliable references as stated in my review. I think you have a great start to your article contribution and some minor editing can really bring it all together! PricklyFish (talk) 00:17, 1 November 2021 (UTC)