User talk:Sl2763/sandbox
Peer Review
[edit]Hello Sl2763! I read through your final paragraphs, and I found them very informative. I liked how you referenced multiple studies and sources, as it helped with the clarity and credibility of the information. One of the strengths of these edits is how you took the original piece and expanded on many of the key words, including the time frame. Furthermore, finishing it with requesting more studies shows that there could be more information out there to discover, and you have already used all the available information that there is to find. The only suggestion I can think to give is embedding a few hyperlinks into some of the keywords of the article, such as the American Heart Association (AHA), insulin, LDL cholesterol, etc. This would make it easier for future readers to do more research and define what certain terms mean. Overall, good job! Emma wagner21 (talk) 02:12, 8 May 2018 (UTC)