Evaluations

Nuremburg

1/29/2018 Evaluation by Paul Hubbard

Spelling/Grammar

Looks good, but I would probably replace the word 'This' at the beginning of two of your sentences with the subject in question, or I would make them a continuation of the previous sentences. For example, when you said "Catholic priest Martin Luther considered this a heinous crime, and used the Gutenberg press to produce his 95 theses on a church in Wittenberg, Germany on October 31, 1517, appealing this practice. This soon led to the Reformation."; I might have either put it as "Catholic priest Martin Luther considered this a heinous crime, and used the Gutenberg press to produce his 95 theses on a church in Wittenberg, Germany on October 31, 1517, appealing this practice, which soon led to the Reformation.", or made a new sentence saying something like "The 95 theses written by Martin Luther eventually lead to the Reformation." Other than that, I think everything looks great. Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 01:41, 30 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Language

Looks great! Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 01:12, 30 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Organization

Looks great! Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 01:12, 30 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Coding

Everything looks good, but I would probably add a link to some more of the people and things mentioned, such as Martin Luther, the Incunabula period and the Gutenberg Press, so that people can do further reading into the subject. Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 01:23, 30 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Validity

Everything looks valid to me Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 01:24, 30 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Completion

Looks complete to me. Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 01:26, 30 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Relevance

Looks great I can't believe that no one had mentioned this before now. Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 01:27, 30 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

1/29/2018 Evaluation by caleb26

Good job. Keep up the good work. I can’t wait to see what other topics you touch on.

Points: 39/40
Grade: 98%

Spelling/Grammar

Meets standard I would recommend looking at the grammar and punctuation of the sentence that starts with, “Once printing was…” You might consider breaking the sentence into two sentences.

Language

Meets standard There does not appear to be any issues with tone. On another note, it might be a good idea to have more consistency in the list of mostly countries that appears in the final sentence.

Organization

Meets standard. The part that references art could possibly be separate from the part that addresses the printing press and Martin Luther.

Coding

Meets standard. I do not see any errors in coding.

Validity

Meets standard. The information seems valid based upon a short search of basic facts. It may be advisable to acquire additional citations that are from peer review sources.

Completion

Nearly meets standard. The length of the article certainly meets the requirements of the assignment. However, the article does not appear to have any citations from peer reviewed sources.

Relevance

Meets standard. The starting art sentences feels relevant. I just feel as if it should be expanded. The printing press part and the connection with Martin Luther seems very important.

Sources

Meets standard. There are no references made to peer reviewed articles. The citation of ‘’Nuremberg, a Renaissance City, 1500-1618’’ looks very promising though.

Citations

Meets standard All of the sentences have been cited properly.

References

Meets standard. The references seem to have all the relevant information. However, they are not in a consistent format.

1/29/2018 Evaluation by Bportis

Great addition to the Nuremberg page!

Grade: 'A'

Spelling/Grammar

Meets standard Overall very good, I would attach some of these sentences together such as "Prior to this, it became the place where movable type was first used successfully and it was also the birthplace of the Gutenberg Press in 1450’s. [2] This was the brainchild of Johannes Gutenberg. [2]". I would suggest changing this to something like " Prior to this, it became the place where movable type was first used successfully and it was also the birthplace of the Gutenberg Press in 1450’s, [2] which was the brainchild of Johannes Gutenberg. [2]"

Language

Exceeds standard Good use of a neutral language and no contractions.

Organization

Meets standard. Everything looks good, just need a heading.

Coding

Meets standard. Could add some links to the Wikipedia page for things like "Martin Luther".

Validity

Meets standard. Everything looks great. Solid information.

Completion

Meets standard. It's almost there with just a little touching up to do.

Relevance

Meets standard. No irrelevant content. Looks like a great addition to the Nuremberg page.

Sources

Meets standard. 3 quality sources, looks good!

Citations

Exceeds standard Present and in perfect notation format, good citations!

References

Meets standard. Great format that matches the Nuremberg page.

Evaluations Part 2

Very good. I love all the academic journals that are being cited.

02/23/2018 Evaluation by caleb26

caleb26 (talk) 12:58, 24 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Points: 38.5/40
Grade: 96%

Spelling/Grammar

Nearly Meets Standard There are just a few sentences that could be checked for grammar or typos: 2,4, and 8. For the second you would probably want to say: "It is considered to be one of the top two most discussed topics in the country." If you want to maintain the current style I would simply suggest removing the "most". For the fourth sentence I would just change "requires" to "requirements". For the eighth sentence I would simply remove "the" from before "...World War II..."

Language

Meets Standard There are a few areas that have contractions which should be changed.

Organization

Meets Standard I feel almost like the Turkish immigrants could have their own section as their seems to be a lot of information about them. There could possibly be a section talking about religious differences or struggles that the immigrants have with relation to the local population.

Coding

Meets Standard Just the one that is mentioned in the sources section.

Validity

Meets standard Everything that is touched on seems verifiable.

Completion

Meets Standard The assignment calls for ten sources and two paragraphs of text: both are present. At least six sources seem to be academic journals.

Relevance

Meets Standard This seems pertinent to the subtopics selected.

Sources

Exceeds Standard Outstanding. More than half of your sources are academic journals.

Citations

Meets Standard Good job. Every sentence has a citation.

References

Nearly meets standard. You asked for feedback on your third source which has the external link error. I believe to fix it you'll need to change the http://wwww.tandfonline.com to be what the website's title is not what its url is. So, you could put "Taylor Francis Online" as the name that goes in that field. As for the others, I would see if you could put a "retrieved [date]" section on the end of each of these. The second source has one but it is not at the end of the source.

2/26/2018 Evaluation by Bportis

Overall Comments

Hey Shayla, This is a great addition to the Berlin page. After a few spelling and grammatical edits this will be perfect!

Points: 38.5/40

Grade: 96.25%

Spelling/Grammar

Nearly meets standard. In the second sentence, there is a grammatical error "two most hottest topics". In the fourth sentence change requires to requirements. In sentence eight you can remove "the" before World War II. In the sentence where you used full-proof, " Germany's program was not full-proof, " you should use foolproof. Two sentences following that, scenario is misspelled.

Language

Nearly Meets standard. In the second sentence I would say "Immigration is currently an important topic in Germany", or something along those lines. Overall good encyclopedic tone and diction.

Organization

Meets standard. Great paragraphs and headers, good organization. Good job!

Coding

Exceeds standard. Lots of links to other pages, looks great.

Validity

Exceeds standard. Good and valid information pertaining to Immigration to Berlin, and Living/Integrating.

Completion

Nearly Meets standard. You have enough sources, just need to fix some spelling and grammatical errors.

Relevance

Exceeds standard. I think that this is all relevant information for the Berlin page.

Sources

Exceeds standard. You have enough sources, and they are high quality as well. Good job!

Citations

Exceeds standard. Citations everywhere that is necessary.

References

Nearly meets standard. References are in great format that matches the Berlin page, except for #2. Caleb posted above on how to fix this.

2/28/2018 Evaluation by Paul

Overall Comments

Looks good! There was one thing that I noticed that the others did not touch on. Keep reading to see what that was.

Spelling/Grammar

Meets standard Good job!

Language

Meets standard I would have probably said "Immigration puts a strain on many social..." in the sentence "It puts strain on many social and governmental aspects of a country, such as its "...social services, local schools, property taxes, language standards, etc.,"". If the sentence in question were a stand alone sentence, no one would know what 'it' is. I think you could have also had a semi-colon instead of a period before the statement in question in order to continue with the previous noun representing the word it... I think.

Organization

Meets standard. Hey! Yet another good job!

Coding

Meets standard. Looks good!

Validity

Meets standard. Super valid!

Completion

Meets standard. It's complete. You did the thing!

Relevance

Meets standard. As relevant as it gets.

Sources

Meets standard. Sources for days.

Citations

Meets standard You cited that thing! Good job!

References

Meets standard. Referenced it up! Not bad at all!