User talk:Seunathm
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Hello! I've been selected to review your edit ! Speaking specifically about the domestic section of this article I think this section does a fine job of outlining how the United States is handling this situation. You did a good job of drawing attention to the specific legislation each state presents in regard to this issue. The references you chose are relevant and valid. I suggest that the wording of certain sentences change in order to create a better flow. Perhaps instead of “in Pennsylvania, they allow..” say “Pennsylvania allows..” Also, I believe that the phrase “taken the lead” should be removed from the second sentence because it makes the tone less impartial. Also I suggest removing “More broadly speaking” in the last sentence. All in all I found the article informative and enjoyed reviewing your edit. Amuzzarelli (talk) 02:22, 10 November 2014 (UTC)
Revert on User talk:Jenniwisniewski
[edit]I'm sorry about the revert there! I clicked on the button for the wrong page! My apologies! --I am k6ka Talk to me! See what I have done 23:16, 28 October 2014 (UTC)
Peer review
[edit]Cecile Flapjack (talk) 14:59, 8 November 2014 (UTC) Hello! I have been assigned to review your additions to the Domestic portion of Use of restraints on pregnant women. I really like that this was a topic you picked! First off, I love the several citations you added to this section. It seems as though it didn't have much before you came in to fix that! I also think the information you added was crucial to really flesh out that section and provide specific state's views. If you were planning on adding more, I would add info from southern states, southwestern states, or even Alaska and Hawaii if you can find it. I also suggest you reword the sentences you added some, just so that they appear less essay-like. For example, remove "furthermore" from the beginning sentence describing how many women were shackled in Pennsylvania. The sentence summarizing the Massachusetts law also felt a bit clunky to me, I would probably having worded it like "Massachusetts passed an act in April 2014 and is among these states that allow restraints to be used in extraordinary circumstances." I really enjoyed reviewing your edits, keep it up! Have a good one! :)