User talk:Senorcrestcells/sandbox
Feedback from a BIOL 463 Student
[edit]Great work! Here are some suggestions for how to improve:
In the introduction, I think you could better explain craniosynostosis and syndactyly in lay terms, rather than just hyperlinking.
I'd suggest you clarify the following phrases:
"When polydactyly is present, the classification is acrocephalopolysyndactyly."
--> Does this mean that you only need polydactyly to have this classification? I'm not quite sure what you mean by this sentence, maybe it could be rephrased.
" although prenatal diagnosis is possible if the mutation is known to be within the family genome."
---> it might be more clear to say something like: if there is a family history of this genetic mutation (or this disease)
" involves surgery in early childhood to correct for craniosynostosis and syndactyly. "
----> how do they correct for it? Removing digits, separating them?
"Acrocephalosyndactyly presents in numerous different subtypes, however, considerable overlap in symptoms occurs"
---> Does this mean that there are many different subtypes of Acrocephalosyndactyl, each with different phenotypes or genotypes? I would mention here what makes the subtypes different: do they have different phenotypes or do they have mutations in different genes?
I hope these suggestions help! I would really appreciate it if you have time to leave a comment on our group's draft as well.
Thanks :) Studentjen (talk) 22:23, 20 November 2023 (UTC)