User talk:Sadeghm2010/sandboxsemailophiolite

Nice wiki page, it is very straightforward and the image seems much better than I remember from the last class workshop. Other than the grammatical issues that have been discussed, it seems like a well put together and concise page.

You might consider expanding the verbiage a little bit to approach a wider base of people who can understand the topic.

Adam Turner

Nice job with your Wikipedia page! I only found a few errors, the most common ones being grammatical. There are several instances where capitalization is needed and commas should be used. Under the "Tectonic setting" section, I would make each idea a subcategory or create a bulleted list; this will make it easier to follow. My final suggestion is that you really need to create more links to other Wikipedia pages so other users can easily look something up if they get lost. Melissausburn (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 13:14, 15 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback from sara8s001

The page needs a title.

In the introduction, mention which tectonic plates are responsible for the formation and also the spreading center where the volcanic rocks originated.

The "Significance of tectonic setting" section needs clarification. It will not be clear to the reader what you are trying to explain or the significance of it.

In the "Geologic Formations" section, a further explanation of the low and high structure for the thrust sheets would be a beneficial addition.

Your original figure is good. There are a few misspellings and the ophiolite should be labeled in all three steps to make the process more clear.

Sara8s001 (talk) 18:21, 13 October 2013 (UTC)sara8s001[reply]

Hello,

The overall content and structure of the page looks great. A few things to note/change:

Figure 2: In the text below the figure, you should have a sentence or two explaining what is happening at parts A, B, and C (It is labeled A again).

Grammar: Capitalize "Oman" in the intro.

Grammar: Hyphens are not needed for northeastern.

Grammar: Every occurrence of Semail should be capitalized.

Grammar: "The semail ophiolite is very important because it provides valuable information about the ocean floor on land and allow geologist to study it ." Reword this sentence. Is it only the ocean floor that is important?

Grammar: Capitalize all "late," "early," and "middle" words before geologic times. Example, Early Cretaceous.

Grammar: Place a space between numbers and units. Example, 10 km.

Grammar: Change "on" to "in" for the first sentence under Geologic Formations.

Content: The "Tectonic setting" section should undergo a title change.

Content: The different models need better explanations.

Content: The significance of the ophiolite needs to be explained.

Chasebill (talk) 02:41, 14 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Minor grammatical errors, I'm not quite sure how to fix them. Link or explain uranium-lead dating. The reference section could use a little bit of fixing up, such as not capitalizing the entire title of references. Garrniel (talk) 19:39, 18 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Structure of the page flows well. There are some grammar mistakes as stated already. I can try to help you straighten those out if needed. The gravity model explanation was kind of short so maybe elaborate on that a little more. Also as Chase mentioned, what is the significance of these ophiolites? Explain that in more detail maybe. The figures are a little big so maybe scale those down a bit. Other than that, good job. Sosbor6 (talk) 02:46, 19 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]