User talk:Rebecca Topper/Esther Raab

This is very cool and I am excited to read it! Big fan :) <3 Sarah Sarah Silberman (talk) 21:05, 4 November 2019 (UTC)

Julia Peer Review!

Hi Rebecca! I thought this was great! There are a few sentences in the biography section that could use a little proofing (for example, "In late 1909, aged fifteen, the moshava’s school became co-ed and Raab, aged fifteen, she was prohibited by her father from attending" could turn into "In late 1909, when Raab was fifteen, the Moshava's school became co-ed, though her father prohibited her from attending.") Aside from that I thought all of the information was good. Maybe you could add how she died (not sure how important that is!) and expand upon what the difficulties were that she faced towards the last years of her life. Also, the introduction mentions her use of "native landscape" in her imagery, so it could maybe be cool to see a new section dedicated to the themes of her poetry? This is something I'm planning on adding to mine too but haven't gotten around to yet haha. But overall it looks good! Jnf2 (talk) 23:12, 10 November 2019 (UTC)

Hey Rebecca! Great job with your additions. I especially think the introduction sentence about Raab is really good. Now for a few suggestions…In the biography section, there seems to have been a disconnect from the fourth to fifth sentence. It’s probably just from integrating your ideas with what was already written. Also, in the fourth sentence you talk about Raab being unable to attend the moshava’s school, and it would be nice to have a bit more context here, so the reader knows how impactful this actually was on Raab. For example, you could discuss how many women actually attended these co-ed schools or how the schools changed the relationship between men and women in academia. I think more information about the themes Raab explored in her poetry would be helpful too. You could specifically describe the themes in her first and second collections or possibly describe how her work changed over time. Another idea would be to look at how the topics she wrote about compared to topics men wrote about. Also, I’m sure you have citations for the awards and published works, but it doesn’t look like they’re cited right now. Anyway, great job! See you in class tomorrow! Sfh3 (talk) 01:14, 11 November 2019 (UTC)