User talk:Ramya O/sandbox2
Hi! This page is still a work in progress. Ramya
Hi! Your page is coming along very nicely! My only real comment is to include your sources within the text so that you can reference the source the information came from. It is also helpful to use the full name of your disease throughout the page. It is also helpful if you define some of the terms you use within the page by referencing other wiki pages that were created. The use of internal links is a good way to make sure everyone will understand things such as symptoms and diagnoses. Overall, the page is detailed and very informative! -Jessica Young — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jyoung6 (talk • contribs) 01:12, 14 November 2017 (UTC)
Your page looks very nice!I like the inclusion of the picture that shows the inheritance of the mutation. I would suggest to add in-text citations because I noticed there was only a few of them; the citations will make it easier for the reader to visit the site the specific information was obtained from. I think you did a very good job in your symptoms sections; I really like how you explained each symptom instead of just listing them. Lastly, I noticed that the mechanisms section was toward the end of the page, but I would suggest to move it towards the beginning of the wiki page, I feel that it will flow better that way. Overall nice job on your wiki page and all of the information that you have included is very detailed and understandable. Rraspberry (talk) 07:06, 14 November 2017 (UTC)
This is Kyriakos Papalexatos reviewing. Your article is great, especially your symptoms section, its very clear and concise. I would add more to your abstract, that is really a place where you could add some additional information even from the other sections, especially for people who might not need to review the rest of your section who just want a general understanding. Also add some more links that link back to other articles in wikipedia for specific terms that all readers might not understand. Also add some additional recent research. Kyriakos Papalexatos — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2601:243:300:A369:F1E9:813C:F728:6C63 (talk) 18:31, 14 November 2017 (UTC)
- The name is Parkes Weber Syndrome
- Do not label your abstract. That should be automatic and does not need a header.
- I would like to see the historical and confusion information from the old abstract incorporated.
- Link more terms (like the vascular system)
- Some of these symptoms are very visual and have pictures in wikimedia already. I would encourage you to use them.
- Make sure to define important terms like arteriovenous fistulas
- Nice symptom list with clear descriptions for most, but some symptoms are repeated within the list. Clean that up.
- You have some citations, but not enough and some sections are really weak on citations.
- Recent research should be discussed and cited normally. Should not have links.
- This is a great start! There's a lot of good information here, but you need a lot more citations and linking, and some pictures would help.